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At 10 I went to a boarding school, in the hills away from my parents, where I experienced the most beautiful and eventful 4 years of my life and left with so many stories and friends for life. The 172 year old institution which resonated with the legacy of the British and smelled of fresh oak and pine has had a deep effect on me and in my time there shaped me into who I am today. With military drills and routine, discipline entered my life and has ever since played a major role. Being so close to nature there I learnt to appreciate and adore the beauty that it displays, how simple and effortless it seems yet the complexities remain oblivious to the eye. My family is my strength and the value of relationships is something I learnt while I was away from home.Speaking of home, we have long exploited natural resources and subsequently degraded the bounties of nature, which has now led to a time where that could spell out the end of our race. Being a nature lover myself I have taken it upon myself to fight climate change by creating awareness and taking action. Through my efforts I have planted 1500 trees in two months along with 150 volunteers who have joined me in my mission. Today danger looms over us and our future and we need to wake up for it is of utmost importance that we make conscious efforts to make reparations before its too late. | At 10, I went to a boarding school, in the hills away from my parents, where I experienced the most beautiful and eventful 4 years of my life and left with so many stories and friends for life. The 172-year-old institution which resonated with the legacy of the British and smelled of fresh oak and pine has had a deep effect on me and in my time there shaped me into who I am today. With military drills and routine, discipline entered my life and has ever since played a major role. Being so close to nature there I learned to appreciate and adore the beauty that it displays, how simple and effortless it seems, yet the complexities remain oblivious to the eye. My family is my strength and the value of relationships is something I learned while I was away from home. Speaking of home, we have long exploited natural resources and subsequently degraded the bounties of nature, which has now led to a time when that could spell out the end of our race. Being a nature lover myself I have taken it upon myself to fight climate change by creating awareness and taking action. Through my efforts I have planted 1500 trees in two months along with 150 volunteers who have joined me in my mission. Today danger looms over us and our future, and we need to wake up for it is of utmost importance that we make conscious efforts to make reparations before It's too late. |
One of my friends, Monika Niraula, studied liberal arts in the Lafayette from 2013 to 2017. So, I asked her which college I should apply for undergraduate physics. She replied," Why don't you apply to Lafayette college? It is very good for physics." Hence, I decided to do a little bit of research on Lafayette and decided to apply to it. After my research I found that Lafayette physics curriculum provides several physics major and minor option to choose from. It is fascinating that I could choose specific courses that I find the most appealing. Similarly, student have access to advance physics laboratories, and astronomy observation. Being able to combine my undergraduate studies with excellent scientific research and observation will be a fantastic opportunity. Besides, from Monika Niraula I got to know that Lafayette college is like a community where students feel a sense of belonging and regard the college as their second home. I believe this aspect of human need, a sense of belonging, is very important as it improves our motivation, mental health, and happiness. I can be assured that Lafayette college will bring best out of me and help me grow in both academic and personal life. | One of my friends, Monika Circular, studied liberal arts in the Lafayette from 2013 to 2017. So, I asked her which college I should apply for undergraduate physics. She replied," Why don't you apply to Lafayette college? It is very good for physics." Hence, I decided to do a bit of research on Lafayette and decided to apply to it. After my research I found that Lafayette physics curriculum provides several physics major and minor option to choose from. It is fascinating that I could choose specific courses that I find the most appealing. Similarly, student have access to advance physics laboratories, and astronomy observation. Being able to combine my undergraduate studies with excellent scientific research and observation will be a fantastic opportunity. Besides, from Monika Circular I got to know that Lafayette college is like a community where students feel a sense of belonging and regard the college as their second home. I believe this aspect of human need, a sense of belonging, is very important as it improves our motivation, mental health, and happiness. I can be assured that Lafayette college will bring best out of me and help me grow in both academic and personal life. |
I am obsessed with anything that flies: aircraft, rockets, and more. At Purdue, I can explore my interests through numerous educational and extracurricular programs. Studying within the School of Aeronautics and Astronautics will allow me to follow in the footsteps of some of my greatest personal idols: Neil Armstrong, Virgil Grissom, and Eugene Cernan. I will be able to apply my knowledge through extracurricular activities such as Design Build Fly and the AIAA Space Transportation Design Competition. The physics greatly fascinate me, and studying at Purdue will allow me to dive deeper and strive for success in the aerospace industry. | I am obsessed with anything that flies: aircraft, rockets, and more. At Purdue, I can explore my interests through numerous educational and extracurricular programs. Studying within the School of Aeronautics and Astronautics will allow me to follow in the footsteps of some of my greatest personal idols: Neil Armstrong, Virgil Frisson, and Eugene Hernán. I will be able to apply my knowledge through extracurricular activities such as Design Build Fly and the AIAA Space Transportation Design Competition. The physics greatly fascinate me, and studying at Purdue will allow me to dive deeper and strive for success in the aerospace industry. |
Why my major and why Georgia Tech Juno I, Atlas-Agena, Mercury-Redstone. These are some of the rockets displayed at the rocket garden at the Kennedy Space Center. As I took in the immensity of each structure, another feeling washed over me: desire. A desire to one day design something as marvellous, iconic and complex as these rockets, maybe even fly in one. With the growing movement to begin to colonize the Moon and even send manned missions to Mars, my interest in rocket science has piqued, wanting to be a part of this challenge. The aerospace program is a highly regarded program and can open the door to reach my goals. The opportunities are vast and can help me learn new skills, improve upon current one, and also keep me active socially. Undergraduate entrepreneurship, research, and internship opportunities will help me grasp new skills early on and apply them to my graduate studies and later on. The diverse clubs will also cultivate my interest in aerospace and bring it to a new level. With clubs such as the American Institute of Aeronautics and Astronautics (AIAA) and the Yellow Jacket Flying and Space programs, I can interact with others who have similar interests and discuss their experiences, which will improve me not only academically, but personally. I also believe Georgia Tech has opportunities to help foster social interaction and relaxation, rather than an acute focus on only academics. Clubs like India club and GT Qurbani dance team can help me experience more of my culture and harbor my knowledge of my home country. Other clubs such as Esports at Georgia Tech and Human vs. Zombies will encourage me to find time away from studies to hang out with friends with similar interests and serve new interests I acquire. | Why my major and why Georgia Tech Juno I, Atlas-Agena, Mercury-Redstone. These are some rockets displayed at the rocket garden at the Kennedy Space Center. As I took in the immensity of each structure, another feeling washed over me: desire. A desire to one day design something as marvelous, iconic and complex as these rockets, maybe even fly in one. With the growing movement to begin to colonize the Moon and even send manned missions to Mars, my interest in rocket science has piqued, wanting to be a part of this challenge. The aerospace program is a highly regarded program and can open the door to reach my goals. The opportunities are vast and can help me learn new skills, improve upon current one, and also keep me active socially. Undergraduate entrepreneurship, research, and internship opportunities will help me grasp new skills early on and apply them to my graduate studies and later on. The diverse clubs will also cultivate my interest in aerospace and bring it to a new level. With clubs such as the American Institute of Aeronautics and Astronautics (AIAA) and the Yellow Jacket Flying and Space programs, I can interact with others who have similar interests and discuss their experiences, which will improve me not only academically, but personally. I also believe Georgia Tech has opportunities to help foster social interaction and relaxation, rather than an acute focus on only academics. Clubs like India club and GT Urban dance team can help me experience more of my culture and harbor my knowledge of my home country. Other clubs such as Esports at Georgia Tech and Human vs. Zombies will encourage me to find time away from studies to hang out with friends with similar interests and serve new interests I acquire. |
Of all the insecurities and struggles of life, something I know for sure is my enthusiast, striving to chase my dream of being an ambassador. I am the "one-knows-all" kid that you might find as it is regarded by most of my teachers and friends. With some natural ability and determination, I outperform many others academically and non-academically of attaining several scholarships and awards and participated in various competitions. At home, I am considered an independent person by my family members of taking responsibilities and considerations over issues with my strong personality and a decisive mind. Both my teachers and parents share their high expectations of me that I almost collapse under the pressure but my life goal of perfection never allowed me to give up. I am not perfect and I never will be but stopping before trying is not within my remit | Of all the insecurities and struggles of life, something I know for sure is my enthusiast, striving to chase my dream of being an ambassador. I am the "one-knows-all" kid that you might find as it is regarded by most of my teachers and friends. With some natural ability and determination, I outperform many others academically and non-academically of attaining several scholarships and awards and participated in various competitions. At home, I am considered an independent person by my family members of taking responsibilities and considerations over issues with my strong personality and a decisive mind. Both my teachers and parents share their high expectations of me that I almost collapse under the pressure, but my life goal of perfection never allowed me to give up. I am not perfect, and I never will be but stopping before trying is not within my remit |
My name is Mohammed Mansour, and I am very dedicated to pursuing a career in computer science and Engineering so that I have chosen to study at Korean Universities as they are one of the world's leading universities that offering Excellent education and high technology across a variety of fields. Since my country is still lagging far behind in computer science and engineering from the modern revolution in terms of experience and knowledge, I believe bringing in highly educated and skilled engineers to share their knowledge and expertise will help a lot in moving the country forward, thus studying in Korea will provide me with enough knowledge, experience and skills in this concerned area so that I contribute in serving my country in an effective way. moreover, studying in Korea will be a great opportunity for me to learn additional language as one of my greatest goals is to learn seven languages, I am confident that this scholarship will step me closer to my goal of becoming a polyglot. furthermore, for me it will be a precious experience to know the culture of Korea and the different kind of traditions and customs of Korean people and to be in touch with student from all over the world and learn about their culture and values. Also I have a few friends studying in Korea and they are full of admiration for Korea and it is universities and, consequently, it was very encouraging for me to apply for this scholarship. I grew up as an older brother in a family with nine members. my father is a driver while my mother is a housewife. we never had luxuries but we never lacked the necessary things to live thanks to the great efforts of my parents. fortunately, we were raised by strong values in an environment of respect and humility, where I learned what discipline, responsibility and effort are. when I had got high grades at elementary school my parents decide that they want me to have a good education so that we moved from our small village to Khartoum the national capital of Sudan where I studied for like three years in a high school. Because of that I am currently studying Electrical Engineering at Sudan university and meanwhile studying Japanese language at the African and Asian studies institute. It was 2017, when I had an opportunity to take apart on '' personal strategic planning'' training in my universityI have never thought it will be a critical point in my life from which everything flows even to today. but it was, it disciplined my thoughts to create important decisions and actions that shape what is truly important to me. decisions that will positively affect my future like being a polyglot which I started to make it true by learning Japanese, and after getting the KGSP I will be able to learn Korean in addition to English and of course German which it is my next goal after Korean.Even because of it I decided to become the number one swimmer in the whole middle east which is a goal that I am going to pursue when I come to Korea by having a swimming course there. Every goal and thing that I did till now return to that day. | My name is Mohammed Man sour, and I am very dedicated to pursuing a career in computer science and Engineering so that I have chosen to study at Korean Universities as they are one of the world's leading universities that offering Excellent education and high technology across a variety of fields. Since my country is still lagging far behind in computer science and engineering from the modern revolution in terms of experience and knowledge, I believe bringing in highly educated and skilled engineers to share their knowledge and expertise will help a lot in moving the country forward, thus studying in Korea will provide me with enough knowledge, experience and skills in this concerned area so that I contribute in serving my country effectively. Moreover, studying in Korea will be a great opportunity for me to learn additional language as one of my greatest goals is to learn seven languages, I am confident that this scholarship will step me closer to my goal of becoming a polyglot. Furthermore, for me, it will be a precious experience to know the culture of Korea and the different kind of traditions and customs of Korean people and to be in touch with student from all over the world and learn about their culture and values. Also, I have a few friends studying in Korea, and they are full of admiration for Korea, and it is universities and, consequently, it was very encouraging for me to apply for this scholarship. I grew up as an older brother in a family with nine members. My father is a driver while my mother is a housewife. We never had luxuries, but we never lacked the necessary things to live thanks to the great efforts of my parents. Fortunately, we were raised by strong values in an environment of respect and humility, where I learned what discipline, responsibility and effort are. When I had got high grades at elementary school my parents decide that they want me to have a good education so that we moved from our small village to Khartoum the national capital of Sudan where I studied for like three years in a high school. Because of that I am currently studying Electrical Engineering at Sudan university and meanwhile studying Japanese language at the African and Asian studies institute. It was 2017, when I had an opportunity to take apart on '' personal strategic planning'' training in my university have never thought it will be a critical point in my life from which everything flows even to today. But it was, it disciplined my thoughts to create important decisions and actions that shape what is truly important to me. Decisions that will positively affect my future like being a polyglot which I started to make it true by learning Japanese, and after getting the KGSP I will be able to learn Korean in addition to English and of course German which it is my next goal after Korean. Even because of it I decided to become the number one swimmer in the whole Middle East which is a goal that I am going to pursue when I come to Korea by having a swimming course there. Every goal and thing that I did till now return to that day. |
Since childhood, I have aspired to be able to study abroad and I know that the fees needed is very expensive to get it. Therefore I was interested in trying out scholarships abroad when I graduated from high school. Once I searched for a number of foreign scholarships, I found a kgsp scholarship where this scholarship provided excellent facilities for scholarship recipients and could have the opportunity to continue studying at one of the best universities there. Moreover, South Korea is one of the developed countries which certainly has good quality, one of them is in terms of education. Besides that, the reason I joined this program is that I want to know and learn about culture in South Korea because the name of South Korea nowadays is very shining in the world community. So that, I apply this program to continue my study and make research by this program. I do believe in studying in South Korea with this program, it gives me a chance to enrich my knowledge and experiences there. | Since childhood, I have aspired to be able to study abroad, and I know that the fees needed is very expensive to get it. Therefore, I was interested in trying out scholarships abroad when I graduated from high school. Once I searched for a number of foreign scholarships, I found a GSP scholarship where this scholarship provided excellent facilities for scholarship recipients and could have the opportunity to continue studying at one of the best universities there. Moreover, South Korea is one of the developed countries which certainly has good quality, one of them is in terms of education. Besides that, the reason I joined this program is that I want to know and learn about culture in South Korea because the name of South Korea nowadays is very shining in the world community. So that, I apply this program to continue my study and make research by this program. I do believe in studying in South Korea with this program, it gives me a chance to enrich my knowledge and experiences there. |
"One of the great challenges of our time is that the disparities we face today have more complex causes and point less straightforwardly to solutions." Omar Wasow, assistant professor of politics, Princeton University. This quote is taken from Professor Wasow's January 2014 speech at the Martin Luther King Day celebration at Princeton University. Write about an issue you feel strongly towards in around 650 words. Growing up, my family was either attending dinner parties or hosting them. Though such occasions were meant to be fun, social gatherings, there were a number of criteria I had to keep memorized for the sake of formality. Quite possibly the most important rule was to never bring up topics that could stir controversy in conversation. During my parents' generation, the list consisted of politics, religion, and money. In my generation, it seems as if we have quietly added one more topic to the list: Climate change. Like politics, any stance on the issue can be polarizing and lead to dissension. Like money, it can cause embarrassment and incite visceral reactions. Like religion, people tend to be vehement about their views. Yet unlike these other topics, is climate change the one we should be talking about? Living in the modern age comes with the benefit of quick dissemination of information. With increased access to news and media, it's easier than ever to comprehend the sheer devastation caused by our careless actions towards the environment. Through these mediums, it becomes clear that there is a trend within our society to simply shrug off the growing dangers of climate change and 'put it off until tomorrow'. Even when people show concern, it usually isn't mirrored with action to adjust their lifestyles. Instead of accepting that we need to change, we tend to rationalize our inaction. But the biggest problem with climate change isn't inherently in inaction, it's in what kind of action. There are many stakeholders, and the problem's shape, definition, and potential solutions look different from each perspective; resulting in no true-false solutions, only better-worse ones. Global warming is a "global" dilemma and everyone has an obligation to help combat our unsustainable impact on the planet, but, unfortunately, the mismatch between when we need to act and when many of the benefits will accrue explains why climate change is such a politically and economically perplexing problem. Within our present state of society, we point fingers at others and blame them for disrupting global ecosystems, but a step-back and a reevaluation of the situation paints a vastly different picture than the one we are looking at currently. Brazil is an often cited example of ecosystemic disruption. With deforestation rates on the upswing in recent years and abundant evidence showing that the recent Amazonian fires are mostly caused by local ranchers, the country is a perfect scapegoat to blame for the myriad of issues we all face. However, it's seemingly forgotten how the Amazon provides the livelihood for over 30 million Brazilians, many of whom have no other option to escape poverty, and without the ability to get an education to work in greener industries, ranching is many Brazilians' only possible vocation. This inherent clash between the proponents to finding solutions as depicted by the situation in Brazil is what drew me to studying climate change. Taking classes in school such as government, statistics, economics, as well as involvement in debate, has allowed me to gain a deeper understanding of the nuances associated with creating plausible solutions on a national and global scale. These classes provided the stepping stone for me to get involved with efforts to combat climate change and spread awareness at the national level. But in order to pursue this newfound interest, I had to find an established, like-minded company that could provide me with the opportunity to apply the skills I learned in school to spread information to incite action while simultaneously continuing to learn more thoroughly over the topic. After reaching out to several companies, I finally heard back from Fig Bytes and was given a platform from which I could delve deeply into my interest over the impact of plastics on the environment. Any feedback is appreciated! | "One of the great challenges of our time is that the disparities we face today have more complex causes and point less straightforwardly to solutions." Omar Was ow, assistant professor of politics, Princeton University. This quote is taken from Professor Was ow's January 2014 speech at the Martin Luther King Day celebration at Princeton University. Write about an issue you feel strongly towards in around 650 words. Growing up, my family was either attending dinner parties or hosting them. Though such occasions were meant to be fun, social gatherings, there were a number of criteria I had to keep memorized for the sake of formality. Quite possibly the most important rule was to never bring up topics that could stir controversy in conversation. During my parents' generation, the list consisted of politics, religion, and money. In my generation, it seems as if we have quietly added one more topic to the list: Climate change. Like politics, any stance on the issue can be polarizing and lead to dissension. Like money, it can cause embarrassment and incite visceral reactions. Like religion, people tend to be vehement about their views. Yet unlike these other topics, is climate change the one we should be talking about? Living in the modern age comes with the benefit of quick dissemination of information. With increased access to news and media, it's easier than ever to comprehend the sheer devastation caused by our careless actions towards the environment. Through these mediums, it becomes clear that there is a trend within our society to simply shrug off the growing dangers of climate change and 'put it off until tomorrow'. Even when people show concern, it usually isn't mirrored with action to adjust their lifestyles. Instead of accepting that we need to change, we tend to rationalize our inaction. But the biggest problem with climate change isn't inherently in inaction, it's in what kind of action. There are many stakeholders, and the problem's shape, definition, and potential solutions look different from each perspective; resulting in no true-false solutions, only better-worse ones. Global warming is a "global" dilemma and everyone has an obligation to help combat our unsustainable impact on the planet, but, unfortunately, the mismatch between when we need to act and when many of the benefits will accrue explains why climate change is such a politically and economically perplexing problem. Within our present state of society, we point fingers at others and blame them for disrupting global ecosystems, but a step-back and a reevaluation of the situation paints a vastly different picture than the one we are looking at currently. Brazil is an often cited example of ecosystem disruption. With deforestation rates on the upswing in recent years and abundant evidence showing that the recent Amazonian fires are mostly caused by local ranchers, the country is a perfect scapegoat to blame for the myriad of issues we all face. However, it's seemingly forgotten how the Amazon provides the livelihood for over 30 million Brazilians, many of whom have no other option to escape poverty, and without the ability to get an education to work in greener industries, ranching is many Brazilians' only possible vocation. This inherent clash between the proponents to finding solutions as depicted by the situation in Brazil is what drew me to studying climate change. Taking classes in school such as government, statistics, economics, as well as involvement in debate, has allowed me to gain a deeper understanding of the nuances associated with creating plausible solutions on a national and global scale. These classes provided the stepping stone for me to get involved with efforts to combat climate change and spread awareness at the national level. But in order to pursue this newfound interest, I had to find an established, like-minded company that could provide me with the opportunity to apply the skills I learned in school to spread information to incite action while simultaneously continuing to learn more thoroughly over the topic. After reaching out to several companies, I finally heard back from Fig Bytes and was given a platform from which I could delve deeply into my interest over the impact of plastics on the environment. Any feedback is appreciated! |
The excessive increase of the population is becoming a real hassle not only in developing countries but also in the developed ones for the past few decades. This essay will delineate some problem resulted in overpopulation and propose resolutions to this issue The first thing to mention, as one of the major problem, is the widespread famine. The population booming has overcome the ability to supply food and, consequently, poverty who cannot afford to buy will starve to death. Moreover, it also brings the depreciation of fresh water, the loss of habitat and biodiversity. Secondly, the overpopulation is the underlying reason of the unemployment. In the overpopulation nations, the available occupations are fewer than the overall job-seeking population. It leads to the rise in crime rate, violence and the dispirited quality of life. There are two possible remedies for this acute puzzle. The first one is to raise awareness about controlled birth through campaigning both in real life and on the internet. The other solution is to put in place policies restricting population growth. The government should impose high taxes on families with more than two children and even fine them if needed. To sum up, overpopulation brings the starvation and the rise in crime rate and joblessness and should be prevented through campaigns and laws | The excessive increase of the population is becoming a real hassle not only in developing countries but also in the developed ones for the past few decades. This essay will delineate some problem resulted in overpopulation and propose resolutions to this issue The first thing to mention, as one of the major problem, is the widespread famine. The population booming has overcome the ability to supply food and, consequently, poverty who cannot afford to buy will starve to death. Moreover, it also brings the depreciation of fresh water, the loss of habitat and biodiversity. Secondly, the overpopulation is the underlying reason of the unemployment. In the overpopulation nations, the available occupations are fewer than the overall job-seeking population. It leads to the rise in crime rate, violence and the dispirited quality of life. There are two possible remedies for this acute puzzle. The first one is to raise awareness about controlled birth through campaigning both in real life and on the internet. The other solution is to put in place policies restricting population growth. The government should impose high taxes on families with more than two children and even fine them if needed. To sum up, overpopulation brings the starvation and the rise in crime rate and joblessness and should be prevented through campaigns and laws |
Most people picture a cobblestone city and a quaint cafe when they think of a place that brings inspiration. But, for every summer of my childhood, the very place that made me most creative was a town in the middle of the Sonoran desert, with no library, no cinema, nothing: Caborca, my parents' childhood home. I hated it.I hated it so much that every chance I got, I'd plan my clever escape. Except my plan for freedom wasn't a speedy ride home. Instead, just two things: a notebook and a pen. In such a small town with very little to do, I craved the impossible: tragic jungle princesses, shape shifting dragons, gates to other dimensions. My boredom was cured, for a moment. By age fourteen, I craved new stories. I read novels, comics, watched movies to discover where stories really came from. It wasn't until I came back to Caborca that I caught myself listening to family gossip. My uncle running off to his internet wife in Guatemala. My sixty year-old aunt's dream to have a quinceanera. My grandma hiding as train luggage because her parents couldn't pay the ticket... Where I longed to escape to impossible realms, now had all I wanted. Stories. And so many of them! This vast narrative all unearthed once I decided to pay attention. I started writing again. In ninth grade I participated and won second place in a regional writing competition in Mexico, with a short story about a young boy who defines himself by the legends his small town preserves. Through high school, my creative writing professor Joel Flores taught me how to transform the abundant stories around me, reminding me that I could weave fantasy into realism. He showed me every novel made a promise: to answer 'the question'. Why was there no cinema in Caborca? Why would my aunt want a quinceanera after so long? I approach new people and experiences with questions. I want to know their stories. Storytelling is no longer a medium I only use to escape boredom. Now, it's the way I connect with others. | Most people picture a cobblestone city and a quaint café when they think of a place that brings inspiration. But, for every summer of my childhood, the very place that made me most creative was a town in the middle of the Sonoran Desert, with no library, no cinema, nothing: Majorca, my parents' childhood home. I hated it. I hated it so much that every chance I got, I'd plan my clever escape. Except my plan for freedom wasn't a speedy ride home. Instead, just two things: a notebook and a pen. In such a small town with very little to do, I craved the impossible: tragic jungle princesses, shape-shifting dragons, gates to other dimensions. My boredom was cured, for a moment. By age fourteen, I craved new stories. I read novels, comics, watched movies to discover where stories really came from. It wasn't until I came back to Majorca that I caught myself listening to family gossip. My uncle running off to his internet wife in Guatemala. My sixty-year-old aunt's dream to have a quinceañera. My grandma hiding as train luggage because her parents couldn't pay the ticket... Where I longed to escape to impossible realms, now had all I wanted. Stories. And so many of them! This vast narrative all unearthed once I decided to pay attention. I started writing again. In ninth grade I participated and won second place in a regional writing competition in Mexico, with a short story about a young boy who defines himself by the legends his small town preserves. Through high school, my creative writing professor Joel Flores taught me how to transform the abundant stories around me, reminding me that I could weave fantasy into realism. He showed me every novel made a promise: to answer 'the question'. Why was there no cinema in Majorca? Why would my aunt want a quinceañera after so long? I approach new people and experiences with questions. I want to know their stories. Storytelling is no longer a medium I only use to escape boredom. Now, it's the way I connect with others. |
Even though what would once span an entire library can now fit into the palm of our hand, we as a generation are misusing that gift of information. Our generation can be characterized by Newton's first law of motion. "An object, unless acted upon by an external force, rest remains at rest" Our generation is characterized by inertia- unless pushed to learn, we tend to not seek it. Yet, through a combination of participating in debate, reading newspapers with my dad, and watching Hasan Minhaj, I was able to overcome my inertia and can remain in a state of motion for the long run. In Homecoming King, Hasan Minhaj recalled the day in September 2001, that he came home to discover his family's car had been vandalized. He realized that because he was born in the U.S., he had "the right of equality," but his father, who calmly swept up the broken glass, saw the crime as just "the price we pay for being here." His commitment to illuminating issues for an audience through personal experience is what ignites a passion in me for delving straight to the root of the issue to figure out solutions. He uses this response in his show, Patriot Act, to discuss breaking news as a jumping-off point to explore who is affected by current events. The goal is to show viewers how hot-button issues might affect them personally, even if they feel detached from the headlines. | Even though what would once span an entire library can now fit into the palm of our hand, we as a generation are misusing that gift of information. Our generation can be characterized by Newton's first law of motion. "An object, unless acted upon by an external force, rest remains at rest" Our generation is characterized by inertia-unless pushed to learn, we tend to not seek it. Yet, through a combination of participating in debate, reading newspapers with my dad, and watching Hasan Min haj, I was able to overcome my inertia and can remain in a state of motion for the long run. In Homecoming King, Hasan Min haj recalled the day in September 2001, that he came home to discover his family's car had been vandalized. He realized that because he was born in the U.S., he had "the right of equality," but his father, who calmly swept up the broken glass, saw the crime as just "the price we pay for being here." His commitment to illuminating issues for an audience through personal experience is what ignites a passion in me for delving straight to the root of the issue to figure out solutions. He uses this response in his show, Patriot Act, to discuss breaking news as a jumping-off point to explore who is affected by current events. The goal is to show viewers how hot-button issues might affect them personally, even if they feel detached from the headlines. |
In terms of math and physics, efficiency of a machine is the quotient of dividing the output over the input. Where the closer the number (quotient) gets to 1, the more efficient the machine; in other words, a machine that has an efficiency factor of 1 (practically doesn't exist) is a perfect machine. The reason such perfect machine doesn't exist is due to other factors (friction, energy transformation into heat, etc.) that always work to reduce the efficiency. Do you think that the same concept can be applied to humans? Can the efficiency of a human be calculated? We said that there are three major factors: input, output and drawbacks. Let's postulate some points in order to apply the same concept on humans. We, first, have to determine what these factors define in human life. Input: the chances a human has through his life; output: what she accomplishes, and how she makes use of the chances available; factors reducing efficiency: inappropriate education, insufficient time, and money. My parents weren't the perfect couple. There were always fights and long nights of crying and screaming. Sometimes mom just travel in the middle of something big like our school exams or something and then me and my brothers have to go along with it and do everything in the house from cooking to washing and cleaning. It ended up with a divorce, at least for my parents. However, for me, it all started there. After the divorce Mom moved on to live in a different government. So now my school, my father, and my mother each exists in a different city. Every week I go across the country traveling between the three places. At first, I felt like I am lost in the Bermuda triangle, didn't expect that I will find my true self there. Middle-class people are the luckiest among all classes, they represent the interface between all different layers of community. I was lucky enough to be part of middle-class people. In my transportation most of the time I would use the train, with its different classes. And that gave me a chance to examine the different nature of human character. I have engaged in many conversations with people I have never seen before. I have literally talked with every single class of the community, educated or not, poor and rich. The Two and half hour talking to someone that you don't know anything about and you will never see again, which made these conversations unique. People were never afraid of telling the truth and didn't try to hide anything. One of the conversations that really came to my interest started with a cigarette. I was taking a late midnight classic train. On a classic train you don't expect the travelers to be wearing suits or anything fancy, this is the laborers train. Three People - they don't know each other - started a conversation when one of them wanted to light a cigarette. The other two men who look older, told him to throw that cigarette away. At first, it was strange, the two men started telling the cigarette man about their experience, about different drags they took. A very long list of tablets, powders, and drug injections. They were telling the young man how cruel this road can be and that in order to protect his family and beloved ones he should never take that road. I was sitting there thinking: this is the part of the community we consider contagious! These men were trying to help, even after a long day of work, in the middle of the night, on a train. These conversations opened my mind to the truth, that the humans are all the same at the core, but the environment they live in is what dampen their spirits. You can't judge someone because of the way he looks, how much money he has, or even his education. Does a man starting the graph of life from zero make him less than another how already has a big positive y intercept? Absolutely not, maybe the one started from zero is actually growing exponentially while the other has a slope of zero. I have met a lot of uneducated people and all of them always talked about their unstoppable thinking of educating their children, what ever it costed them. | In terms of math and physics, efficiency of a machine is the quotient of dividing the output over the input. Where the closer the number (quotient) gets to 1, the more efficient the machine; in other words, a machine that has an efficiency factor of 1 (practically doesn't exist) is a perfect machine. The reason such perfect machine doesn't exist is due to other factors (friction, energy transformation into heat, etc.) that always work to reduce the efficiency. Do you think that the same concept can be applied to humans? Can the efficiency of a human be calculated? We said that there are three major factors: input, output and drawbacks. Let's postulate some points in order to apply the same concept on humans. We, first, have to determine what these factors define in human life. Input: the chances a human has through his life; output: what she accomplishes, and how she makes use of the chances available; factors reducing efficiency: inappropriate education, insufficient time, and money. My parents weren't the perfect couple. There were always fights and long nights of crying and screaming. Sometimes mom just travel in the middle of something big like our school exams or something and then me and my brothers have to go along with it and do everything in the house from cooking to washing and cleaning. It ended up with a divorce, at least for my parents. However, for me, it all started there. After the divorce Mom moved on to live in a different government. So now my school, my father, and my mother each exists in a different city. Every week I go across the country traveling between the three places. At first, I felt like I am lost in the Bermuda triangle, didn't expect that I will find my true self there. Middle-class people are the luckiest among all classes, they represent the interface between all different layers of community. I was lucky enough to be part of middle-class people. In my transportation most of the time I would use the train, with its different classes. And that gave me a chance to examine the different nature of human character. I have engaged in many conversations with people I have never seen before. I have literally talked with every single class of the community, educated or not, poor and rich. The Two and half hour talking to someone that you don't know anything about and you will never see again, which made these conversations unique. People were never afraid of telling the truth and didn't try to hide anything. One of the conversations that really came to my interest started with a cigarette. I was taking a late midnight classic train. On a classic train you don't expect the travelers to be wearing suits or anything fancy, this is the laborers train. Three People - they don't know each other - started a conversation when one of them wanted to light a cigarette. The other two men who look older, told him to throw that cigarette away. At first, it was strange, the two men started telling the cigarette man about their experience, about different drags they took. A very long list of tablets, powders, and drug injections. They were telling the young man how cruel this road can be and that in order to protect his family and beloved ones he should never take that road. I was sitting there thinking: this is the part of the community we consider contagious! These men were trying to help, even after a long day of work, in the middle of the night, on a train. These conversations opened my mind to the truth, that the humans are all the same at the core, but the environment they live in is what dampen their spirits. You can't judge someone because of the way he looks, how much money he has, or even his education. Does a man starting the graph of life from zero make him less than another how already has a big positive y intercept? Absolutely not, maybe the one started from zero is actually growing exponentially while the other has a slope of zero. I have met a lot of uneducated people and all of them always talked about their unstoppable thinking of educating their children, what ever it costed them. |
Hello,i'm currently applying for KGSP undergraduate program,and since this is my first study plan i need some help and reviews. please help me, i really appreciate it. Before Entry:Learning a new language is essential especially if we want to study in a non-English speaking country. Growing up in Indonesia, a country with a lot of cultural difference made me mastered three languages as I grew up. Bahasa Indonesia as my mother tongue, Javanese that I used when talking with my friends and English that I learned by watching cartoons and TV shows in English since I was little. I developed interests in Korean since I heard a lot of my friends talking in Korean and now that I'm applying to study in Korea. Before taking the bachelor degree in Korea I will be enrolling in the Korean language training, so I need to know some basic Korean before I took off from Indonesia. I joined a Korean language course in my city that is about two hours long a day. I also join a free online Korean language course that is about half an hour a day. I also bought a Korean-English dictionary to improve my Korean and English vocabulary. I will spend 5 hours a day to learn how to write, read and pronounce Korean. Every week I also watch a Korean TV show and I noted some words to increase my vocabulary in Korean, currently, I have about 97 words that I took note of. I also watch some Korean YouTubers video with English subtitles and took note of it to developed more vocabulary in Korean and English. I also used a free language learning app on my smartphone called Duolingo to learn basics of Korean. After Entry:After my Entry in Korea, I will join the Korean language training and I will work hard to finish with a TOPIK score of 5. And I will make friends with a lot of Korean so that I can practice my speaking in Korean through daily chatting will also join a community that is open to the foreigner to learn how to work together with locals and do community service. To boost my reading and understanding in Korean I will change all of my gadget's language to Korean so that I will always use Korean daily. Even though I scored 7.0 on the IELTS Academic Module I still have a lot to learn. I will also improve my English listening and speaking ability through communicating with other KGSP awardee and some International students that currently studying in Korea and to foreigners that I will meet. Thank you for your attention | Hello, i'm currently applying for KGSP undergraduate program, and since this is my first study plan I need some help and reviews. Please help me, I really appreciate it. Before Entry:Learning a new language is essential especially if we want to study in a non-English speaking country. Growing up in Indonesia, a country with a lot of cultural difference made me mastered three languages as I grew up. Bahama Indonesia as my mother tongue, Javanese that I used when talking with my friends and English that I learned by watching cartoons and TV shows in English since I was little. I developed interests in Korean since I heard a lot of my friends talking in Korean and now that I'm applying to study in Korea. Before taking the bachelor degree in Korea I will be enrolling in the Korean language training, so I need to know some basic Korean before I took off from Indonesia. I joined a Korean language course in my city that is about two hours long a day. I also join a free online Korean language course that is about half an hour a day. Furthermore, I also bought a Korean-English dictionary to improve my Korean and English vocabulary. Furthermore, I will spend 5 hours a day to learn how to write, read and pronounce Korean. Every week I also watch a Korean TV show and I noted some words to increase my vocabulary in Korean, currently, I have about 97 words that I took note of. I also watch some Korean YouTubers video with English subtitles and took note of it to developed more vocabulary in Korean and English. I also used a free language learning app on my smartphone called Duolingo to learn basics of Korean. After Entry:After my Entry in Korea, I will join the Korean language training and I will work hard to finish with a TOPIC score of 5. And I will make friends with a lot of Korean so that I can practice my speaking in Korean through daily chatting will also join a community that is open to the foreigner to learn how to work together with locals and do community service. To boost my reading and understanding in Korean I will change all of my gadget's language to Korean so that I will always use Korean daily. Even though I scored 7.0 on the IELTS Academic Module I still have a lot to learn. I will also improve my English listening and speaking ability through communicating with other KGSP awardee and some International students that currently studying in Korea and to foreigners that I will meet. Thank you for your attention |
It´s supposed to include:- Motivations with which you apply for this program- Family and Education background- Significant experiences you have had; risks you have taken and achievements you have made, persons or events that have had a significant influence on you - Extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences- If applicable, describe awards you have received, publications you have made, or skills you have acquired, etc. I believe that greatness is waiting for everyone, but only those who seek it can find it. In our life from the moment we are born until we die, we are the product of decisions, good or bad these always have consequences that we cannot avoid, but what we can do is take control over what we decide. There is only one type of decision that a man can regret and that is to not have taken one, to let events unfold in front of his eyes without doing anything, to become a secondary character in his own story. That's not what I want for my life, I want to seize every opportunity, pursue every dream and achieve every goal I set for myself. For many years I have felt attracted by the Korean culture, although my first approach to it was through the Hallyu Wave, which I consider one of the most ambitious and best developed Soft Control projects in the last decade, little by little I discovered all the positive and intriguing aspects of this culture. One of the things that made the strongest impression on me was finding a work ethic completely different from what I was used to seeing in my own country, especially in the field of education. I clearly remember how while I was in high school, I spent a lot of time watching documentaries about the educational situation in Korea and the high-quality standards it has, internally I wanted to have access to that world and many times I found myself imitating some of the things I learned through this information. The reason why I feel so identified with South Korea's hard work mentality is because being the youngest in a family of five my life has not been particularly difficult but I've always had to work hard to show that I am at the level of what my sisters have achieved, so working hard to meet these expectations has been important throughout my youth, things like having better grades than my older sister or learning English on my own as my middle sister are tasks that no one forced me to accomplish but that I felt the responsibility to fulfill. My parents have always been very demanding but at the same time understanding about our education, although my father never exercised his career as a business administrator in a formal job and my mother didn't get a college degree, they always motivated my two sisters and me to make the most out of our education and get a college degree, thing which my two sisters accomplished: the eldest graduating with honors in pharmaceutical engineering and my middle sister in business administration. As a student I did not always have the same results, during elementary school because I had Asma my parents wanted me to have a life without too many stress factors, because this was bad for my health, so I was never pressured to perform especially well in my studies which resulted in my school grades not being excellent, however this changed in sixth grade when professor when my homeroom teacher at that time began using teaching methods different from what all my classmates and I were used to, little by little through different techniques that made learning a more fun and easy experience, he started cultivating in us a liking for studying and thanks to his blind confidence in the potential that I had never seen in myself before occasioned a radical transformation in my academic performance, turning me from a student who could obtain regular grades without studying to one who obtained excellent results only by devoting a little effort. This change of mentality has stayed with me to this day and is one of the things that I will never be able to repay because of the immense value it has added to my life. During middle school I always had the first highest grade average in my class and tied in the first place of best grade average among all the school students, it was also during this time that I participated in oratory and poetry contests obtaining the first place twice in poetry and once in oratory, but what is more gratifying to me about these experiences is the knowledge that they left me with. Being a person who is usually perceived as shy or introverted, the fact of showing my teachers and classmates that I was not afraid to stand on stage and give a speech or recite a poem was a great boost for my self-esteem, it helped me develop better confidence and provided me with the courage not to be afraid of communicating my ideas freely. Academically, high school went similarly to middle school and I also got the best grade average in my class, I had no problem adapting quickly to the new workload and during all high school, I was able to maintain excellent results from the beginning to the end. Unfortunately, I only participated in one math contest in which I obtained the third place. I am not proud to mention this last experience because more than an achievement it represents a lesson, because for this contest I did not study thinking that I had no chance to win, so obtaining a third place instead of meaning a victory became a permanent reminder that I did not make the best effort possible and even if I had the capabilities I did not have the preparation to give my best performance. The reason why I decided to study statistics comes from the desire to have a career that offers a wide variety of job options and at the same time is necessary to face some of today's great challenges. Statistics provides the ability to understand data and extract value from it, which is a very useful tool in a world where information is constantly surrounding us at all moments, it is a necessary capacity in every industry and one that cannot be simply acquired without an appropriate college degree. In the same way that I want to work in a career that offers me a wide range of different possibilities, my personal skills are not limited to a single area. As soon as I began to notice how the world is changing more and more rapidly towards the automation of many tasks previously considered properly human and especially motivated by the documentary "AlphaGo" I began to learn through free courses and information easily accessible on the Internet some of the basic concepts and skills of programming in java, phyton, and SQL, because I consider that having these skills now days is becoming indispensable. Another way in which I spend my time is investing in the stock market, this interest arose due to the admiration I have for a family acquaintance who for some years has been investing in stocks and currencies. Because much of the information to start learning how to invest is free on the Internet, it was not difficult for me to start and the time I´ve been investing in the stock market has helped me to improve my analytical skills, concentration, focus, and self-control. Also, an activity in which I was involved from the age of 6 to 12 was dance, although unfortunately, I had to give it up to only focus on my studies, being involved in ballet and Polynesian dances clubs helped me acquired skills such as teamwork, problem-solving, dedication, and perseverance. One of the most difficult situations in my life just occurred on July 2nd of this year, when my father, who through his work as a poultry farmer supported our family of five, was forced to close his business because an organized crime group wanted to force him into giving them part of his monthly earnings in exchange for his life and the possibility of continuing with his business. This is a common practice in Mexico commonly known as "floor collection" where members of criminal organizations threaten owners of small businesses with ending their lives if they do not please their economic demands which most of the time are very unreasonable. Because my father refused to agree with the petitions they made, on Tuesday night July 3 people from this criminal organization shot six times against our home. Fortunately, no one got hurt, but in consequence, we had to escape that same night with intentions of never coming back for the fear of what might happen to us. Although this experience is the worst thing that has ever happened to my family, at the same time it has become my biggest motivation, I probably wouldn't be applying for this scholarship if it weren't for this. It helped me realize that I want to have the best possible education to ensure a better future for my parents after I graduate. Unfortunately education of this kind in my country is only possible at extremely expensive prices that my parents will never be able to afford, so the GKS scholarship represents for me an opportunity to access the kind of education I want for my future without pressuring my parents or resigning myself to a lower quality education that would not allow me to develop my full potential. Finally, I would like to thank the South Korean government for making it possible for so many students around the world to aspire for better educational conditions and also for receiving us in your country so that we can become productive members within it, while at the same time sharing the cultural teachings we gain from our stay with our own country. | It's supposed to include:- Motivations with which you apply for this program-Family and Education background- Significant experiences you have had; risks you have taken and achievements you have made, persons or events that have had a significant influence on you - Extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences- If applicable, describe awards you have received, publications you have made, or skills you have acquired, etc. I believe that greatness is waiting for everyone, but only those who seek it can find it. In our life from the moment we are born until we die, we are the product of decisions, good or bad these always have consequences that we cannot avoid, but what we can do is take control over what we decide. There is only one type of decision that a man can regret and that is to not have taken one, to let events unfold in front of his eyes without doing anything, to become a secondary character in his own story. That's not what I want for my life, I want to seize every opportunity, pursue every dream and achieve every goal I set for myself. For many years I have felt attracted by the Korean culture, although my first approach to it was through the Hall Wave, which I consider one of the most ambitious and best developed Soft Control projects in the last decade, little by little I discovered all the positive and intriguing aspects of this culture. One of the things that made the strongest impression on me was finding a work ethic completely different from what I was used to seeing in my own country, especially in the field of education. I clearly remember how while I was in high school, I spent a lot of time watching documentaries about the educational situation in Korea and the high-quality standards it has, internally I wanted to have access to that world and many times I found myself imitating some of the things I learned through this information. The reason why I feel so identified with South Korea's hard work mentality is because being the youngest in a family of five my life has not been particularly difficult, but I've always had to work hard to show that I am at the level of what my sisters have achieved, so working hard to meet these expectations has been important throughout my youth, things like having better grades than my older sister or learning English on my own as my middle sister are tasks that no one forced me to accomplish but that I felt the responsibility to fulfill. My parents have always been very demanding but at the same time understanding about our education, although my father never exercised his career as a business administrator in a formal job and my mother didn't get a college degree, they always motivated my two sisters and me to make the most out of our education and get a college degree, thing which my two sisters accomplished: the eldest graduating with honors in pharmaceutical engineering and my middle sister in business administration. As a student I did not always have the same results, during elementary school because I had Asia my parents wanted me to have a life without too many stress factors, because this was bad for my health, so I was never pressured to perform especially well in my studies which resulted in my school grades not being excellent, however this changed in sixth grade when professor when my homeroom teacher at that time began using teaching methods different from what all my classmates and I were used to, little by little through different techniques that made learning a more fun and easy experience, he started cultivating in us a liking for studying and thanks to his blind confidence in the potential that I had never seen in myself before occasioned a radical transformation in my academic performance, turning me from a student who could obtain regular grades without studying to one who obtained excellent results only by devoting a little effort. This change of mentality has stayed with me to this day and is one of the things that I will never be able to repay because of the immense value it has added to my life. During middle school I always had the first highest grade average in my class and tied in the first place of best grade average among all the school students, it was also during this time that I participated in oratory and poetry contests obtaining the first place twice in poetry and once in oratory, but what is more gratifying to me about these experiences is the knowledge that they left me with. Being a person who is usually perceived as shy or introverted, the fact of showing my teachers and classmates that I was not afraid to stand on stage and give a speech or recite a poem was a great boost for my self-esteem, it helped me develop better confidence and provided me with the courage not to be afraid of communicating my ideas freely. Academically, high school went similarly to middle school and I also got the best grade average in my class, I had no problem adapting quickly to the new workload and during all high school, I was able to maintain excellent results from the beginning to the end. Unfortunately, I only participated in one math contest in which I obtained the third place. I am not proud to mention this last experience because more than an achievement it represents a lesson, because for this contest I did not study thinking that I had no chance to win, so obtaining a third place instead of meaning a victory became a permanent reminder that I did not make the best effort possible and even if I had the capabilities I did not have the preparation to give my best performance. The reason why I decided to study statistics comes from the desire to have a career that offers a wide variety of job options and at the same time is necessary to face some of today's great challenges. Statistics provides the ability to understand data and extract value from it, which is a very useful tool in a world where information is constantly surrounding us at all moments, it is a necessary capacity in every industry and one that cannot be simply acquired without an appropriate college degree. In the same way that I want to work in a career that offers me a wide range of different possibilities, my personal skills are not limited to a single area. As soon as I began to notice how the world is changing more and more rapidly towards the automation of many tasks previously considered properly human and especially motivated by the documentary "Alpha" I began to learn through free courses and information easily accessible on the Internet some basic concepts and skills of programming in java, photon, and SQL, because I consider that having these skills now days is becoming indispensable. Another way in which I spend my time is investing in the stock market, this interest arose due to the admiration I have for a family acquaintance who for some years has been investing in stocks and currencies. Because much of the information to start learning how to invest is free on the Internet, it was not difficult for me to start and the time I've been investing in the stock market has helped me to improve my analytical skills, concentration, focus, and self-control. Also, an activity in which I was involved from the age of 6 to 12 was dance, although unfortunately, I had to give it up to only focus on my studies, being involved in ballet and Polynesian dances clubs helped me acquired skills such as teamwork, problem-solving, dedication, and perseverance. One of the most difficult situations in my life just occurred on July 2nd of this year, when my father, who through his work as a poultry farmer supported our family of five, was forced to close his business because an organized crime group wanted to force him into giving them part of his monthly earnings in exchange for his life and the possibility of continuing with his business. This is a common practice in Mexico commonly known as "floor collection" where members of criminal organizations threaten owners of small businesses with ending their lives if they do not please their economic demands which most of the time are very unreasonable. Because my father refused to agree with the petitions they made, on Tuesday night July 3 people from this criminal organization shot six times against our home. Fortunately, no one got hurt, but in consequence, we had to escape that same night with intentions of never coming back for the fear of what might happen to us. Although this experience is the worst thing that has ever happened to my family, at the same time it has become my biggest motivation, I probably wouldn't be applying for this scholarship if it weren't for this. It helped me realize that I want to have the best possible education to ensure a better future for my parents after I graduate. Unfortunately education of this kind in my country is only possible at extremely expensive prices that my parents will never be able to afford, so the GKS scholarship represents for me an opportunity to access the kind of education I want for my future without pressuring my parents or resigning myself to a lower quality education that would not allow me to develop my full potential. Finally, I would like to thank the South Korean government for making it possible for so many students around the world to aspire for better educational conditions and also for receiving us in your country so that we can become productive members within it, while at the same time-sharing the cultural teachings we gain from our stay with our own country. |
As a Filipino-American girl living in Singapore, doing Irish dancing and taekwondo, I am used to the label of a Third Culture Kid, after all, I was raised in a culture different from my parent's origin and was exposed to a larger variety of cultural influences. However, in my school being a third culture kid is not unique, almost everyone is a third culture kid as being international students, we are all expats. Growing up, I had my fair share of lemonade stands, thanksgivings and blanket forts, but those stands were also used for sharing Hongboa's, that dining table for setting out coloured dye to celebrate Holi with our neighbours, and those blankets, for 'lion dancing' shows where my siblings and I would hop from chair to chair with the blankets over our heads. I grew up celebrating Deepavali with my friends and stealing Haw Flakes from my siblings, so when I reached the age of 14 and was asked whether or not I was a Third Culture Kid, I confidently answered, yes! Yet now the answer's less clear in my eyes. My own definition of a third culture kid is someone that is immersed in the said culture, the keyword being: immersed. As I grew older and head into high school, I began to realise something I had dismissed the majority of my childhood. In Singapore, there is a very solid line between the international students and the local kids, something I had never really understood until I brought it up the dilemma with my kindergarten classmates, 2 of us had gone on to be international students and the other, a local student. The main reasoning for this distinct separation is because international and local students each hold their own stereotypes of the other. International kids also cannot attend local schools, even if they wish to or their parents wish them to, and vice versa, with the exception if permission is granted from the Singapore board of education. This lack of connection with local kids my age meant I lacked what I believed to be the true definition of a third culture kid, immersion. Nevertheless, every time after those 8 hours from JFK to Heathrow Airport, and 13 hours to Singapore, the dark glowing lights of Singapore's business centres are always a welcoming sight back home. The comforting spice-filled smell that my friend's mom's pav bhaji gives off and the surprised look on the hawker stall vendors have when I say a phrase in Hindi that is whispered to me, that's what I identify as home. The constant change, yet the comforting feeling of familiar foods and celebration full of laughter and significance. So even though I am not really certain of my answer to the question 'Are you a third culture kid' anymore, I don't actually mind. Sure, it made me question my identity once in a while, it made me stand out when I went to the US for camp and in the Philippines when we visited family, but I grew up in a completely different environment from my cousins and my kindergarten classmates and I am proud of that. I am Filipino and American, I've lived in Singapore my whole life, I do Irish dancing and Taekwondo and I may or may not be a third culture kid, but I don't really mind. | As a Filipino-American girl living in Singapore, doing Irish dancing and taekwondo, I am used to the label of a Third Culture Kid, after all, I was raised in a culture different from my parent's origin and was exposed to a larger variety of cultural influences. However, in my school being a third culture kid is not unique, almost everyone is a third culture kid as being international students, we are all expats. Growing up, I had my fair share of lemonade stands, thanksgivings and blanket forts, but those stands were also used for sharing Hong boa's, that dining table for setting out colored dye to celebrate Hold with our neighbors, and those blankets, for 'lion dancing' shows where my siblings and I would hop from chair to chair with the blankets over our heads. I grew up celebrating Deepawali with my friends and stealing Haw Flakes from my siblings, so when I reached the age of 14 and was asked whether I was a Third Culture Kid, I confidently answered, yes! Yet now the answer's less clear in my eyes. My own definition of a third culture kid is someone that is immersed in the said culture, the keyword being: immersed. As I grew older and head into high school, I began to realize something I had dismissed the majority of my childhood. In Singapore, there is a very solid line between the international students and the local kids, something I had never really understood until I brought it up the dilemma with my kindergarten classmates, 2 of us had gone on to be international students and the other, a local student. The main reasoning for this distinct separation is because international and local students each hold their own stereotypes of the other. International kids also cannot attend local schools, even if they wish to or their parents wish them to, and vice versa, with the exception if permission is granted from the Singapore board of education. This lack of connection with local kids my age meant I lacked what I believed to be the true definition of a third culture kid, immersion. Nevertheless, every time after those 8 hours from JFK to Heathrow Airport, and 13 hours to Singapore, the dark glowing lights of Singapore's business centers are always a welcoming sight back home. The comforting spice-filled smell that my friend's mom's pay bhaji gives off and the surprised look on the hawker stall vendors have when I say a phrase in Hindi that is whispered to me, that's what I identify as home. The constant change, yet the comforting feeling of familiar foods and celebration full of laughter and significance. So even though I am not really certain of my answer to the question 'Are you a third culture kid' anymore, I don't actually mind. Sure, it made me question my identity once in a while, it made me stand out when I went to the US for camp and in the Philippines when we visited family, but I grew up in a completely different environment from my cousins and my kindergarten classmates, and I am proud of that. I am Filipino and American, I've lived in Singapore my whole life, I do Irish dancing and Taekwondo and I may or may not be a third culture kid, but I don't really mind. |
I learned the English language since I'm in elementary school. I have been learned it for about 10 years, nevertheless until right now it's still hard for me to speak fluently. And by this English ability I have, I joined the English club in my high school to continue learning how to speak well in English. For my writing skills, I have been joined some essay competition although I'm not to be the winner it give me experiences in my writing skills. It also happens in the Korean language. I have known the Korean language for about 4 years, although I never go to Korea before. I've studied the Korean language through video, song, some websites and I also join online courses. I can't say both of my Korean and English well actually, but I can read, write and listen well in both languages. The biggest problem for me when I learn both languages is that is speaking skills. Weaknesses in languages, doesn't decrease my spirit to continue learning those languages. If I am chosen to be one of the awardees these scholarships, I will gladly enroll in the TOPIK preparations class without missing a single meeting. I will learn Korean and English from the basics so that I can write, read, hear, and speak both languages well. As soon as I have enrolled in the TOPIC preparation class, I will quickly adapt and learn lessons quickly encourage myself to fulfill the standard TOPIC before I am entering the university. Below I attached a timetable, how I learned the languages after I came to Korea for this KGS program. DAILY SECEDULE FOR LEARNING KOREAN AND ENGLISH LANGUAGES MONDAYTUESDAYWEDNESDAYTHURSDAYFRIDAYSATURDAY8.30-10.10 amReading ( Korean textual books)Reading ( Korean textual books)Grammar ( Korean grammar)Grammar ( Korean grammar)Writing ( Hangeul letters)Writing ( Hangeul letters)10.40-12.20 amWriting ( Hangeul letters)Writing ( Hangeul letters)ListeningListeningReading ( Korean news)Reading ( Korean resource )LUNCH2.00-2.50 pmGrammar ( Korean grammar)ListeningWriting ( Hangeul letters)Writing ( Hangeul letters)ListeningCultural Trips & Activities***3.00-3.50 pmListeningSpeakingSpeakingSpeakingSpeaking4.00-4.50 pmSelf-Exercise*Optional** *Self excercice can be done by online course or doing excercise through TOPIK books** optional means I can do exercise by book or online test*** Cultural trips and activities are done as an implementation about what I learn, example for implementation my speaking skill and listening skill through going to the public place | I learned the English language since I'm in elementary school. I have been learned it for about 10 years, nevertheless until right now it's still hard for me to speak fluently. And by this English ability I have, I joined the English club in my high school to continue learning how to speak well in English. For my writing skills, I have been joined some essay competition, although I'm not to be the winner it gives me experiences in my writing skills. It also happens in the Korean language. I have known the Korean language for about 4 years, although I never go to Korea before. I've studied the Korean language through video, song, some websites and I also join online courses. Furthermore, I can't say both of my Korean and English well actually, but I can read, write and listen well in both languages. The biggest problem for me when I learn both languages is that is speaking skills. Weaknesses in languages, doesn't decrease my spirit to continue learning those languages. If I am chosen to be one of the awardees these scholarships, I will gladly enroll in the TOPIC preparations class without missing a single meeting. I will learn Korean and English from the basics so that I can write, read, hear, and speak both languages well. As soon as I have enrolled in the TOPIC preparation class, I will quickly adapt and learn lessons quickly encourage myself to fulfill the standard TOPIC before I am entering the university. Below I attached a timetable, how I learned the languages after I came to Korea for this KGS program. DAILY SCHEDULE FOR LEARNING KOREAN AND ENGLISH LANGUAGES MONDAYTUESDAYWEDNESDAYTHURSDAYFRIDAYSATURDAY8.30-10.10 am Reading (Korean textual books)Reading (Korean textual books)Grammar (Korean grammar)Grammar (Korean grammar)Writing (Hangul letters)Writing (Hangul letters)10.40-12.20 writing (Hangul letters)Writing (Hangul letters)ListeningListeningReading (Korean news)Reading (Korean resource)LUNCH2.00-2.50 grammar (Korean grammar)ListeningWriting (Hangul letters)Writing (Hangul letters)ListeningCultural Trips camp; Activities***3.00-3.50 pmListeningSpeakingSpeakingSpeakingSpeaking4.00-4.50 pmSelf-Exercise*Optional** *Self exercise can be done by online course or doing exercise through TOPIC books** optional means I can do exercise by book or online test*** Cultural trips and activities are done as an implementation about what I learn, example for implementation my speaking skill and listening skill through going to the public place |
I am a serial volunteer, I volunteered with voluntary service oversea as an in-country volunteer where i worked with 10 UK volunteers and 10 international citizen volunteers on an inclusive education project in Enugu state with the mission of leaving no child behind, to help identify out of school children and children with diverse abilities also create a support system to help teachers and students improve performance in classroom. I am a self-taught software developer with over 4 years of experience in software development with a background in web development and technology in helping develop web solutions for organizations. Have served as a tech advocate for the google for Africa scholarship by Andela where I mentored and reviewed code for 75 tech enthusiasts across Nigeria and Kenya. Also served as a facilitator and mentor for techQuest in training over 5000 kids across 7 states in Nigeria on STEM education and a mentor for Africode. I currently serve as the CEO of workload NG, a company I co-founded to help solve the unemployment issue in Nigeria by encouraging entrepreneurship and skill through training and capacity development, also connecting local and skilled artisans to customerscompanies that need their services. On starting workload NG with the aim of becoming a major contributor towards achieving some of the United Nation's Sustainable Development Goals, the project was selected for the sustainable solution Africa 30 under 30, was among the 15 finalists for the Total Startupper Challenge 2019. Currently the workload project was selected for the Tony Elumelu Fellowship Grant 2019. | I am a serial volunteer, I volunteered with voluntary service oversea as an in-country volunteer where I worked with 10 UK volunteers and 10 international citizen volunteers on an inclusive education project in Enough state with the mission of leaving no child behind, to help identify out of school children and children with diverse abilities also create a support system to help teachers and students improve performance in classroom. I am a self-taught software developer with over 4 years of experience in software development with a background in web development and technology in helping develop web solutions for organizations. Have served as a tech advocate for the Google for Africa scholarship by Angela where I mentored and reviewed code for 75 tech enthusiasts across Nigeria and Kenya. Also served as a facilitator and mentor for request in training over 5000 kids across 7 states in Nigeria on STEM education and a mentor for Africa. I currently serve as the CEO of workload NG, a company I co-founded to help solve the unemployment issue in Nigeria by encouraging entrepreneurship and skill through training and capacity development, also connecting local and skilled artisans to customers companies that need their services. On starting workload NG with the aim of becoming a major contributor towards achieving some of the United Nation's Sustainable Development Goals, the project was selected for the sustainable solution Africa 30 under 30, was among the 15 finalists for the Total Start upper Challenge 2019. Currently, the workload project was selected for the Tony Element Fellowship Grant 2019. |
My passion for programming started from clubs at school, where I made LEGO battlebots and programmed Arduinos. Intrigued by the unlimited possibilities in programming, I learned Java and started making applications such as calculators, simulations and animation tools for school. When I started competitive programming, I realised that computer science was much more than coding apps. I explored algorithms in graph theory and primality testing, applying my knowledge to solve competition problems. Creating games and game hacks, I developed a fascination for AI; I often had to use minimax, pathfinding algorithms and neural networks in games. I want to study computer science to further my knowledge beyond what can be obtained from MOOCs. A CS degree will open doors for me as a software engineer, preferably in a field of my interest such as AI. A dedicated College of Computing and the huge CS program at GATech will allow me to immerse myself in CS and work with like minded students and lots of experts. I can pursue my interest in AI and algorithms through the Intelligence and Theory Threads. The Threads system not only allows me to focus on my areas of interest but prepares me for a career in these areas. With a large number of project based courses and clubs like The Agency, I will have opportunities to implement things rather than be limited to theory. The research opportunities available through UROC will also give me experience while allowing me to work with AI and robotics experts. The co op and internship program provides more opportunities for me to gain experience. Additionally, a degree from the College of Computing is looked upon highly by employers as evidenced by the big companies usually in the CoC lobby and opportunities such as CoC specific career fairs. | My passion for programming started from clubs at school, where I made LEGO battle bots and programmed Arduino's. Intrigued by the unlimited possibilities in programming, I learned Java and started making applications such as calculators, simulations and animation tools for school. When I started competitive programming, I realized that computer science was much more than coding apps. I explored algorithms in graph theory and primarily testing, applying my knowledge to solve competition problems. Creating games and game hacks, I developed a fascination for AI; I often had to use minimal, pathfinding algorithms and neural networks in games. I want to study computer science to further my knowledge beyond what can be obtained from Moons. A CS degree will open doors for me as a software engineer, preferably in a field of my interest such as AI. A dedicated College of Computing and the huge CS program at GATe ch will allow me to immerse myself in CS and work with like-minded students and lots of experts. I can pursue my interest in AI and algorithms through the Intelligence and Theory Threads. The Threads' system not only allows me to focus on my areas of interest but prepares me for a career in these areas. With many project based courses and clubs like The Agency, I will have opportunities to implement things rather than be limited to theory. The research opportunities available through ROC will also give me experience while allowing me to work with AI and robotics experts. The co-op and internship program provides more opportunities for me to gain experience. Additionally, a degree from the College of Computing is looked upon highly by employers as evidenced by the big companies usually in the COC lobby and opportunities such as COC specific career fairs. |
At every time, there have existed endless people who are unconfident or can not find their talents what they can do. My story will be an example of showing how those problems are solved. Last year, my school's annual event named "Genius Festival" was celebrated, all grades were required to prepare a performance to perform in " Final Night". My grades' performance was too few participants because they had multiple reasons to do not join such as timid, lazy. Outstandingly, they did not have enough confidence to perform in front of people and did not know how to dance were the most reasons they gave me. I was fed up with their answers while they were giving me those insipid reasons. From a moment, I thought: "If we keep going act like this, our performance will be monotonous." Then, I tried to entice them to take part in by motivating and encouraging them. Consequently, they unwilling agreed to participate as a mission. For the first time, their attitude was disheartened and superficial. Conversely, I deeply endeavored to keep myself cheerful and dynamic in order to convey a "funny vitamin" for them to get more energy and hold comfortable and joyful air all the time. Whenever we practiced, I enthusiastically taught them the movements and perseveringly helped them to fix their dances step when they were being wrong although their dances were terrible. I whole-heartedly showed them how to dance, how to perform this move and carefully corrected their every step, sometimes I would like showed my dance steps or took some interesting and funny movement description as examples for them to follow. During the times, I always encouraged their spirits to boost their spirits, motivated them to practice better. As reasons, I was not only strongly wanted the performance would be as perfect as it could but also let them realized that dance was not difficult as they thought, it was incredible, cheerful and powerful. Besides, they stood a golden chance to show their latent talent, and I confidently confirmed that I was such a good dancer and great teacher. After each training session, I would not only let them know where they were weak or strength but also shared with them the problems and difficulties that are encountered and provided solutions to achieve the best result. According to me, I never forgot praising their strong points, acknowledged their efforts and encouraged them again after I completely choose euphemism to limit the negative while telling them about their weaknesses. Then, we came to share our puzzles, difficulties by listened to each one and calmly considered, found out the way to figure it out together. Little by little, their attitude entirely changed like the first time; confident to show their dance, more willing and more enthusiastic. As a consequence, they performed the performing was fantastic and powerful, I was surprised when they honestly admitted that dance brought them advantages and created chances for them to feel extremely cheerful, healthy, confident, energetic. Since that, they were more dynamic than the past and actively participated in various extracurricular activities or clubs such as dance club, sing club, glee, HAT, LSD. They truly changed and more confident than before. I was glad to help others to be better. Exactly, I effectively helped them to be more confident and inspire them to dance. They realized they might do the things that they claimed that they could not do. As a result, my goal was approached, people willing to took part in the performance and did it incredibly. I want to show them that nobody not good for anything, everybody has their talent and be confident to show that. | At every time, there have existed endless people who are unconfident or can not find their talents what they can do. My story will be an example of showing how those problems are solved. Last year, my school's annual event named "Genius Festival" was celebrated, all grades were required to prepare a performance to perform in" Final Night". My grades' performance was too few participants because they had multiple reasons to do not join such as timid, lazy. Outstandingly, they did not have enough confidence to perform in front of people and did not know how to dance were the most reasons they gave me. I was fed up with their answers while they were giving me those insipid reasons. From a moment, I thought: "If we keep going act like this, our performance will be monotonous." Then, I tried to entice them to take part in by motivating and encouraging them. Consequently, they unwilling agreed to participate as a mission. For the first time, their attitude was disheartened and superficial. Conversely, I deeply endeavored to keep myself cheerful and dynamic in order to convey a "funny vitamin" for them to get more energy and hold comfortable and joyful air all the time. Whenever we practiced, I enthusiastically taught them the movements and persevering helped them to fix their dances step when they were being wrong, although their dances were terrible. I wholeheartedly showed them how to dance, how to perform this move and carefully corrected their every step, sometimes I would like showed my dance steps or took some interesting and funny movement description as examples for them to follow. During the times, I always encouraged their spirits to boost their spirits, motivated them to practice better. As reasons, I was not only strongly wanted the performance would be as perfect as it could but also let them realized that dance was not difficult as they thought, it was incredible, cheerful and powerful. Besides, they stood a golden chance to show their latent talent, and I confidently confirmed that I was such a good dancer and great teacher. After each training session, I would not only let them know where they were weak or strength but also shared with them the problems and difficulties that are encountered and provided solutions to achieve the best result. In my opinion, I never forgot praising their strong points, acknowledged their efforts and encouraged them again after I completely choose euphemism to limit the negative while telling them about their weaknesses. Then, we came to share our puzzles, difficulties by listened to each one and calmly considered, found out the way to figure it out together. Little by little, their attitude entirely changed like the first time; confident to show their dance, more willing and more enthusiastic. As a consequence, they performed the performing was fantastic and powerful, I was surprised when they honestly admitted that dance brought them advantages and created chances for them to feel extremely cheerful, healthy, confident, energetic. Since that, they were more dynamic than the past and actively participated in various extracurricular activities or clubs such as dance club, sing club, glee, HAT, LSD. They truly changed and more confident than before. I was glad to help others to be better. Exactly, I effectively helped them to be more confident and inspire them to dance. They realized they might do the things that they claimed that they could not do. As a result, my goal was approached, people willing to took part in the performance and did it incredibly. I want to show them that nobody not good for anything, everybody has their talent and be confident to show that. |
Prompt:We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do simply for the pleasure of it. (100 words or fewer) I started playing PokemonGo again early last year after a two year break. When I opened the app again, there were multiple which increased Pokemon spawns and added raids, making the game interesting again. I had my app linked to my Health app, so I could get steps without having the app open. And when I open the app in an area I know has PokeStops, catching even the most common of Pokemon and getting the *Gotcha!* message gives a weird sense of satisfaction. And the most powerful the Pokemon, the greater that sense of sense of satisfaction. | Prompt:We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do simply for the pleasure of it. (100 words or fewer) I started playing Pokémon Go again early last year after a two-year break. When I opened the app again, there were multiples which increased Pokémon spawns and added raids, making the game interesting again. I had my app linked to my Health app, so I could get steps without having the app open. And when I open the app in an area I know has PokeS tops, catching even the most common of Pokémon and getting the *Gotcha!* message gives a weird sense of satisfaction. And the most powerful the Pokémon, the greater that sense of satisfaction. |
Thank you for your help! (250-300 words) There's an old saying that says, "Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, today is a gift, which is why we call it the present." History, mysteries and gifts are the defining elements of my story, of my mo'olelo. The story of my life begins in suburban Austria. A region of the world with a genealogy of prominent former rulers, where traditions are highly valued and where it is your family's mission to bring these traditions closer to their children. While my parents fulfilled their cultural obligations, they always made sure to add a little twist. Local parish fairs were subordinate to surfing sessions and waltz dance courses were exchanged with judo competitions. Refusing to be normal is probably the best way of describing my mum and dad's parenting style. Working a regular nine-to-five job was never an option for my father and being a stay-at-home mum wasn't for my mother. Of course their entity has influenced me in a tremendous way and has also demanded a lot from me. I learned responsibility through taking care of my three younger siblings and dropping them of at school when my parents couldn't. If my upbringing has taught me one thing it is to not shy away but rather embrace challenges and the unknown. By leaving my home environment a beautiful chapter of my life will become history and I'll start a new chapter. But for me the mystery of the next chapter of a good story always makes it the best one. I cannot change the history of my upbringing nor the mysteries that lie ahead of me, yet they define my story. I view it as a gift that my mo'olelo will potentially be continued at a place like Dartmouth where the exploration of mysteries is on the agenda. | Thank you for your help! (250-300 words) There's an old saying that says, "Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, today is a gift, which is why we call it the present." History, mysteries and gifts are the defining elements of my story, of my mo'oleo. The story of my life begins in suburban Austria. A region of the world with a genealogy of prominent former rulers, where traditions are highly valued and where it is your family's mission to bring these traditions closer to their children. While my parents fulfilled their cultural obligations, they always made sure to add a little twist. Local parish fairs were subordinate to surfing sessions and waltz dance courses were exchanged with judo competitions. Refusing to be normal is probably the best way of describing my mum and dad's parenting style. Working a regular nine-to-five job was never an option for my father and being a stay-at-home mum wasn't for my mother. Of course their entity has influenced me in a tremendous way and has also demanded a lot from me. I learned responsibility through taking care of my three younger siblings and dropping them of at school when my parents couldn't. If my upbringing has taught me one thing it is to not shy away but rather embrace challenges and the unknown. By leaving my home environment a beautiful chapter of my life will become history, and I'll start a new chapter. But for me the mystery of the next chapter of a good story always makes it the best one. I cannot change the history of my upbringing nor the mysteries that lie ahead of me, yet they define my story. I view it as a gift that my mo'oleo will potentially be continued at a place like Dartmouth where the exploration of mysteries is on the agenda. |
How small has something got to be to change our society? I say, as small as a neutron, having a measly mass of 1.674929 x 10-27 kg. Why? You might ask. Well, it initiated a chain reaction (pun intended) that changed the dynamics of the world forever! Looking back, such a neutron for me was a chat with a friend on a bus ride home. It propelled me into the world of computer programming, and the entailing events changed my perception of those around me. In the 9th grade, programming seemed to be a source of unfathomable mysteries. However, a realization: many of my friends had dabbled with it, positively fueled my competitive nature. This particular conversation with my friend, someone who, in my opinion, was only dedicated to the school course, gave me the final push to not lag behind my peers and do something about the situation. These strong feelings, a deep desire not to regret anything in future, and not succumb to the self-created mental barriers prompted me to learn C programming. Each class provided me with a new tool, such as a new method or concept, in my arsenal to write codes and solve a variety of questions. All these things sustained my fascination and interest. As such, "Hello World" not only helped me gain confidence and overcome my mental barriers but also somehow, unexpectedly gave me a new perspective on human interactions and accepting differences between people. It was through a variety of conversations along with mild introspection that I realized that people have different approaches to learning programming. I was fascinated by the simplest solution that made some logical sense such as finding patterns in complex problems. Some peers of mine were alike and liked to explore the various logical aspects of questions. Others were more interested in learning a variety of standard implementations: pre-made logics. A small minority was interested in very specific types of programming. This resulted in differences in how we approached our programming projects and, in practice, our methodology and thus, our code. These occurrences fueled my curiosity to know what actually stemmed such differences. Over time, I realized that it was the differences in our expectations and motivations that, springing from individual personality, preferences and the environment we grow in, formed the basis for such situations. This led to a new outlook: people have different definitions of what they consider as a success, or what they want to use something for and, as a result, everyone has a slightly different approach to the same problems. Furthermore, the way individuals decide to learn and use their knowledge is also varied. In everyday life, people can neglect the above by believing themselves to be the protagonist of their lives and overlooking that everyone in their lives is also the protagonist of hisher own life, thus living with different sets of issues and beliefs. Such differences have made me, at times, feel frustrated when I see people do things in ways that seem to conflict with my own methods, which I believe to be the best ones. At such times, I have, however, found that it is important to remember that most methods aren't inherently wrong or right; they just seem to reflect some of the differences in the thinking of people around us. These understandings and insights have helped me to be a better version of myself. They have allowed me to acquire an enhanced understanding of my peers, as I can now try to see their thoughts and beliefs in a different light. This has helped me in becoming a better team player. At the same time, it has made me less prone to self-doubt and understand that what I want is unique to myself and thus the steps needed to achieve those goals also have to be mine and mine alone. Please help me with my commonapp essay, give me feedback and your thoughts. I want to make it better or even excellent. Thank you! | How small has something got to be to change our society? I say, as small as a neutron, having a measly mass of 1.674929 x 10-27 kg. Why? You might ask. Well, it initiated a chain reaction (pun intended) that changed the dynamics of the world forever! Looking back, such a neutron for me was a chat with a friend on a bus ride home. It propelled me into the world of computer programming, and the entailing events changed my perception of those around me. In the 9th grade, programming seemed to be a source of unfathomable mysteries. However, a realization: many of my friends had dabbled with it, positively fueled my competitive nature. This particular conversation with my friend, someone who, in my opinion, was only dedicated to the school course, gave me the final push to not lag behind my peers and do something about the situation. These strong feelings, a deep desire not to regret anything in the future, and not succumb to the self-created mental barriers prompted me to learn C programming. Each class provided me with a new tool, such as a new method or concept, in my arsenal to write codes and solve a variety of questions. All these things sustained my fascination and interest. As such, "Hello World" not only helped me gain confidence and overcome my mental barriers but also somehow, unexpectedly gave me a new perspective on human interactions and accepting differences between people. It was through a variety of conversations along with mild introspection that I realized that people have different approaches to learning programming. I was fascinated by the simplest solution that made some logical sense such as finding patterns in complex problems. Some peers of mine were alike and liked to explore the various logical aspects of questions. Others were more interested in learning a variety of standard implementations: pre-made logics. A small minority was interested in very specific types of programming. This resulted in differences in how we approached our programming projects and, in practice, our methodology and thus, our code. These occurrences fueled my curiosity to know what actually stemmed such differences. Over time, I realized that it was the differences in our expectations and motivations that, springing from individual personality, preferences and the environment we grow in, formed the basis for such situations. This led to a new outlook: people have different definitions of what they consider as a success, or what they want to use something for and, as a result, everyone has a slightly different approach to the same problems. Furthermore, the way individuals decide to learn and use their knowledge is also varied. In everyday life, people can neglect the above by believing themselves to be the protagonist of their lives and overlooking that everyone in their lives is also the protagonist of higher own life, thus living with different sets of issues and beliefs. Such differences have made me, at times, feel frustrated when I see people do things in ways that seem to conflict with my own methods, which I believe to be the best ones. At such times, I have, however, found that it is important to remember that most methods aren't inherently wrong or right; they just seem to reflect some differences in the thinking of people around us. These understandings and insights have helped me to be a better version of myself. They have allowed me to acquire an enhanced understanding of my peers, as I can now try to see their thoughts and beliefs in a different light. This has helped me in becoming a better team player. At the same time, it has made me less prone to self-doubt and understand that what I want is unique to myself and thus the steps needed to achieve those goals also have to be mine and mine alone. Please help me with my common app essay, give me feedback and your thoughts. I want to make it better or even excellent. Thank you! |
I love mathematics. I'm that kid in school who always wants to see the math problem you're solving. The same one who would ask you to think about xyz instead of just giving you the answer you want when you ask for help with a question. The worst part is, once he can't solve the problem, you can be assured that you won't be going anytime soon. For some reason he just refuses to give up! ALWAYS! It gets very annoying sometimes. He's always smiling when thinking about, solving or explaining a math problem. And when you see him walking around, you know he's thinking up some mathy stuff as usual. I find mathematics very interesting. Maybe it's the non-subjectivity or perhaps the space for creativity. Everything about it just appeals to me. I suppose there's something very satisfying about taking a problem, reducing it to a string of concepts, and finding a solution. Once upon a time, I was not very good at math. In fact I was so bad that I had to ask a senior in my middle school to help me with it. He drummed into my head that it made no sense that I loved working puzzles and hated mathematics problems. He explained how I should consider every mathematics problem as a unique puzzle. "You have puzzle pieces"; the math concepts you've learnt, "then you have a canvas"; the clear sheets onto which you transplant your puzzle pieces and complete the puzzle. "Now the only catch is..." his voice reduced to a whisper, almost as if he didn't want me to hear "...unlike most puzzles, not every piece is relevant to the puzzle, and you don't have an image of what the complete puzzle looks like before you finish it". "Tough luck bro" he would often boom, as I smiled in amusement. Soon, I began to think of math questions more as puzzles than problems. In math class, all I needed to do was think like I was solving puzzles and all would be well. It worked! Some puzzles were certainly very problematic, but it worked for the most part. It only got irritating when I couldn't seem to find, and sometimes truly didn't have a puzzle piece. By high school, I thought of my puzzle pieces the way most kids thought of pokemons. If I saw it and didn't have it, I'd raise heaven and hell to capture it. Math courses in school, math courses online, math contests, math olympiads, math summer programs, math *insert word here*. If it started with, ended with or contained the word math, and I had caught a whiff of it, I'd do it. I knew I liked math when I was in math class and a friend pointed out that she had never seen me fall asleep during any of our famed monday morning math classes before, and right on cue, several gasps broke out from the many corners of the math room (surprising, since I never sleep in any of my classes). A year ago, a student in a junior class asked me for help in math. He did not understand why I was so excited and eager to help. Recently, he entered my room and said, "Michael, honestly, I don't think math is for me." I placed my hand on his shoulder as he tried to convince me that he was just joking - an exercise in futility - and I asked, "Do you like puzzles?" "Kinda" he replied, which was more than good enough for me. I felt so old, and rightly so as I told him, "several years ago, I was like you" before taking him through the puzzle analogy for the next 10 minutes straight. Of course, I had to put my own spin on it "...Take the liberty to start from any part of the puzzle. Try your best, don't rush, and have fun!" Word Count: 650 words Please help me with my commonapp essay, give me feedback and your thoughts. I want to make it better or even excellent. Thank you! | I love mathematics. I'm that kid in school who always wants to see the math problem you're solving. The same one who would ask you to think about XYZ instead of just giving you the answer you want when you ask for help with a question. The worst part is, once he can't solve the problem, you can be assured that you won't be going anytime soon. For some reason he just refuses to give up! ALWAYS! It gets very annoying sometimes. He's always smiling when thinking about, solving or explaining a math problem. And when you see him walking around, you know he's thinking up some math stuff as usual. I find mathematics very interesting. Maybe it's the non-subjectivity or perhaps the space for creativity. Everything about it just appeals to me. I suppose there's something very satisfying about taking a problem, reducing it to a string of concepts, and finding a solution. Once upon a time, I was not very good at math. In fact, I was so bad that I had to ask a senior in my middle school to help me with it. He drummed into my head that it made no sense that I loved working puzzles and hated mathematics problems. He explained how I should consider every mathematics problem as a unique puzzle. "You have puzzle pieces"; the math concepts you've learned, "then you have a canvas"; the clear sheets onto which you transplant your puzzle pieces and complete the puzzle. "Now the only catch is..." his voice reduced to a whisper, almost as if he didn't want me to hear "...unlike most puzzles, not every piece is relevant to the puzzle, and you don't have an image of what the complete puzzle looks like before you finish it". "Tough luck bro" he would often boom, as I smiled in amusement. Soon, I began to think of math questions more than puzzles than problems. In math class, all I needed to do was think like I was solving puzzles and all would be well. It worked! Some puzzles were certainly very problematic, but it worked for the most part. It only got irritating when I couldn't seem to find, and sometimes truly didn't have a puzzle piece. By high school, I thought of my puzzle pieces the way most kids thought of Pokémon. If I saw it and didn't have it, I'd raise heaven and hell to capture it. Math courses in school, math courses online, math contests, math Olympiads, math summer programs, math *insert word here*. If it started with, ended with or contained the word math, and I had caught a whiff of it, I'd do it. I knew I liked math when I was in math class and a friend pointed out that she had never seen me fall asleep during any of our famed Monday morning math classes before, and right on cue, several gasps broke out from the many corners of the math room (surprising, since I never sleep in any of my classes). A year ago, a student in a junior class asked me for help in math. He did not understand why I was so excited and eager to help. Recently, he entered my room and said, "Michael, honestly, I don't think math is for me." I placed my hand on his shoulder as he tried to convince me that he was just joking - an exercise in futility - and I asked, "Do you like puzzles?" "Kinda" he replied, which was more than good enough for me. I felt so old, and rightly so as I told him, "several years ago, I was like you" before taking him through the puzzle analogy for the next 10 minutes straight. Of course, I had to put my own spin on it "... Take the liberty to start from any part of the puzzle. Try your best, don't rush, and have fun!" Word Count: 650 words Please help me with my common app essay, give me feedback and your thoughts. I want to make it better or even excellent. Thank you! |
Additionally, I'd like to expand on my findings in the Design Thinking workshop. A lack of prepaid smart card use in the Delhi Metro was responsible for long queues at token counters. Illiquidity of the cards and absence of smaller value recharges deterred daily-wage and low-income earners from tying up their money in them. However, allowing smaller value recharges would merely shift the reason for people queuing up given the price of travelling. The solutions I proposed were guaranteeing minimal credit on the card or providing daily or weekly payment plans which would be overall cheaper than regular top-ups. The second-degree price discrimination in the second approach could expand the market and make the venture profitable. The experience was a test of my empathy and communication as much as my critical thinking abilities given the inquisitive conversations I had with people about their daily struggles. | Additionally, I'd like to expand on my findings in the Design Thinking workshop. A lack of prepaid smart card use in the Delhi Metro was responsible for long queues at token counters. Liquidity of the cards and absence of smaller value recharges deterred daily-wage and low-income earners from tying up their money in them. However, allowing smaller value recharges would merely shift the reason for people queuing up given the price of travelling. The solutions I proposed were guaranteeing minimal credit on the card or providing daily or weekly payment plans which would be overall cheaper than regular top-ups. The second-degree price discrimination in the second approach could expand the market and make the venture profitable. The experience was a test of my empathy and communication as much as my critical thinking abilities given the inquisitive conversations I had with people about their daily struggles. |
Learning about The Great Depression is what helped me appreciate the role and purpose that economics serves in our society. Researching this event pushed me towards a basic understanding of global, national, and local economies. I wish to study Economics at Georgia Tech because I hope to broaden my understanding of economics and learn more about the deeper theory underlying this subject. Specifically, I believe that the opportunities available at Tech stem from two distinct areas. First of all, society is becoming more technologically based. More of our innovations are based on technological advances. The fact that Georgia Tech is primarily a Technical school helps to build a foundation for any student attempting to thrive in the real world, but this especially holds true in the field of economics because every country's economy is entirely affected by their level of industrialization. This is demonstrated through some of the courses available in the Economics curriculum. For example, an engineeringscience elective is required as well as a modeling class (ME 1770CS 1316). I believe that the technical background that Georgia Tech offers with an economics degree is invaluable considering the current technological age of today. Secondly, Georgia Tech has access to entrepreneurial resources such as ATDC and student-led-clubs such as Startup Exchange which can allow me to supplement my education with more physical applications in terms of the framework of a business or startup. Having entrepreneurial resources creates an atmosphere at Georgia Tech which allows for ideation leading to production. In terms of my chosen major in Economics, I believe that guiding or advising a new business can help me gain experience of how economics applies in the real world. In conclusion, these unique traits of Georgia Tech will allow me to be a well-rounded member of society after graduation. | Learning about The Great Depression is what helped me appreciate the role and purpose that economics serves in our society. Researching this event pushed me towards a basic understanding of global, national, and local economies. I wish to study Economics at Georgia Tech because I hope to broaden my understanding of economics and learn more about the deeper theory underlying this subject. Specifically, I believe that the opportunities available at Tech stem from two distinct areas. First, society is becoming more technologically based. More of our innovations are based on technological advances. The fact that Georgia Tech is primarily a Technical school helps to build a foundation for any student attempting to thrive in the real world, but this especially holds true in the field of economics because every country's economy is entirely affected by their level of industrialization. This is demonstrated through some courses available in the Economics curriculum. For example, an engineering science elective is required as well as a modeling class (ME 1770CS 1316). I believe that the technical background that Georgia Tech offers with an economics degree is invaluable considering the current technological age of today. Secondly, Georgia Tech has access to entrepreneurial resources such as ADC and student-led-clubs such as Startup Exchange which can allow me to supplement my education with more physical applications in terms of the framework of a business or startup. Having entrepreneurial resources creates an atmosphere at Georgia Tech which allows for ideation leading to production. In terms of my chosen major in Economics, I believe that guiding or advising a new business can help me gain experience of how economics applies in the real world. In conclusion, these unique traits of Georgia Tech will allow me to be a well-rounded member of society after graduation. |
I've had so many significant experiences in my life. Some I'm ashamed of and some I'm proud of. Nevertheless, they've helped me discover my passion, hobbies and most importantly, they have helped me shaped the person I am today. When I was a young girl who was new at a Filipino school in a new country, it was different than I imagined it to be. I came into school with an allergy that caused redness and dryness around my lips; I was called names and bullied. I felt like an outcast and neglected. That feeling really got me down to the point where I didn't want to go to school. Some who were genuine and kind to me helped me overcome the fear - telling me that everything will be alright and they were right. Everything became alright. A few months after joining the new school, I joined the Girl's Scout and I was selected to represent my camp. When I stepped on that stage for the very first time, I was scared. A girl in our camp told me, "Don't let them overshadow you. Stand out. Be different." That gave me confidence. I walked around the room with the upmost confidence a 5th grader could ever have. That night, I felt as if everything that I've gone through was suddenly worth it because I won. The feeling of acceptance is indescribable and after that, I joined more pageants than I could count. My confidence kept growing and growing as the next one comes by. Then the time came where I was chosen to compete in a nationwide pageant. It was an adventure least to say. I may have not won but I never lost my confidence. In fact, that loss made me dream bigger. I thought that maybe pageantry isn't for me. Apart from that, what I wanted to be is a model. Chasing a dream like that was difficult. It was difficult because I realized if I wanted to get into this industry - rejection is something to get used to. Getting rejected by a number of agencies because your portfolio wasn't enough can leave you hurt and disappointed, but I used that to encourage me to become better. You're probably wondering, "Why a model?" I've thought of other things I wanted to be; a fashion designer and an author. I got passionate for the both of it. It's where I can let my imagination run wild. I discovered my love for turning clothes that aren't used anymore and to turning them into something new recently. It was a great way for me to reduce buying clothes and instead, turn clothes I've used to something I wanted to buy. I guess you could say I love turning things from drab into fab. I thought about becoming an author long before I knew what I really wanted to be. It's when I discovered an online platform solely for writing. I wrote stories and at first, I was hesitant to post them because I was afraid of getting criticized. You can't really avoid those thoughts but when I posted them, I wish I should've done it earlier. They got attention and so much feedback that I decided to continue it, letting whatever I wanted to happen, happen. But in my heart, I knew that what I really wanted to be, which was a model. After living here and going to the same school in the UAE for a couple of years, I moved to a different school. I experienced something so much more different: I fell in love. You'd expect me to say with a guy, but no, it's with a girl. She makes my heart beat fast whenever I think about her or whenever she's around me. She makes me fall in love all over again with a single word and a single look. She was gorgeous; divine if you please. In a short amount of time, I've shared so many memories that I treasure with her. She showed me a different perspective in life in both good and bad. That sometimes things are not what they seem to be. She encourages me to strive hard, dream big and become the best version of myself. Experiences like those makes me realize that while I'm still young, I still have a lot to discover in life and those experiences will and do define me as a person. A person that feels and dreams. | I've had so many significant experiences in my life. Some I'm ashamed of and some I'm proud of. Nevertheless, they've helped me discover my passion, hobbies and most importantly, they have helped me shaped the person I am today. When I was a young girl who was new at a Filipino school in a new country, it was different from I imagined it to be. I came into school with an allergy that caused redness and dryness around my lips; I was called names and bullied. I felt like an outcast and neglected. That feeling really got me down to the point where I didn't want to go to school. Some who were genuine and kind to me helped me overcome the fear - telling me that everything will be alright, and they were right. Everything became alright. A few months after joining the new school, I joined the Girl's Scout, and I was selected to represent my camp. When I stepped on that stage for the very first time, I was scared. A girl in our camp told me, "Don't let them overshadow you. Stand out. Be different." That gave me confidence. I walked around the room with the upmost confidence a 5th grader could ever have. That night, I felt as if everything that I've gone through was suddenly worth it because I won. The feeling of acceptance is indescribable and after that, I joined more pageants than I could count. My confidence kept growing and growing as the next one comes by. Then the time came where I was chosen to compete in a nationwide pageant. It was an adventure least to say. I may have not won, but I never lost my confidence. In fact, that loss made me dream bigger. I thought that maybe pageantry isn't for me. Apart from that, what I wanted to be is a model. Chasing a dream like that was difficult. It was difficult because I realized if I wanted to get into this industry - rejection is something to get used to. Getting rejected by a number of agencies because your portfolio wasn't enough can leave you hurt and disappointed, but I used that to encourage me to become better. You're probably wondering, "Why a model?" I've thought of other things I wanted to be; a fashion designer and an author. I got passionate for the both of it. It's where I can let my imagination run wild. I discovered my love for turning clothes that aren't used anymore and to turning them into something new recently. It was a great way for me to reduce buying clothes and instead, turn clothes I've used to something I wanted to buy. I guess you could say I love turning things from drab into fab. I thought about becoming an author long before I knew what I really wanted to be. It's when I discovered an online platform solely for writing. I wrote stories and at first, I was hesitant to post them because I was afraid of getting criticized. You can't really avoid those thoughts but when I posted them, I wish I should've done it earlier. They got attention and so much feedback that I decided to continue it, letting whatever I wanted to happen, happen. But in my heart, I knew that what I really wanted to be, which was a model. After living here and going to the same school in the UAE for a couple of years, I moved to a different school. I experienced something so much more different: I fell in love. You'd expect me to say with a guy, but no, it's with a girl. She makes my heart beat fast whenever I think about her or whenever she's around me. She makes me fall in love all over again with a single word and a single look. Furthermore, she was gorgeous; divine if you please. In a short amount of time, I've shared so many memories that I treasure with her. She showed me a different perspective in life in both good and bad. That sometimes things are not what they seem to be. She encourages me to strive hard, dream big and become the best version of myself. Experiences like those makes me realize that while I'm still young, I still have a lot to discover in life and those experiences will and do define me as a person. A person that feels and dreams. |
A cool summer breeze flowed throughout the bedroom in my second cousin, Nicky's duplex. I had come to visit my mother's aunt across town with my brother. As both my brother and cousin were several years older than eight-year-old me, they were, of course, looking for a way to occupy me so I would leave them alone. "Here, why don't you play this for a bit?" Nicky said, booting up a game that I had no idea would be an integral part of my life for several years. As the blocky world faded in around me, I was overcome with a sense of wonder and curiosity. A whole world, just sitting there. Ready for me to explore. Fast-forward a few months, and I spent hours convincing my dad to spend the $14 it cost for our own copy of the game. I remember him building me my first weak PC out of spare parts. It ran Windows XP and played Minecraft at an agonizingly slow framerate of 15 FPS. But it was good enough for me. My first Minecraft community was a creative server called Arcator. On it, I built many things-mansions, pixel art, even an amusement park. Eventually, despite only being nine-years-old, I took on an administrative role, keeping the server free of anyone who cheated or destroyed other users' creations. But the most important thing I did on that server was create friendships and a community that not only transcended countries, but also the death of the actual Minecraft server. I still have friends to this day from that server, and I'll never forget the memories I made with it. Minecraft didn't only aid me in forming new friendships, it also helped me keep pre-existing ones. When I was in 7th grade, my best friend, Jacob, moved to another town and of course, another school. Minecraft was the link that kept our friendship alive. I remember playing Minecraft and other games for hours together while talking over Skype. Over time, we've shifted to other games. Now, I have less time than I did then to play, anyways. However, without Minecraft, I'm confident our friendship would have faded away long ago. Minecraft as a game, is ever-changing. The game's audience as it was when I started playing changed a while ago. The one thing that has never changed since the game's very beginning is the music. The melancholy, yet tranquil music is not only nostalgic for me, but it's a window into the past; a symbol of the memories I've made and a childhood that's ended. Listening to the music brings me back to a time when things were different-when I was younger, and blissfully naive. It brings back memories I'll always hold dear to my heart. There will always be something special about that time. It may just be a bunch of 1's and 0's put together by a couple of guys in Sweden, but Minecraft shaped me into the person I am today. For nearly 9 years, even before its popularity boom, I was an avid player of the game. It was my introduction to gaming and computers. It was the spark of my interest in computer science. From becoming an administrator of a Minecraft server at nine-years-old, to using Minecraft to keep a long-distance friendship alive, I made friends, communities, and memories that I'll never forget. | A cool summer breeze flowed throughout the bedroom in my second cousin, Nicky's duplex. I had come to visit my mother's aunt across town with my brother. As both my brother and cousin were several years older than eight-year-old me, they were, of course, looking for a way to occupy me, so I would leave them alone. "Here, why don't you play this for a bit?" Nicky said, booting up a game that I had no idea would be an integral part of my life for several years. As the blocky world faded in around me, I was overcome with a sense of wonder and curiosity. A whole world, just sitting there. Ready for me to explore. Fast-forward a few months, and I spent hours convincing my dad to spend the $14 it cost for our own copy of the game. I remember him building me my first weak PC out of spare parts. It ran Windows XP and played Minecraft at an agonizingly slow frame rate of 15 FPS. But it was good enough for me. My first Minecraft community was a creative server called Actor. On it, I built many things-mansions, pixel art, even an amusement park. Eventually, despite only being nine-years-old, I took on an administrative role, keeping the server free of anyone who cheated or destroyed other users' creations. But the most important thing I did on that server was created friendships and a community that not only transcended countries, but also the death of the actual Minecraft server. I still have friends to this day from that server, and I'll never forget the memories I made with it. Minecraft didn't only aid me in forming new friendships, it also helped me keep pre-existing ones. When I was in 7th grade, my best friend, Jacob, moved to another town and of course, another school. Minecraft was the link that kept our friendship alive. I remember playing Minecraft and other games for hours together while talking over Skype. Over time, we've shifted to other games. Now, I have less time than I did then to play, anyway. However, without Minecraft, I'm confident our friendship would have faded away long ago. Minecraft as a game, is ever-changing. The game's audience as it was when I started playing changed a while ago. The one thing that has never changed since the game's very beginning is the music. The melancholy, yet tranquil music is not only nostalgic for me, but it's a window into the past; a symbol of the memories I've made and a childhood that's ended. Listening to the music brings me back to a time when things were different-when I was younger, and blissfully naive. It brings back memories I'll always hold dear to my heart. There will always be something special about that time. It may just be a bunch of 1's and 0's put together by a couple of guys in Sweden, but Minecraft shaped me into the person I am today. For nearly 9 years, even before its popularity boom, I was an avid player of the game. It was my introduction to gaming and computers. It was the spark of my interest in computer science. From becoming an administrator of a Minecraft server at nine-years-old, to using Minecraft to keep a long-distance friendship alive, I made friends, communities, and memories that I'll never forget. |
Everyone struggles with something in school.For me, it was learning geometry and probability as a freshman. After deciding my teacher was absolutely no use to me during tutorials, I turned towards the next most logical choice: my dad. Full of confusion, I reached out to him, hoping for some quick advice. I instead saw his eyes light up eagerly, giddy for the opportunity to teach what he had learned as a student at Wharton Business School. That night, I actually learned about terms like "permutations" and "transversals", and felt ecstatic off the natural high after experiencing my first "aha!" moment. Seeing my grades improve, I chose to start sitting with my dad more often and practice what I struggled in. These conversations mostly ebbed and flowed around what I was learning at school, but soon we began talking about financial competence, or as my dad puts it: "The most important skill one can have". As a 13-year-old, this bored me to death, yet I made conscious efforts to absorb my dad's wise words. The beginning few weekends consisted of going over basic terms, like "supply-demand curves", "elasticity", and "monopolies", but we slowly became more hands-on, and once we got to actual investing, I was hooked. My dad warned me, however, "It's not a game, it's much easier to lose money than it is to gain profits." He added only half-jokingly, "Also don't use 'eeny-meeny-miny-mo' to justify your actions in investing!" Since then, every day precisely at 9:15 p.m, the two of us get together and discuss our new findings for the day. I'm not afraid to admit it: I sucked at this in the beginning. While my dad would share details about market caps and inter-relational GDP's, I would share details about new smartphone unveilings and speculations about pricing. But my dad showed patience, and I learned to understand what to look for within news clippings and headlines. Not long after, we began talking so fluently, my mom described it as "hearing Martians talk" due to how engrossed we were with the topic. My dad believes it's up to him to illuminate the hidden workings of the world to me as I grow up. For the two of us, investing is our 3rd hidden working, right after 'friendships' and 'got your nose!' As we learned more, I realized Investing is the closest us humans can get to real magic. It's not hard to imagine a Portfolio Manager or Personal Consultant uttering the words, "Now for my next trick, I will make profits appear out of thin air!" Of course, all magicians have their secrets, and it is up to us to discover them. As I discover more and more 'magic tricks', I realize how applicable these lessons are within my daily life. Being able to analyze statistical data, organize charts, or plot directional variances isn't necessary to get through a normal day, but why simply amble when you can seize opportunities? This struck a chord with me, and the hunger to create something meaningful was on my mind. Investing is my perfect win-win-win situation; Where I'm able to apply my skills in my daily life, apply my profits for my expenses, and share my experience with my friends, all while increasing my awareness of our world. It's hard to contain my ramblings for the subject, evident through what my friends call "passionate, but too one-sided" debates at our lunch table. I can admit that I faced difficulty in school with certain subjects. It's through my personal motivation that I overcame this struggle, and found something I'm passionate about. To me, there is no greater excitement than the ability to bring together my passion for investing and my daily life in ways that will support my desire for learning and higher understanding. I'm still in the midst of editing, but before I continue, can I get some feedback and critiques? | Everyone struggles with something in school. For me, it was learning geometry and probability as a freshman. After deciding my teacher was absolutely no use to me during tutorials, I turned towards the next most logical choice: my dad. Full of confusion, I reached out to him, hoping for some quick advice. I instead saw his eyes light up eagerly, giddy for the opportunity to teach what he had learned as a student at Wharton Business School. That night, I actually learned about terms like "permutations" and "transversal", and felt ecstatic off the natural high after experiencing my first "aha!" moment. Seeing my grades improve, I chose to start sitting with my dad more often and practice what I struggled in. These conversations mostly ebbed and flowed around what I was learning at school, but soon we began talking about financial competence, or as my dad puts it: "The most important skill one can have". As a 13-year-old, this bored me to death, yet I made conscious efforts to absorb my dad's wise words. The beginning few weekends consisted of going over basic terms, like "supply-demand curves", "elasticity", and "monopolies", but we slowly became more hands-on, and once we got to actual investing, I was hooked. My dad warned me, however, "It's not a game, it's much easier to lose money than it is to gain profits." He added only half-jokingly, "Also don't use 'eeny-meeny-miny-mo' to justify your actions in investing!" Since then, every day precisely at 9:15 p.m, the two of us get together and discuss our new findings for the day. I'm not afraid to admit it: I sucked at this in the beginning. While my dad would share details about market caps and inter-relational GDP's, I would share details about new smartphone unveiling and speculations about pricing. But my dad showed patience, and I learned to understand what to look for within news clippings and headlines. Not long after, we began talking so fluently, my mom described it as "hearing Martians talk" due to how engrossed we were with the topic. My dad believes it's up to him to illuminate the hidden workings of the world to me as I grow up. For the two of us, investing is our 3rd hidden working, right after 'friendships' and 'got your nose!' As we learned more, I realized Investing is the closest us humans can get to real magic. It's not hard to imagine a Portfolio Manager or Personal Consultant uttering the words, "Now for my next trick, I will make profits appear out of thin air!" Of course, all magicians have their secrets, and it is up to us to discover them. As I discover more and more 'magic tricks', I realize how applicable these lessons are within my daily life. Being able to analyze statistical data, organize charts, or plot directional variances isn't necessary to get through a normal day, but why simply amble when you can seize opportunities? This struck a chord with me, and the hunger to create something meaningful was on my mind. Investing is my perfect win-win-win situation; Where I'm able to apply my skills in my daily life, apply my profits for my expenses, and share my experience with my friends, all while increasing my awareness of our world. It's hard to contain my ramblings for the subject, evident through what my friends call "passionate, but too one-sided" debates at our lunch table. I can admit that I faced difficulty in school with certain subjects. It's through my personal motivation that I overcame this struggle, and found something I'm passionate about. To me, there is no greater excitement than the ability to bring together my passion for investing and my daily life in ways that will support my desire for learning and higher understanding. I'm still in the midst of editing, but before I continue, can I get some feedback and critiques? |
Prompt:Explain your interest in the major you selected and describe how you have recently explored or developed this interest inside andor outside the classroom. You may also explain how this major relates to your future career goals. If you're applying to the Division of General Studies, explain your academic interests and strengths or your future career goals. You may include any majors or areas of study you're currently considering. Limit your response to 300 to 400 words. Major: Computer Science and Statistics Essay:It was a Thursday night back in the 3rd grade. I just finished preparing for bed. When I got in bed, I closed my eyes with the intentions of going to sleep. Within minutes, a whole artificial world came to life. Before I knew it, my house transformed into a house 20 years from the future. Robots brought me water and brushed my teeth. My whole family could sleep on the drive to Los Angeles in our self driving car. My brain had internet connectivity. This was like heaven for me until I woke up the next morning to another monotonous day of school. These dreams were routine for me throughout childhood until 6th grade when I learnt about the field of Computer Science. The thought that I could turn my childhood dreams into reality drew me to pursue programming. Seen by many as a daunting task, programming for me is effortless. I first began programming in the 7th grade when I was introduced to Javascript. As the years passed, basic Javascript paved the path for full stack web development and Python programming. Today I am proud to say that I am literate in 7 programming languages. A large portion of my free time, when not socializing with friends, is spent broadening my knowledge base in computer programming and reading up about various developments in computer science. I am also an avid attendee at Hackathons. In my High School years, I have had the honor of being recruited by my school's Engineering and Computer Science department to serve as a mentor and a peer tutor to many students taking their first computer science course. Students would reach out to me with problems both basic and complex. I would find the most simple way to explain the solution to them. My passion for programming not only has the power to make my childhood dreams a reality but it has given me rewarding experiences spreading my love for programming. At UIUC, I plan on majoring in Computer Science and Statistics with a focus on a combination of both Artificial Intelligence and Bioinformatics. With this combination, I one day hope to start my own company focused on developing an AI-powered wearable health diagnosis device that is both accessible to the masses and smartphone integrated. Can you guys please provide me with good feedback and suggest edits? | Prompt:Explain your interest in the major you selected and describe how you have recently explored or developed this interest inside ardor outside the classroom. You may also explain how this major relates to your future career goals. If you're applying to the Division of General Studies, explain your academic interests and strengths or your future career goals. You may include any majors or areas of study you're currently considering. Limit your response to 300 to 400 words. Major: Computer Science and Statistics Essay:It was a Thursday night back in the 3rd grade. I just finished preparing for bed. When I got in bed, I closed my eyes with the intentions of going to sleep. Within minutes, a whole artificial world came to life. Before I knew it, my house transformed into a house 20 years from the future. Robots brought me water and brushed my teeth. My whole family could sleep on the drive to Los Angeles in our self-driving car. My brain had internet connectivity. This was like heaven for me until I woke up the next morning to another monotonous day of school. These dreams were routine for me throughout childhood until 6th grade when I learned about the field of Computer Science. The thought that I could turn my childhood dreams into reality drew me to pursue programming. Seen by many as a daunting task, programming for me is effortless. I first began programming in the 7th grade when I was introduced to JavaScript. As the years passed, basic JavaScript paved the path for full stack web development and Python programming. Today I am proud to say that I am literate in 7 programming languages. A large portion of my free time, when not socializing with friends, is spent broadening my knowledge base in computer programming and reading up about various developments in computer science. I am also an avid attendee at Hackathons. In my High School years, I have had the honor of being recruited by my school's Engineering and Computer Science department to serve as a mentor and a peer tutor to many students taking their first computer science course. Students would reach out to me with problems both basic and complex. I would find the most simple way to explain the solution to them. My passion for programming not only has the power to make my childhood dreams a reality, but it has given me rewarding experiences spreading my love for programming. At UIC, I plan on majoring in Computer Science and Statistics with a focus on a combination of both Artificial Intelligence and Bioinformatics. With this combination, I one day hope to start my own company focused on developing an AI-powered wearable health diagnosis device that is both accessible to the masses and smartphone integrated. Can you guys please provide me with good feedback and suggest edits? |
I was in 10th grade when I was introduced to the wonderful world of computer engineering. I was selected to represent my school team in the National Robotics Olympiad - 2017. We had to build and program a robot to collect coloured blocks and place them in their designated location. This sparked my interest in computer engineering. This experience led me to working on various Arduino projects - from simple projects like fingerprint door lock to more complex ones like oil and gas surveillance drone. # 504 Characters. # Please give suggestions and feedback. # This is a rough draft. I have only begun. I have to still answer the question of " your reasons for applying to waterloo" and also about " your educational goals". # English is not my first language, so I have some difficulties. # Edit: Please help me answering these questions: 1. Your reasons for applying to waterloo2. Your educational goals. Thank you! | I was in 10th grade when I was introduced to the wonderful world of computer engineering. I was selected to represent my school team in the National Robotics Olympiad - 2017. We had to build and program a robot to collect colored blocks and place them in their designated location. This sparked my interest in computer engineering. This experience led me to working on various Arduino projects - from simple projects like fingerprint door lock to more complex ones like oil and gas surveillance drone. # 504 Characters. # Please give suggestions and feedback. # This is a rough draft. I have only begun. I have to still answer the question of" your reasons for applying to Waterloo" and also about" your educational goals". # English is not my first language, so I have some difficulties. # Edit: Please help me to answer these questions: 1. Your reasons for applying to waterloo2. Your educational goals. Thank you! |
Could anyone please take a look at my answer to the AIF question? Harsh criticize accept.Question 1:Reasons for choosing your program and Waterloo.Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen programs, and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied more than one program please discuss your interest in each program. (900) I want to pursue a degree in Computer Engineering or Mechanical Engineering and I believe Waterloo will be the perfect place for me. I was inspired by the advanced technology in the movie, Iron Man, and Jarvis, in particular, impressed me the most. I was so curious about how the machines were built and how the programs were written to control them, and I believe the resources in Waterloo can support me to carry out researches regarding these. Waterloo is renowned for its excellence in innovation and I think my goal to specialize in the science and technology field can be achieved efficiently since innovation is one of the most important elements for engineering. Additionally, the co-op program would not only effectively improve both my academic knowledge and engineering skills, but also provide me a greater opportunity to work in big technology corporations. | Could anyone please take a look at my answer to the AIF question? Harsh criticize accept. Question 1:Reasons for choosing your program and Waterloo. Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen programs, and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied more than one program please discuss your interest in each program. (900) I want to pursue a degree in Computer Engineering or Mechanical Engineering and I believe Waterloo will be the perfect place for me. I was inspired by the advanced technology in the movie, Iron Man, and Jarvis, in particular, impressed me the most. I was so curious about how the machines were built and how the programs were written to control them, and I believe the resources in Waterloo can support me to carry out researches regarding these. Waterloo is renowned for its excellence in innovation and I think my goal to specialize in the science and technology field can be achieved efficiently since innovation is one of the most important elements for engineering. Additionally, the co-op program would not only effectively improve both my academic knowledge and engineering skills, but also provide me a greater opportunity to work in big technology corporations. |
It all started with the building of a simple electrical circuit at age 7 after I'd been taught how to draw the diagram in school. After seeing my teacher draw the diagram on the board, I began to imagine how it'd look like in real life. (It was as if I had AutoCAD installed in my brain). So after school that day, I didn't stay behind to play soccer with my friends. I ran home and went to Uncle Ernest's electronic shop to see if I could get some batteries, wires and an LED. He provided me with all I needed. I rushed back home and realized my father had returned from work. So I told him of my idea and he decided to help me. I set all the stuff on the table in the middle of the living room and my dad sat on the couch. He sat there and gave me instructions as to what to connect first and how to connect it. By the time we were done, the LED light was shining brightly. I was amazed at this. I had built an electronic circuit from scratch with my very own hands at just age 7. My father sensed my amazement and told me that I could build anything I wanted to, if only I was determined enough. This encouragement lead me to even experiment with my newly built circuit. I even found out that pencil lead could be used as a switch. This little thing that I was able to build propelled my interest into what I grew up to know as Engineering. As I began to research on it, I realized there were many fields involved but one field resonated with what I did when I was 7 and that was mechanical engineering. | It all started with the building of a simple electrical circuit at age 7 after I'd been taught how to draw the diagram in school. After seeing my teacher draw the diagram on the board, I began to imagine how it'd look like in real life. (It was as if I had AutoCAD installed in my brain). So after school that day, I didn't stay behind to play soccer with my friends. I ran home and went to Uncle Ernest's electronic shop to see if I could get some batteries, wires and an LED. He provided me with all I needed. I rushed back home and realized my father had returned from work. So I told him of my idea, and he decided to help me. I set all the stuff on the table in the middle of the living room and my dad sat on the couch. He sat there and gave me instructions as to what to connect first and how to connect it. By the time we were done, the LED light was shining brightly. I was amazed at this. I had built an electronic circuit from scratch with my very own hands at just age 7. My father sensed my amazement and told me that I could build anything I wanted to, if only I was determined enough. This encouragement lead me to even experiment with my newly built circuit. I even found out that pencil lead could be used as a switch. This little thing that I was able to build propelled my interest into what I grew up to know as Engineering. As I began to research on it, I realized there were many fields involved, but one field resonated with what I did when I was 7 and that was mechanical engineering. |
The opportunity to attend the US Naval Academy would allow me to receive amazing educational experiences, where I will learn and train with others who also share the same attitude toward education. The structure and training will further instill in me how to work as a team using learned skills and education to become a single force and accomplish a goal. The USNA motto "Through Knowledge, Sea Power"; by continuing my education to become a future Naval Officer, I will help to ensure the continuation of the strength and world power of the US Navy. Accountability is one of the reasons I want to attend the USNA. Midshipmen are held accountable by their peers through peer review and reflection. Peer review allows each midshipman to be accountable to peers for academics, sports, personal growth, and skills and receive assistance or discipline from peers allowing for the growth of leadership abilities and decision making. In scouting, while completing my Eagle Scout project I learned many of the same leadership skills that the USNA will build on to create a future Navy Officer. In NJROTC as Commanding Officer, of the battalion I have learned to evaluate situations and skill sets to take the best course of action. My academics in high school have been rigorous and challenging requiring prioritizing, organization, and time management skills which are critical in leadership. The USNA also has an outstanding athletic program I am excited to be apart of. I train with a daily workout which includes running, swimming, and weightlifting. The opportunity to attend USNA will allow for my personal growth in education as well as my pursuit to remain physically fit. Attending Summer Seminar gave me a glimpse of what my four years at the academy will be like. I was able to use and learn new leadership skills and was excited to have the smaller class size which lends itself to a more personal learning environment. The USNA is my choice service academy not just for the future opportunities I will have but also for the contributions and desire I possess to complete my journey to becoming a USNA graduate, first one in my family to be a college graduate, and to further serve my Country beyond graduation as a Naval Officer. | The opportunity to attend the US Naval Academy would allow me to receive amazing educational experiences, where I will learn and train with others who also share the same attitude toward education. The structure and training will further instill in me how to work as a team using learned skills and education to become a single force and accomplish a goal. The USA motto "Through Knowledge, Sea Power"; by continuing my education to become a future Naval Officer, I will help to ensure the continuation of the strength and world power of the US Navy. Accountability is one of the reasons I want to attend the USA. Midshipmen are held accountable by their peers through peer review and reflection. Peer review allows each midshipman to be accountable to peers for academics, sports, personal growth, and skills and receive assistance or discipline from peers allowing for the growth of leadership abilities and decision-making. In scouting, while completing my Eagle Scout project I learned many of the same leadership skills that the USA will build on to create a future Navy Officer. In NJ ROTC as Commanding Officer, of the battalion I have learned to evaluate situations and skill sets to take the best course of action. My academics in high school have been rigorous and challenging requiring prioritizing, organization, and time management skills which are critical in leadership. The USA also has an outstanding athletic program I am excited to be a part of. I train with a daily workout which includes running, swimming, and weightlifting. The opportunity to attend USA will allow for my personal growth in education as well as my pursuit to remain physically fit. Attending Summer Seminar gave me a glimpse of what my four years at the academy will be like. I was able to use and learn new leadership skills and was excited to have the smaller class size which lends itself to a more personal learning environment. The USA is my choice service academy not just for the future opportunities I will have but also for the contributions and desire I possess to complete my journey to becoming a USA graduate, first one in my family to be a college graduate, and to further serve my Country beyond graduation as a Naval Officer. |
Last year I held a cycling trip around Taiwan for the purpose of conducting a social experiment and fulfilling a self-sense of ego. Long-distance cycling has been proved to be the hardest in all dimensions of cycling and by achieving such an event can certainly boost my self-esteem to an impregnable degree. Meanwhile, the desire to experience the variation among human behavior after physical fatigue and how the individual's response under extreme conditions (cycling in a storm rain) prompted me to plan for the cycling trip. The trip has a significant impact on my interest development, I was amazed by the collaboration among human relationships, as in the willingness in people helping others when themselves were in imaginable condition. In the duration of our 9 days trip, despite all the unpleasant weather we had experienced, the complaints were scarce and my team members all showed a great magnitude of mutual corporations even when they are deliberated. I observed the 4 distinct types of people after exhaustion: considerate, irritable, empathetic and expressionless. The irritable type of personality was my greatest learning source out of the four, I learned the importance of diction selection when people were tired along with the utilization of proper tone when speaking to them. The chances of being attacked by people who tend to get more emotional under fatigue are unable to diminish, however, they serve as an efficient path to peek into different characteristics in a state of extreme tiredness. (I felt like it can be improved so I need some helppppp) | Last year I held a cycling trip around Taiwan for the purpose of conducting a social experiment and fulfilling a self-sense of ego. Long-distance cycling has been proved to be the hardest in all dimensions of cycling and by achieving such an event can certainly boost my self-esteem to an impregnable degree. Meanwhile, the desire to experience the variation among human behavior after physical fatigue and how the individual's response under extreme conditions (cycling in a storm rain) prompted me to plan for the cycling trip. The trip has a significant impact on my interest development, I was amazed by the collaboration among human relationships, as in the willingness in people helping others when themselves were in imaginable condition. In the duration of our 9 days trip, despite all the unpleasant weather we had experienced, the complaints were scarce and my team members all showed a great magnitude of mutual corporations even when they are deliberated. I observed the 4 distinct types of people after exhaustion: considerate, irritable, empathetic and expressionless. The irritable type of personality was my greatest learning source out of the four, I learned the importance of diction selection when people were tired along with the utilization of proper tone when speaking to them. The chances of being attacked by people who tend to get more emotional under fatigue are unable to diminish, however, they serve as an efficient path to peek into different characteristics in a state of extreme tiredness. (I felt like it can be improved, so I need some helppppp) |
Throughout my time in the Navy, my exposure to new skills and resulting experiences enabled me to step out of my comfort zone and take charge. My military experience instilled discipline in me, and shaped me into a leader. Additionally, I learned from my failures and bettered myself not only as a sailor, but as a human being. My experience as an Aviation Maintenance Administration Third Class provided me with certain professional and life skills in a high-stress, demanding environment. Through trial and error as well as repetition, I built a daily routine for myself and eventually adjusted to setting priorities, meeting deadlines, and conducting important briefings. I learned how to handle stress and convert it into positive motivation and energy to complete my daily routines with high standards. I transitioned from being an unprepared sailor, who stuttered every time I stepped up to the podium, to a confident, knowledgeable communicator. | Throughout my time in the Navy, my exposure to new skills and resulting experiences enabled me to step out of my comfort zone and take charge. My military experience instilled discipline in me, and shaped me into a leader. Additionally, I learned from my failures and bettered myself not only as a sailor, but as a human being. My experience as an Aviation Maintenance Administration Third Class provided me with certain professional and life skills in a high-stress, demanding environment. Through trial and error as well as repetition, I built a daily routine for myself and eventually adjusted to setting priorities, meeting deadlines, and conducting important briefings. I learned how to handle stress and convert it into positive motivation and energy to complete my daily routines with high standards. I transitioned from being an unprepared sailor, who stuttered every time I stepped up to the podium, to a confident, knowledgeable communicator. |
When I was ten, I pass the test to the elite class where I was the youngest in class. Being in a strange class, I assumed I fit in rather easily as I had made exceptional friends and others were friendly too. Until one day, I remember it was a normal Wednesday, the class was on a break and there is this group of girls approached me. Since they were kind of the "famous kids" in the class and only talk to people within their group, I did not talk to them much. As a new girl, of course, I wish to befriend to them so I answered yes when they asked if I would enjoy a game. The girls started playing the simple rock, paper, scissor game but when one lost, that person has to unbuttoned one button of their shirt. Every time I win, they come up with a reason to not admit it. Taken over by horror knowing what would happen if I lost, I took off though they wouldn't let me leave, they forced me to finish the game knowing I would lose. When the last round finishes and ended up as I'm the loser, all of them surrounded, mocked and forced me to undress my shirt in public. Luckily at that time, I was able to run away. My life from that moment was turned into hell. Every time I went to ballet class, they surrounded me, tried to disrobe my shirt and if they could not, they would hit me vigorously, screaming so that everyone knew that I was bullied. While being threatened not to tell our teacher or they would hit harder, honestly, I would be too terrified to go for it anyway. Gradually, ballet grew into a nightmare to my life, I hate ballet, I hate the music that I danced to, I hate everything that related to ballet. Soon, I told my parents that I would leave ballet, that I would not prefer it to become a part of my life anymore, then I barely even go to class anymore. For countless nights before I sleep, I cried. Telling my parents was not the choice for me as they worked exceedingly diligent to earn money to raise my sister and me, I did not need to bother them with all of that "nonsense". At that point, I could not dance, I could not finish a spin, stand on my toes anymore. Every time I attempted to practice my dancing, I fell seeing my head was full of the vivid vision of being physically abused and moreover, no one was there for me. After a few months, my ballet teacher called and told my parents that I would have no choice but to leave the elite class if I keep on skipping class. Instantly, my world collapsed whereas deep down inside, I still had that burning fire for ballet, I crave to be a part of that beautiful art and they were all swallowed by my fear of being assaulted again. Aching to stand on my toes again, to feel the presence of the music around, to dance with all my heart again, I know I would oblige to fight for what I love. Eventually, I came to class. This time just like any other time, they approached me, I was petrified and I was about to run away until I saw one of my friends at the back of the class dancing. As I told myself I would fake it until I become it, I took a deep breath and look at them straight into their eyes. The girls startled a little but they quickly hide it and talk in a threatening tone about how dare I showed up at class. Loud and clear, I told them that I would not give up ballet just for them, I told them to back off, that they were just a bunch of bullies, that I was no longer afraid of them and that I would take this to the teacher if they ever browbeat anyone again. Stepped back right away, the girls stuttered and despite not actually contrite for what they did, they apologized anyway. After that, I kept on following my passion for ballet even after I found out my dream was to work in the hospitality industry. Those bullies never have the courage to approach again, and they were kicked out of class a long time after due to their inferior behaviors. For me, I never regret what happen even about agreed to be a part of the game since that's what I call for at that time and that has helped me to find my strength, to stand up to what I love and believe in. | When I was ten, I pass the test to the elite class where I was the youngest in class. Being in a strange class, I assumed I fit in rather easily as I had made exceptional friends and others were friendly too. Until one day, I remember it was a normal Wednesday, the class was on a break and there is this group of girls approached me. Since they were kind of the "famous kids" in the class and only talk to people within their group, I did not talk to them much. As a new girl, of course, I wish to befriend to them, so I answered yes when they asked if I would enjoy a game. The girls started playing the simple rock, paper, scissor game but when one lost, that person has to unbuttoned one button of their shirt. Every time I win, they come up with a reason to not admit it. Taken over by horror knowing what would happen if I lost, I took off though they wouldn't let me leave, they forced me to finish the game knowing I would lose. When the last round finishes and ended up as I'm the loser, all of them surrounded, mocked and forced me to undress my shirt in public. Luckily at that time, I was able to run away. My life from that moment was turned into hell. Every time I went to ballet class, they surrounded me, tried to disrobe my shirt and if they could not, they would hit me vigorously, screaming so that everyone knew that I was bullied. While being threatened not to tell our teacher, or they would hit harder, honestly, I would be too terrified to go for it anyway. Gradually, ballet grew into a nightmare to my life, I hate ballet, I hate the music that I danced to, I hate everything that related to ballet. Soon, I told my parents that I would leave ballet, that I would not prefer it to become a part of my life anymore, then I barely even go to class anymore. For countless nights before I sleep, I cried. Telling my parents was not the choice for me as they worked exceedingly diligent to earn money to raise my sister and me, I did not need to bother them with all of that "nonsense". At that point, I could not dance, I could not finish a spin, stand on my toes anymore. Every time I attempted to practice my dancing, I fell seeing my head was full of the vivid vision of being physically abused and moreover, no one was there for me. After a few months, my ballet teacher called and told my parents that I would have no choice but to leave the elite class if I keep on skipping class. Instantly, my world collapsed whereas deep down inside, I still had that burning fire for ballet, I crave to be a part of that beautiful art, and they were all swallowed by my fear of being assaulted again. Aching to stand on my toes again, to feel the presence of the music around, to dance with all my heart again, I know I would oblige to fight for what I love. Eventually, I came to class. This time just like any other time, they approached me, I was petrified, and I was about to run away until I saw one of my friends at the back of the class dancing. As I told myself I would fake it until I become it, I took a deep breath and look at them straight into their eyes. The girls startled a little, but they quickly hide it and talk in a threatening tone about how dare I showed up at class. Loud and clear, I told them that I would not give up ballet just for them, I told them to back off, that they were just a bunch of bullies, that I was no longer afraid of them and that I would take this to the teacher if they ever browbeat anyone again. Stepped back right away, the girls stuttered and despite not actually contrite for what they did, they apologized anyway. After that, I kept on following my passion for ballet even after I found out my dream was to work in the hospitality industry. Those bullies never have the courage to approach again, and they were kicked out of class a long time after due to their inferior behaviors. For me, I never regret what happen even about agreed to be a part of the game since that's what I call for at that time and that has helped me find my strength, to stand up to what I love and believe in. |
Note: I tried my best to answer the prompt questions, however it is hard to answer them with such few words. Any help and opinion is appreciated. Thank you. For me, computers have always been fascinating. From a young age, I was always unscrewing and opening things to see what was inside, trying to understand how they work. Over the years, this interest progressed, and the more I used computers, the greater my desire became to understand how they operate. I started taking my own computer and cell phone apart to repair them, and then started repairing electronics for friends. After getting a basic grasp of hardware, software components became my passion. Soon I had decided that I wanted to choose software development as my educational path. I am enthralled by the idea of creating new and useful tools by coding. I am eager to further widen my base of knowledge in computer science, and I know that Georgia Tech is a great place to do so. For one, Tech's BS CS program does not only teach students the foundations of computer science, but also promotes problem-solving skills on the highest level, encouraging innovation and critical thinking. In the future, I hope to be able to make people's lives easier by developing user-friendly utility software, for example simple interfaces that help older people keep up with modern technology. I am looking for the best possible education to become the best me, and I strongly feel GA Tech is the right place for me. Not only does the institution provide excellent academics, it also provides a diverse campus, allowing students to learn from and embrace many cultures different from theirs. | Note: I tried my best to answer the prompt questions, however it is hard to answer them with such few words. Any help and opinion is appreciated. Thank you. For me, computers have always been fascinating. From a young age, I was always unscrewing and opening things to see what was inside, trying to understand how they work. Over the years, this interest progressed, and the more I used computers, the greater my desire became to understand how they operate. I started taking my own computer and cell phone apart to repair them, and then started repairing electronics for friends. After getting a basic grasp of hardware, software components became my passion. Soon I had decided that I wanted to choose software development as my educational path. I am enthralled by the idea of creating new and useful tools by coding. I am eager to further widen my base of knowledge in computer science, and I know that Georgia Tech is a great place to do so. For one, Tech's BS CS program does not only teach students the foundations of computer science, but also promotes problem-solving skills on the highest level, encouraging innovation and critical thinking. In the future, I hope to be able to make people's lives easier by developing user-friendly utility software, for example simple interfaces that help older people keep up with modern technology. I am looking for the best possible education to become the best me, and I strongly feel GA Tech is the right place for me. Not only does the institution provide excellent academics, it also provides a diverse campus, allowing students to learn from and embrace many cultures different from theirs. |
Sitting on my bed, I took a deep breath in and open the first envelope. Rejected. "It's okay," I said to myself. I calmly open the next one. Rejected. With no composure left, I frantically grab the last envelope, ferociously ripping it to reveal another rejection. I discard the mangled letters in the trash can, along with my confidence, and slowly rock myself to sleep. Throughout elementary and middle school, rejection was an unknown concept to me; I was accepted to my elementary school's gifted programs, as well as the International Baccalaureate program in middle school. Growing up in an academically oriented community, expectations were high, but my sister and friends had no trouble reaching higher. Therefore, after facing rejection from not only the Governor's School, but also from my county's STEM and Leadership centers, I labeled myself a disgrace. So with disappointment, I started my high school journey as an IB student attending J. R. T***** High School, which I had unfairly deemed my "safety-school." Not only did I have a solely academically focused attitude that rendered my life lackluster and binary, I also was blissfully unaware of the true hardships of reality. Coming from a privileged suburban neighborhood, I was blessed, but ignorant, which caused the development of a contemptuous attitude based on prejudice views of the run-down nature of the school. However, in my sophomore year, Mrs. L**, an amazing math teacher, asked if I could help tutor a struggling geometry student named Hemanta. Perfunctorily, I complied. However, unbeknownst to me, what began as a small favor for her would ultimately become a spark for a euphoric shift in my character. On the first day of tutoring, I was faced with a daunting obstacle: a language barrier. As the session continued, both Hemanta and I struggled to properly convey our messages, and after multiple attempts, we tiredly retired our books, feeling unaccomplished. Defeated, I expressed my concerns to Mrs. Lee, who revealed to me that Hemanta moved to Virginia seeking refuge from violent hardships in Mongolia, her home country. My sheltered mindset had never confronted or even comprehended challenges comparable to Hemanta's whose story challenged my views. Shocked, I continued my tutoring sessions with Hemanta, realizing that, unlike me, Hemanta was not striving for academic perfection, but rather a high school diploma to aid her entry into the workforce. While I taught Hemanta geometry, and ultimately, help her pass her SOL, she ignited the broadening of my perspective and pushed me beyond academic success. I began to recognize other students, who like Hemanta, lived a lifestyle that differed heavily from mine. While some students worked long hours after school, others were caretakers of their parents. Though gradually, I awakened to not only the diversity present at T*****, but also the ambience of acceptance in the atmosphere, and by the end of sophomore year, I began volunteering at my local hospital and nursing home. Now, I step outside of a hardly air conditioned classroom, appreciating the pouring rain leaking from the oddly constructed V-shaped roofs covering our school, and the boisterous window ACs' leaking miscellaneous fluid that only contribute to the inundation of the hallways. And, despite the frizzing of my hair, I admire a group of Mexican transfer students strategically making their way to class in order to avoid the rain while fluently speaking Spanish. At the end of the year, I will always enjoy the sweet smell of Korean pancakes that Mrs. L** makes for her students (I always manage to steal an extra one). Amidst the comforting chaos of the heterogeneous mixture of people, I have come to realize that T***** is many things, but one thing it is not, is ordinary. While some students aspire for academic excellence, others raise siblings and support their families. The distinct lifestyles of not only students, but also the teachers, create a community unlike any other that provoked an irreversible epiphany in my character. I owe the kindling of my new mindset to T*****. This is a debt unique in its magnitude, but also a debt unique in its lack of burden. It is a debt unique in that its repayment is forward progress and gratefulness. As such, in spite of the school's physical appearance, my fondest memories will always be of leaky roofs and raucous ACs. | Sitting on my bed, I took a deep breath in and open the first envelope. Rejected. "It's okay," I said to myself. I calmly open the next one. Rejected. With no composure left, I frantically grab the last envelope, ferociously ripping it to reveal another rejection. I discard the mangled letters in the trash can, along with my confidence, and slowly rock myself to sleep. Throughout elementary and middle school, rejection was an unknown concept to me; I was accepted to my elementary school's gifted programs, as well as the International Baccalaureate program in middle school. Growing up in an academically oriented community, expectations were high, but my sister and friends had no trouble reaching higher. Therefore, after facing rejection from not only the Governor's School, but also from my county's STEM and Leadership centers, I labeled myself a disgrace. So with disappointment, I started my high school journey as an IB student attending J. R. T***** High School, which I had unfairly deemed my "safety-school." Not only did I have a solely academically focused attitude that rendered my life lackluster and binary, I also was blissfully unaware of the true hardships of reality. Coming from a privileged suburban neighborhood, I was blessed, but ignorant, which caused the development of a contemptuous attitude based on prejudice views of the run-down nature of the school. However, in my sophomore year, Mrs. L**, an amazing math teacher, asked if I could help tutor a struggling geometry student named He manta. Perfunctorily, I complied. However, unbeknownst to me, what began as a small favor for her would ultimately become a spark for a euphoric shift in my character. On the first day of tutoring, I was faced with a daunting obstacle: a language barrier. As the session continued, both He manta and I struggled to properly convey our messages, and after multiple attempts, we tiredly retired our books, feeling unaccomplished. Defeated, I expressed my concerns to Mrs. Lee, who revealed to me that He manta moved to Virginia seeking refuge from violent hardships in Mongolia, her home country. My sheltered mindset had never confronted or even comprehended challenges comparable to He manta's whose story challenged my views. Shocked, I continued my tutoring sessions with He manta, realizing that, unlike me, He manta was not striving for academic perfection, but rather a high school diploma to aid her entry into the workforce. While I taught He manta geometry, and ultimately, help her pass her SOL, she ignited the broadening of my perspective and pushed me beyond academic success. I began to recognize other students, who like He manta, lived a lifestyle that differed heavily from mine. While some students worked long hours after school, others were caretakers of their parents. Though gradually, I awakened to not only the diversity of present at T*****, but also the ambience of acceptance in the atmosphere, and by the end of sophomore year, I began volunteering at my local hospital and nursing home. Now, I step outside a hardly air-conditioned classroom, appreciating the pouring rain leaking from the oddly constructed V-shaped roofs covering our school, and the boisterous window AC's' leaking miscellaneous fluid that only contribute to the inundation of the hallways. And, despite the frizzing of my hair, I admire a group of Mexican transfer students strategically making their way to class in order to avoid the rain while fluently speaking Spanish. At the end of the year, I will always enjoy the sweet smell of Korean pancakes that Mrs. L** makes for her students (I always manage to steal an extra one). Amidst the comforting chaos of the heterogeneous mixture of people, I have come to realize that T***** is many things, but one thing it is not, is ordinary. While some students aspire for academic excellence, others raise siblings and support their families. The distinct lifestyles of not only students, but also the teachers, create a community unlike any other that provoked an irreversible epiphany in my character. I owe the kindling of my new mindset to T*****. This is a debt unique in its magnitude, but also a debt unique in its lack of burden. It is a debt unique in that its repayment is forward progress and gratefulness. As such, in spite of the school's physical appearance, my fondest memories will always be of leaky roofs and raucous AC's. |
I am from India. A country known for its diversity and unique culture that has shaped me into a unique individual that I am proud of. I was born in Bihar in a small town 'Kahalgaon'. Both my parents are from small villages. Having born in northern India, I have spent most of my life in Southern states of India. Being a Hindu, I have been taught to be very respectful of family values. With so many languages spoken, I am fluent in Hindi, English, Kannada, Tamil, Bhojpuri and Angika. I feel India is a combination of different countries. I grew up hearing and listening to my elder ones on what is right and wrong. It's a generation of morals that I carry with me and refer to constantly, sometimes without even realizing it. | I am from India. A country known for its diversity and unique culture that has shaped me into a unique individual that I am proud of. I was born in Bihar in a small town 'Jalgaon'. Both my parents are from small villages. Having born in northern India, I have spent most of my life in Southern states of India. Being a Hindu, I have been taught to be very respectful of family values. With so many languages spoken, I am fluent in Hindi, English, Kannada, Tamil, Houri and Angina. I feel India is a combination of different countries. I grew up hearing and listening to my elder ones on what is right and wrong. It's a generation of morals that I carry with me and refer to constantly, sometimes without even realizing it. |
Never liking the bitter and unsettling taste of coffee, I have grown to become an active tea drinker. Lavender earl grey in the mornings, refreshing peach iced tea in the afternoons, Roman chamomile before bed and milk bubble tea on the occasion, you could say that tea is a constant in my life. Mixed herbs bundled in a bag and infused in boiling water (served hot or cold), tea has seen me at my breaking points of junior year, my celebratory restaurant outings and everywhere in between. After rolling out of bed and throwing on some clothes, a thermos of hot black tea wakes me up in the morning, follows me on the bus to school and accompanies me on the desk of my first-period class-physics. It sits with me as I scramble to copy down as many notes as I can about torque, centripetal acceleration and beat frequencies as Dr. Mullmann races through his increasingly long PowerPoint. At the conclusion of the course, I can finally understand that the thermos on my desk is at rest because the difference of the normal force and gravitational force is equal to zero. And, if the thermos were to fall, the potential energy will convert into kinetic energy as it travels closer and closer towards the ground. The thermos follows me to his desk afterwards to ask questions, review problems and feed my curiosity of the physics world I am just beginning to explore. A bottle of raspberry iced tea at lunch is the perfect refresher, even if I am gulping it down as I review one last time for a German test the next period. As the line where the tea meets the air travels closer and closer towards the bottom of the bottle, I self-doubt myself more and more even though I know I am well prepared. After arriving home from tennis, cross country or track practice (depending on the season), I delve into studying and completing my homework for the next day. Frustrated while trying to understand a certain topic, a cup of piping hot tea soothes my nerves as the drink fills my mouth and the sweet taste of honey cheers me up. There, I can study the night away-asking question after question, leading into an endless string of research and learning until it is time to go to bed. I remember when I was 14, it was my first day of work as a tennis instructor at a summer camp. My mom made me a cup of matcha green tea to go. My hand sweated profusely as I gripped the thermos not just because it was hot, but also because I was extremely nervous to interact with the kids, the other counselors and my boss. Now, it will be my fourth year working at the camp and I occasionally make myself a cup of green tea in the morning when time allows. My hand still sweats as I grip the same thermos, but now I enthusiastically welcome the kids to camp, attentively feed them balls in drills I carefully organize and naturally make them feel included-much different from the timid, awkward, unsure counselor on her first day. Whether sipping it at the library while drafting this essay, on the bus ride to tennis matches while nervously awaiting my opponent or around a table while catching up with my friends, tea has provided me with a caffeine boost and a delicious drink when I need it the most. However, it is not responsible for my track times, tennis season-record, grades or reputation in the community. That is dependent on my work ethic, ambition, leadership and devotion to everything I do. | Never liking the bitter and unsettling taste of coffee, I have grown to become an active tea drinker. Lavender Earl Grey in the mornings, refreshing peach iced tea in the afternoons, Roman chamomile before bed and milk bubble tea on the occasion, you could say that tea is a constant in my life. Mixed herbs bundled in a bag and infused in boiling water (served hot or cold), tea has seen me at my breaking points of junior year, my celebratory restaurant outings and everywhere in between. After rolling out of bed and throwing on some clothes, a thermos of hot black tea wakes me up in the morning, follows me on the bus to school and accompanies me on the desk of my first-period class-physics. It sits with me as I scramble to copy down as many notes as I can about torque, centripetal acceleration and beat frequencies as Dr. Pullman races through his increasingly long PowerPoint. At the conclusion of the course, I can finally understand that the thermos on my desk is at rest because the difference of the normal force and gravitational force is equal to zero. And, if the thermos were to fall, the potential energy will convert into kinetic energy as it travels closer and closer towards the ground. The thermos follows me to his desk afterwards to ask questions, review problems and feed my curiosity of the physics world I am just beginning to explore. A bottle of raspberry iced tea at lunch is the perfect refresher, even if I am gulping it down as I review one last time for a German test the next period. As the line where the tea meets the air travels closer and closer towards the bottom of the bottle, I self-doubt myself more and more even though I know I am well-prepared. After arriving home from tennis, cross-country or track practice (depending on the season), I delve into studying and completing my homework for the next day. Frustrated while trying to understand a certain topic, a cup of piping hot tea soothes my nerves as the drink fills my mouth and the sweet taste of honey cheers me up. There, I can study the night away-asking question after question, leading into an endless string of research and learning until it is time to go to bed. I remember when I was 14, it was my first day of work as a tennis instructor at a summer camp. My mom made me a cup of match green tea to go. My hand sweated profusely as I gripped the thermos not just because it was hot, but also because I was extremely nervous to interact with the kids, the other counselors and my boss. Now, it will be my fourth year working at the camp and I occasionally make myself a cup of green tea in the morning when time allows. My hand still sweats as I grip the same thermos, but now I enthusiastically welcome the kids to camp, attentively feed them balls in drills I carefully organize and naturally make them feel included-much different from the timid, awkward, unsure counselor on her first day. Whether sipping it at the library while drafting this essay, on the bus ride to tennis matches while nervously awaiting my opponent or around a table while catching up with my friends, tea has provided me with a caffeine boost and a delicious drink when I need it the most. However, it is not responsible for my track times, tennis season-record, grades or reputation in the community. That is dependent on my work ethic, ambition, leadership and devotion to everything I do. |
Way before the United Nations was founded, there was a similar international organization called the League of Nations. They held the first student-led Model League of Nations in the 1920s which was then transitioning as what we know now, Model United Nations (MUN), right after the formation of the United Nations in 1945. Model UN aims to educate students about current events, global issues, diplomacy, and the United Nations agenda. Mainly, it provides an academic simulation of the United Nations where students play the role of delegates from different countries and attempt to solve real-world issues with the policies and perspective of their assigned country. Hence why, it requires the students to show the most skills in negotiating, public speaking, paperresolution writing, and diplomacy. Generally, those necessary skills are the main expected result to be build up from the delegates rather than the actual UN simulation itself. In the coming year, one of the most prestigious Model UN, Harvard World Model United Nations, will be held in Tokyo, Japan. I encourage myself to take part in this World MUN 2020, as I am fully aware that by taking part in this world-class conference, would give me beyond-expectation experiences, for instance, I would have the opportunity to do speech in an international forum, meet and create network with 2000+ students from over 110 countries, and have the chance to win an award, that is insanely incredible! Moreover, this experience would increase my quality and value as a young individual and yet shows me a whole new perspective about the world around me that keeps me humble and down to earth as a world citizen. Besides, this opportunity might be my only chance. This chance, for sure, makes me feel excited about the outcome that I might acquire if I got chosen as one of the delegates from Djarum Foundation. I envision myself at the conference, talking about the world issue that I most concerned about, it is education. The reason is basic, I believe that every generation has the chance to shape the world, but the challenges we faced today are more complex than ever before. And yet everywhere, education systems are leaving young people unprepared to deal with the pace of Economic, Social and Technological change. The world is defined by the people who live in it, by these being said, the better future that we envision today can be only shaped by our children and by the education alone, we can prepare them to be the world change-makers. As a young individual that have experienced multiple organization roles and international social projects, I have learned to communicate effectively in a diverse environment so I can engage and empower others to achieve a bigger purpose. I have learned more about myself and utilize my strengths to overcome my weaknesses. I have learned that I can make a difference in my surrounding. I have learned to be more adaptive and shows my resilience in the face of challenges, therefore, I can be more positive throughout the uncertainty. I believe I will be a great delegate of Djarum Foundation, for the reason that, I have the critical thinking and I am capable to drive my passions and beliefs into actions that necessary for me as an individual and this program. I can contribute my abilities to elevate program processes in the training with other selected delegations, and with any luck, will bring HWMUN awards back home in the name of Indonesia and Djarum Foundation. I am experienced in the many areas related to these Model UN goals; including United Nations agenda. For example, I contributed to a social project related to SDGs 4 in Poland earlier this year, in which I helped educate approximately 21.000 students from 18 places of work, 15 cities, and 43 days with 11 other volunteers from various countries. Essentially, we taught the students English and encourage them to have a cross-cultural understanding. My organizational background, with my abilities to think globally, plan and execute it with the team, will help facilitate the elevation that I mentioned above. I put my trust and belief that with this essay my personality and behavior was able to shine through and show. This is a real great intention of mine to be part of the program and without doubt, I am confident to say that I am ready to take the first step, to become the delegation of International Exposure by Djarum Foundation in Harvard World Model United Nations 2020. | Way before the United Nations was founded, there was a similar international organization called the League of Nations. They held the first student-led Model League of Nations in the 1920s which was then transitioning as what we know now, Model United Nations (MUN), right after the formation of the United Nations in 1945. Model UN aims to educate students about current events, global issues, diplomacy, and the United Nations agenda. Mainly, it provides an academic simulation of the United Nations where students play the role of delegates from different countries and attempt to solve real-world issues with the policies and perspective of their assigned country. Hence, why, it requires the students to show the most skills in negotiating, public speaking, paper resolution writing, and diplomacy. Generally, those necessary skills are the main expected result to be built up from the delegates rather than the actual UN simulation itself. In the coming year, one of the most prestigious Model UN, Harvard World Model United Nations, will be held in Tokyo, Japan. I encourage myself to take part in this World MUN 2020, as I am fully aware that by taking part in this world-class conference, would give me beyond-expectation experiences, for instance, I would have the opportunity to do speech in an international forum, meet and create network with 2000+ students from over 110 countries, and have the chance to win an award, that is insanely incredible! Moreover, this experience would increase my quality and value as a young individual and yet shows me a whole new perspective about the world around me that keeps me humble and down to earth as a world citizen. Besides, this opportunity might be my only chance. This chance, for sure, makes me feel excited about the outcome that I might acquire if I got chosen as one of the delegates from Drum Foundation. I envision myself at the conference, talking about the world issue that I most concerned about, it is education. The reason is basic, I believe that every generation has the chance to shape the world, but the challenges we faced today are more complex than ever before. And yet everywhere, education systems are leaving young people unprepared to deal with the pace of Economic, Social and Technological change. The world is defined by the people who live in it, by these being said, the better future that we envision today can be only shaped by our children and by the education alone, we can prepare them to be the world change-makers. As a young individual that have experienced multiple organization roles and international social projects, I have learned to communicate effectively in a diverse environment, so I can engage and empower others to achieve a bigger purpose. I have learned more about myself and utilize my strengths to overcome my weaknesses. I have learned that I can make a difference in my surrounding. Furthermore, I have learned to be more adaptive and shows my resilience in the face of challenges, therefore, I can be more positive throughout the uncertainty. Furthermore, I believe I will be a great delegate of Drum Foundation, for the reason that, I have the critical thinking, and I am capable to drive my passions and beliefs into actions that necessary for me as an individual and this program. Furthermore, I can contribute my abilities to elevate program processes in the training with other selected delegations, and with any luck, will bring HUMAN awards back home in the name of Indonesia and Drum Foundation. Furthermore, I am experienced in the many areas related to these Model UN goals; including United Nations agenda. For example, I contributed to a social project related to SDGs 4 in Poland earlier this year, in which I helped educate approximately 21,000 students from 18 places of work, 15 cities, and 43 days with 11 other volunteers from various countries. Essentially, we taught the students English and encourage them to have a cross-cultural understanding. My organizational background, with my abilities to think globally, plan and execute it with the team, will help facilitate the elevation that I mentioned above. I put my trust and belief that with this essay my personality and behavior was able to shine through and show. This is a real great intention of mine to be part of the program and without doubt, I am confident to say that I am ready to take the first step, to become the delegation of International Exposure by Drum Foundation in Harvard World Model United Nations 2020. |
What character traits do you posses that qualify you to fulfill the motto of your preferred U.S. Service Academy?500 words or less, at 406 The U.S. Naval Academy is my U.S. service academy of choice. The Naval Academy motto is "Through Knowledge, Sea Power" and is demonstrated through the Navy's core values of Honor, Courage, and Commitment. From gaining knowledge and life long learning, USNA produces Naval Officers with outstanding leadership ability which results in world class sea power. These same core values have been instilled in me throughout my many years in Boy Scouts and NJROTC. As a Boy Scout I have attained the rank of Eagle Scout. Within that journey I have had many opportunities to both learn and express Honor, by wearing my uniform proudly and always respecting the Flag, God and Country. A scout's journey to the Eagle rank requires Courage to face many new challenges; one notable event was using my CPR skills to aide an auto accident victim. Beginning scouting in second grade it was an unknown at the time the commitment it would require to become an Eagle Scout but over the years I made that a goal. My commitment to that goal opened up many opportunities for me which instilled in me the value of commitment in anything you do. As a future leader I plan to instill these values in anyone I may lead. My entire High School career has been guided by my goal to attend the USNA. In Middle School I was on track to attend Stanton College Prep, while this was a much sought after school placement, I instead chose to attend Mandarin High School through 'School Choice'. Mandarin High School offers Navy JROTC as well as the AP and Honors classes I desired to make me a competitive USNA candidate. This choice required a huge commitment as the school is a 23 mile commute each way. All of my expectations have been met by the three plus years I have been involved with ROTC. As with Scouts I wear my ROTC uniform with pride and honor those who serve to protect our country everyday. I serve in the Color Guard, march in parades and run half marathons to honor my Flag and country. ROTC has provided opportunities where I have displayed courage in leading teams in Orienteering, Athletics and will be this year's Commanding Officer of the entire battalion. The experience I will gain in this final year of NJROTC will further my skills as a future USNA Midshipman and leader beyond graduation from the Naval Academy. | What character traits do you possess that qualify you to fulfill the motto of your preferred U.S. Service Academy?500 words or fewer, at 406 The U.S. Naval Academy is my U.S. service academy of choice. The Naval Academy motto is "Through Knowledge, Sea Power" and is demonstrated through the Navy's core values of Honor, Courage, and Commitment. From gaining knowledge and lifelong learning, USA produces Naval Officers with outstanding leadership ability which results in world-class sea power. These same core values have been instilled in me throughout my many years in Boy Scouts and NJ ROTC. As a Boy Scout I have attained the rank of Eagle Scout. Within that journey I have had many opportunities to both learn and express Honor, by wearing my uniform proudly and always respecting the Flag, God and Country. A scout's journey to the Eagle rank requires Courage to face many new challenges; one notable event was using my CPR skills to aid an auto accident victim. Beginning scouting in second grade it was an unknown at the time the commitment it would require to become an Eagle Scout but over the years I made that a goal. My commitment to that goal opened up many opportunities for me which instilled in me the value of commitment in anything you do. As a future leader I plan to instill these values in anyone I may lead. My entire High School career has been guided by my goal to attend the USA. In Middle School I was on track to attend Stanton College Prep, while this was a much sought after school placement, I instead chose to attend Mandarin High School through 'School Choice'. Mandarin High School offers Navy ROTC as well as the AP and Honors classes I desired to make me a competitive USA candidate. This choice required a huge commitment as the school is a 23-mile commute each way. All of my expectations have been met by the three plus years I have been involved with ROTC. As with Scouts I wear my ROTC uniform with pride and honor those who serve to protect our country every day. I serve in the Color Guard, march in parades and run half-marathons to honor my Flag and country. ROTC has provided opportunities where I have displayed courage in leading teams in Orienteering, Athletics and will be this year's Commanding Officer of the entire battalion. The experience I will gain in this final year of NJ ROTC will further my skills as a future USA Midshipman and leader beyond graduation from the Naval Academy. |
Cold tears streamed down my cheeks with no promise to cease. I squeezed my eyes shut hoping my mind would fade away. The loud bickering and disgruntled groans continued to echo through the house. My mothers usual,"How could you be so irresponsible?The rent's due today!" followed by my fathers predictable," It's not my fault they didn't pay me!" This was certainly not the most comforting of melodies to put me to sleep , but night after night, year after year, it became my lullaby. I grew up in Houston, Texas as the oldest daughter of two Venezuelan immigrants. My life was not all that different from the average American kid . I was adventurous , mischievous and full of energy ( at the expense of my poor mothers sanity). However, while most kids were busy riding their bikes, playing in the afternoon, and worrying away with frivolous thoughts, I was home taking care of my two younger brothers and cooking dinner so my mom and dad could work longer shifts. It was hard to accept I was underprivileged because it never felt that way. We had everything we needed: food, clothes, and a roof over our heads. It just wasn't enough to fight the overwhelming uncertainty and fear that came with the instability. Instability that at my 13 years of age would claim a new identity , better known as "Divorce" and "Single Household Income".They say you don't know what you have until it's gone, but I disagree. I knew what I had I just never thought i'd lose it. From then on my life took a 360 degree turn. I watched my mother struggle as a single parent and handle me and my brothers all on her own. The pending mountain of bills piling up by the day. At times, I could hear her muffle her cries of desperation . However, she would go out each day determined to achieve greater than the previous day despite every label that seemed to conspire against her chances. Single-mother, immigrant, with a mere highschool diploma to verify her work credentials. My mother scratched up these labels and gave them a new meaning. Every setback became her comeback and her motivation to persevere.She taught me that at essence success is a mentality state that only we can make a reality.This became my new lullaby. I decided to change the way I thought about my obstacles and stopped focusing on controlling who I was. Instead, I became fixated on who I could be.I quit looking at every predisposed circumstance in my life as a disability and made it into my testimony. I no longer wallowed in my parents failures, my socioeconomic status, or my disadvantages, but rather used them as lesson to avoid committing the same errors and to build a better future for myself . Despite the obvious economic struggles at home, I sought after every opportunity given to me and went after each goal I set for myself. Never succumbing to the idea that money was an impediment to my future. Throughout highschool I enrolled in the debate team and during my first year I was promoted to Varsity.I became a State Qualified debater in Lincoln Douglas debate as well as a State Qualifier and NSDA competitor in Policy debate.Additionally, I joined the Newspaper staff and achieved the role of Managing Editor and Business Manager. While easily typed, I assure you it was not as easily accomplished. But with the values I had learned, I persevered. Perhaps you could argue that life did not deal me the best deck of cards.Although,life isn't about the cards you're dealt,because you can't choose those.Its about how well you play your cards and how you use them. My instability shaped who I am today.I allowed my fears and weaknesses to mold me into my strengths.As I continue my pursuit of knowledge, I hope to cultivate new life experiences that will help me grow in my professional field. I plan to pursue a career in law at the Texas A&M University and major at the School of Law or the College of Liberal Arts. I am not certain of what challenges my future promises however, I know that regardless of what they may be, Life is not about what I can or cannot do , but rather what im willing to do. | Cold tears streamed down my cheeks with no promise to cease. I squeezed my eyes shut hoping my mind would fade away. The loud bickering and disgruntled groans continued to echo through the house. My mothers usual,"How could you be so irresponsible? The rent's due today!" followed by my fathers predictable," It's not my fault they didn't pay me!" This was certainly not the most comforting of melodies to put me to sleep, but night after night, year after year, it became my lullaby. I grew up in Houston, Texas as the oldest daughter of two Venezuelan immigrants. My life was not all that different from the average American kid. I was adventurous, mischievous and full of energy (at the expense of my poor mothers sanity). However, while most kids were busy riding their bikes, playing in the afternoon, and worrying away with frivolous thoughts, I was home taking care of my two younger brothers and cooking dinner so my mom and dad could work longer shifts. It was hard to accept I was underprivileged because it never felt that way. We had everything we needed: food, clothes, and a roof over our heads. It just wasn't enough to fight the overwhelming uncertainty and fear that came with the instability. Instability that at my 13 years of age would claim a new identity, better known as "Divorce" and "Single Household Income". They say you don't know what you have until it's gone, but I disagree. I knew what I had I just never thought I'd lose it. From then on my life took a 360-degree turn. I watched my mother struggle as a single parent and handle me and my brothers all on her own. The pending mountain of bills piling up by the day. At times, I could hear her muffle her cries of desperation. However, she would go out each day determined to achieve greater than the previous day despite every label that seemed to conspire against her chances. Single-mother, immigrant, with a mere high school diploma to verify her work credentials. My mother scratched up these labels and gave them a new meaning. Every setback became her comeback and her motivation to persevere. She taught me that at essence success is a mentality state that only we can make a reality. This became my new lullaby. I decided to change the way I thought about my obstacles and stopped focusing on controlling who I was. Instead, I became fixated on whom I could be. I quit looking at every predisposed circumstance in my life as a disability and made it into my testimony. I no longer wallowed in my parents failures, my socioeconomic status, or my disadvantages, but rather used them as lesson to avoid committing the same errors and to build a better future for myself. Despite the obvious economic struggles at home, I sought after every opportunity given to me and went after each goal I set for myself. Never succumbing to the idea that money was an impediment to my future. Throughout high school I enrolled in the debate team and during my first year I was promoted to Varsity. I became a State Qualified debater in Lincoln Douglas debate as well as a State Qualifier and NSA competitor in Policy debate. Additionally, I joined the Newspaper staff and achieved the role of Managing Editor and Business Manager. While easily typed, I assure you it was not as easily accomplished. But with the values I had learned, I persevered. Perhaps you could argue that life did not deal me the best deck of cards. Although, life isn't about the cards you're dealt, because you can't choose those.It's about how well you play your cards and how you use them. My instability shaped who I am today. I allowed my fears and weaknesses to mold me into my strengths. As I continue my pursuit of knowledge, I hope to cultivate new life experiences that will help me grow in my professional field. I plan to pursue a career in law at the Texas Camp;M University and major at the School of Law or the College of Liberal Arts. I am not certain of what challenges my future promises however, I know that regardless of what they may be, Life is not about what I can or cannot do, but rather what I'm willing to do. |
****** I wrote this for my common app essay. Please help me to fix it, especially with the logical of the essay. Thank you******** "Where are your parents?", "Why don't they pick you up ?", "Are you an orphan ?"- that's the question that I grew up with. I hated my parents, why are they never here ? My parents are normal workers, they work 12 hours a day to raise me and my sister, give us all the best thing in the world. Therefore, I was brought up in the hand of my grandparents. They held me as a baby, feed me, comforted me, took me to school, give me advices.I love being around them. Though I don't get to see my parents much as a kid and all the stress from work just made them lose their temper easier,so we don't talk much. I hated my parents. I remember my dad would hit me everytime I make a mistake, being lazy, disbehave or just because I can't remember the alphabet. Although he never hit me hard but he was always harsh on me and it hurt me and my ego. My dad grew up in an educational family with my grandparents are both teachers and two my aunts are have a doctor degree, he surely had a lot to live up to. My dad hated school, he did not went to college and at his time, having little education is the same as having no future. He had to do manual works to feed himself and he would never allowed the same for me. Realizing the momentousness of schooling, he came back to school at 20, get his degree in electronic engineering and find a better job. For my mom, she was not an excellent student, failed college once but continued trying really hard. At the time she was pregnant with me, she still go to class everyday. So my parents might not be rich, might to be academically excellent but they sure know how much education means. They told me in this world, there are two things that one's must have which are a good education and a perfect attitude. A person without a good attitude will failed in their jobs no matter how intelligent they are. That's why they don't allow me to have less of anything. My sister at her high school is rather problematic.She tried to run away from home. It was the first time I saw my parents broke down. When my sister come back home, crying,saying sorry, I thought my dad raise his hand, ready to hit her but he couldn't. He just fall down onto the floor, tears pouring out of his eyes slowly, and then my whole family just sit there crying and hugging each other for a really long time As I grow up, I realized that I have more than what I thought I had. Not having my parents by my side all the time, I am a lot more independent than my friends, I acquired skill by learning from mistakes, from people I met on the streets, I can confidently speak up my mind, know what I want and how I can get it, and I have an amazing relationship with my big family. I remembered at primary, when other kids still have their parents spoon feeding them, I have used my chopsticks to eat by myself because I was taught by a mechanic worker who sit next to me at a diner. Then in high school when others were fighting with their parents for not understand them, hate to meet their grandparents, aunts and uncles because they "talk too much", I love my family,I can say I love you to them without being shy about it. Life is not perfect but I am enjoying my life at the moment, I have the best parents that love me and we are communicating much better than we used to now. | ****** I wrote this for my common app essay. Please help me to fix it, especially with the logical of the essay. Thank you******** "Where are your parents?", "Why don't they pick you up ?", "Are you an orphan ?"- that's the question that I grew up with. I hated my parents, why are they never here ? My parents are normal workers, they work 12 hours a day to raise me and my sister, give us all the best thing in the world. Therefore, I was brought up in the hand of my grandparents. They held me as a baby, feed me, comforted me, took me to school, give me advices. I love being around them. Though I don't get to see my parents much as a kid and all the stress from work just made them lose their temper easier, so we don't talk much. I hated my parents. I remember my dad would hit me every time I make a mistake, being lazy, misbehave or just because I can't remember the alphabet. Although he never hit me hard, but he was always harsh on me, and it hurt me and my ego. My dad grew up in an educational family with my grandparents are both teachers and two my aunts are had a doctor degree, he surely had a lot to live up to. My dad hated school, he did not go to college and at his time, having little education is the same as having no future. He had to do manual works to feed himself, and he would never have allowed the same for me. Realizing the momentousness of schooling, he came back to school at 20, get his degree in electronic engineering and find a better job. For my mom, she was not an excellent student, failed college once but continued trying really hard. At the time she was pregnant with me, she still goes to class every day. So my parents might not be rich, might to be academically excellent, but they sure know how much education means. They told me in this world, there are two things that ones must have which are a good education and a perfect attitude. A person without a good attitude will fail in their jobs no matter how intelligent they are. That's why they don't allow me to have less of anything. My sister at her high school is rather problematic. She tried to run away from home. It was the first time I saw my parents broke down. When my sister come back home, crying, saying sorry, I thought my dad raise his hand, ready to hit her, but he couldn't. He just falls down onto the floor, tears pouring out of his eyes slowly, and then my whole family just sit there crying and hugging each other for a really long time As I grow up, I realized that I have more than what I thought I had. Not having my parents by my side all the time, I am a lot more independent than my friends, I acquired skill by learning from mistakes, from people I met on the streets, I can confidently speak up my mind, know what I want and how I can get it, and I have an amazing relationship with my big family. I remembered at primary, when other kids still have their parents spoon-feeding them, I have used my chopsticks to eat by myself because I was taught by a mechanic worker who sit next to me at a diner. Then in high school when others were fighting with their parents for not understand them, hate to meet their grandparents, aunts and uncles because they "talk too much", I love my family, I can say I love you to them without being shy about it. Life is not perfect, but I am enjoying my life at the moment, I have the best parents that love me, and we are communicating much better than we used to now. |
I remember painting my own room the first time I got it, surely they were all drawings of dinosaurs and cartoon characters, I painted my room even when my parents would yell at me to stop doodling worthless drawings, I thought that those drawings where the start of my path in the arts. I would draw every time in class in my notebook at school, I would draw anything I wanted, I even created a fictional cartoon character of my own, one that I willing to make a cartoon out of it. I know that SCAD is the key school that I need in order to become what I've been dreaming since I was a child. The term "art" is something really mysterious for me, in which anything can become art with diverse styles, techniques, thoughts, and even feelings. I also want to inspire people with my art and works, I want to give them inspiration and a message that no matter what situation someone is in, with enough effort, it is able to be achieved. I like to help others, and to prove that I have been volunteering in a Korean school in Mexico City, to teach korean children born in Mexico who do not know Korean, over 250 hours I have made, and If I had the time, I am willing to keep on going, and never give up. My aspirations to study at SCAD are simple and somehow complex, I wish to become a game designer, or animator, I dream in becoming a designer, let me be honest I do not pursuit popularity, no I do not want to be a famous designer, what I want is to be acknowledged by my people (loved ones), and to be able to help and inspire people. SInce I was a child, I always attended to art class, not only because it was my duty as a student, but because I just loved to take art classes, when I grew up to be more passionate for art, I started to like old artists drawings, famous artists like Van Gogh, Giovanni Batista, and more. There is a quote from Giovanni Battista Piranesi, one that took my full attention. It stated that if he were to have the opportunity to design a new universe, he would be crazy enough to undertake it. My experiences in art classes also increased my desires in venturing the term of art as my major. I intend in creating a work in which I can add all my creations, every creation that I have created since I was a child. Just by imagining becoming an artist and inspiring others with my works and projects makes me want to enter SCAD fast and become an artist. And SCAD will help me achieve my goals, aspirations and my dreams. Something that I hope in achieving with SCAD. | I remember painting my own room the first time I got it, surely they were all drawings of dinosaurs and cartoon characters, I painted my room even when my parents would yell at me to stop doodling worthless drawings, I thought that those drawings where the start of my path in the arts. I would draw every time in class in my notebook at school, I would draw anything I wanted, I even created a fictional cartoon character of my own, one that I'm willing to make a cartoon out of it. Furthermore, I know that SCAD is the key school that I need in order to become what I've been dreaming since I was a child. The term "art" is something really mysterious for me, in which anything can become art with diverse styles, techniques, thoughts, and even feelings. I also want to inspire people with my art and works, I want to give them inspiration and a message that no matter what situation someone is in, with enough effort, it is able to be achieved. I like to help others, and to prove that I have been volunteering in a Korean school in Mexico City, to teach Korean children born in Mexico who do not know Korean, over 250 hours I have made, and If I had the time, I am willing to keep on going, and never give up. My aspirations to study at SCAD are simple and somehow complex, I wish to become a game designer, or animator, I dream in becoming a designer, let me be honest I do not pursuit popularity, no I do not want to be a famous designer, what I want is to be acknowledged by my people (loved ones), and to be able to help and inspire people. Since I was a child, I always attended to art class, not only because it was my duty as a student, but because I just loved to take art classes, when I grew up to be more passionate for art, I started to like old artists drawings, famous artists like Van Gogh, Giovanni Batista, and more. There is a quote from Giovanni Batista Pirates, one that took my full attention. It stated that if he were to have the opportunity to design a new universe, he would be crazy enough to undertake it. My experiences in art classes also increased my desires in venturing the term of art as my major. I intend in creating a work in which I can add all my creations, every creation that I have created since I was a child. Just by imagining becoming an artist and inspiring others with my works and projects makes me want to enter SCAD fast and become an artist. And SCAD will help me achieve my goals, aspirations and my dreams. Something that I hope in achieving with SCAD. |
Hello, may I get a help in writing entrance essay for the sonography program?I am afraid to call this personal statement because there is no specific essay prompt or limitation except no more than 2000 words rule.I just wrote based on guessed prompt: "Why do you want to get into the sonography program?"Below is my rough draft for now. Watching family members suffer undesirable maladies is an extremely agonizing task for anyone. However, in the case of my family, it was a slight relief for those of us who could at least could detect the progress of such diseases. Polycystic kidney disorder. That was the stigma our father line was genetically cursed on. It left a variety of detrimental effects for each of all the members in the bloodline. My grandfather passed away due to chronic complications on renal functions when I was at the age of seven. Both my uncle and aunt are on their dialysis bags every single day. My father, the closest one I have observed, still suffers this constant swelling of cysts even after life-changing transplant of a left kidney. As far as I can remember, all their looks were apparently similar: sunken eyes, hollow cheeks, pale skin, abnormally distended abdomen, and many other absurdities that I am afraid to explain more. Yet, what intimidated me even more was that it was not only their issues at all. Those can be my future as well. Thus, this became the main reason that I came to take and know more about medical tests like diagnostic sonography and radiology as well as realizing their significance in saving people's lives. My parents and I, just like their predecessors did, looked over every possible test that can detect and keep track of cyst development in my kidneys. Thankfully, my father and I had more opportunities to discover cysts in their earlier stage than grandfather did as South Korean medical fields adopted more advanced technologies from the western world. For instance, ultrasound was first introduced at South Korean medical community during the early 1980s, and my father relied on this technology on his abdomen and cardiac tests. For me, I also relied highly on abdominal, cardiac, and vascular sonography tests as well for my medical checkup. Although I took many other tests such as radiologic modalities like X-ray and CT as well as more invasive methods like endoscopy, there were a number of reasons that sonography inspired me more than other methods did. To begin with, sonography showed remarkable efficiency in a way that it does not induce any pain or include injection of any kind during the entire process. One of the hardest parts that I barely endured in endoscopy and CT was that they both involved invasive injections of either physical or chemical instruments inside my body. For CT scans, I can still recall the moment when I almost vomited in front of other patients after getting intravenous injections that nauseated my stomach. For endoscopy, sliding endoscope directly into my digestive tract was kind of experience that I would never want to have again. Compared to these tests, all it took in sonography was only a few smearing of cold gels on my skin. Another reason that sonography attracted me was that it does not contain any harmful ultraviolet radiation like X rays and CT do. Some might say that I am acting overly fastidious, but I truly wanted to assure whether these radiations would cause any side effects on my renal functions. This absolutely does not mean that I believe that these other tests were inferior to sonography. In fact, these tests all played significant roles in detecting cyst development, but the most convenient one for me out of all of them was undoubtedly sonography. After all, I wanted to perform this attractive test with my own hands as well. In addition to these personal preference, I also decided to choose sonography due to its highly positive outlook as one of the most promising technologies in the field of South Korean healthcare. Beginning from April 2018, Ministry of Health and Welfare in South Korea started to apply health insurance in abdominal sonography tests, decreasing their overall costs to less than half of the original price. As the Ministry plans to impose this insurance policy to sonography tests in all specialties by 2021, Department of Labor predicts that more job opportunities will open for professional sonographers in order for them to meet increasing demands for these cheaper tests. I personally believe that this is an extraordinarily innovative progress for many potential sonographers as South Korean medical community has barely had any sonographer for a long period of time. In the majority of hospitals and clinics, most of those who perform sonography always have been doctors, registered nurses, or other professionals who take sonography as one of their side tasks. Even I took all my sonography tests from one of radiologists in the largest national hospital. Considering such circumstance, I am more than willing to join the group of pioneers who will enlighten the field of diagnostic sonography in South Korea. To let more people like me and my father to experience this advanced technology they deserve with actual professionals on their sides. | Hello, may I get a help in writing entrance essay for the sonography program? I am afraid to call this personal statement because there is no specific essay prompt or limitation except no more than 2000 words rule. I just wrote based on guessed prompt: "Why do you want to get into the sonography program?" Below is my rough draft for now. Watching family members suffer undesirable maladies is an extremely agonizing task for anyone. However, in the case of my family, it was a slight relief for those of us who could at least could detect the progress of such diseases. Polycystic kidney disorder. That was the stigma our father line was genetically cursed on. It left a variety of detrimental effects for each of all the members in the bloodline. My grandfather passed away due to chronic complications on renal functions when I was at the age of seven. Both my uncle and aunt are on their dialysis bags every single day. My father, the closest one I have observed, still suffers this constant swelling of cysts even after life-changing transplant of a left kidney. As far as I can remember, all their looks were apparently similar: sunken eyes, hollow cheeks, pale skin, abnormally distended abdomen, and many other absurdities that I am afraid to explain more. Yet, what intimidated me even more was that it was not only their issues at all. Those can be my future as well. Thus, this became the main reason that I came to take and know more about medical tests like diagnostic sonography and radiology as well as realizing their significance in saving people's lives. My parents and I, just like their predecessors did, looked over every possible test that can detect and keep track of cyst development in my kidneys. Thankfully, my father and I had more opportunities to discover cysts in their earlier stage than grandfather did as South Korean medical fields adopted more advanced technologies from the western world. For instance, ultrasound was first introduced at South Korean medical community during the early 1980s, and my father relied on this technology on his abdomen and cardiac tests. For me, I also relied highly on abdominal, cardiac, and vascular sonography tests as well for my medical checkup. Although I took many other tests such as radiologic modalities like X-ray and CT as well as more invasive methods like endoscopy, there were a number of reasons that sonography inspired me more than other methods did. To begin with, sonography showed remarkable efficiency in a way that it does not induce any pain or include injection of any kind during the entire process. One of the hardest parts that I barely endured in endoscopy and CT was that they both involved invasive injections of either physical or chemical instruments inside my body. For CT scans, I can still recall the moment when I almost vomited in front of other patients after getting intravenous injections that nauseated my stomach. For endoscopy, sliding endoscope directly into my digestive tract was kind of experience that I would never want to have again. Compared to these tests, all it took in sonography was only a few smearing of cold gels on my skin. Another reason that sonography attracted me was that it does not contain any harmful ultraviolet radiation like X-rays and CT do. Some might say that I am acting overly fastidious, but I truly wanted to assure whether these radiations would cause any side effects on my renal functions. This absolutely does not mean that I believe that these other tests were inferior to sonography. In fact, these tests all played significant roles in detecting cyst development, but the most convenient one for me out of all of them was undoubtedly sonography. After all, I wanted to perform this attractive test with my own hands as well. In addition to this personal preference, I also decided to choose sonography due to its highly positive outlook as one of the most promising technologies in the field of South Korean healthcare. Beginning from April 2018, Ministry of Health and Welfare in South Korea started to apply health insurance in abdominal sonography tests, decreasing their overall costs to less than half of the original price. As the Ministry plans to impose this insurance policy to sonography tests in all specialties by 2021, Department of Labor predicts that more job opportunities will open for professional sonographers in order for them to meet increasing demands for these cheaper tests. I personally believe that this is extraordinarily innovative progress for many potential sonographers as South Korean medical community has barely had any sonographer for a long period of time. In the majority of hospitals and clinics, most of those who perform sonography always have been doctors, registered nurses, or other professionals who take sonography as one of their side tasks. Even I took all my sonography tests from one of radiologists in the largest national hospital. Considering such circumstance, I am more than willing to join the group of pioneers who will enlighten the field of diagnostic sonography in South Korea. To let more people like me and my father to experience this advanced technology they deserve with actual professionals on their sides. |
My voice was but a whisper passing through the planted lilies and violets, amongst the soft wind that occasionally brushed through our skirts delighted to be swift through this devilish, hot weather that covered us in sweat and a helpless need of cold lemonade. She looked down at her white socks, now muddied with the colour of green from the freshly cut grass. It wasn't a look that I was unfamiliar with, especially these last few dark days. I didn't want to admit it in front of her, but I have been treating her with a rather positive tone these past few years. I hate lying. Not because I find it sinful or hurtful for the other person, but because I was never good at it. At least I thought I wasn't. She rolls her eyes at the sound of my words with a smile on her bright face. It was a sunny afternoon at the park; The flowers were blooming from the summer sun and the neighbourhood was suspiciously quiet. No cars, no people on the street, no loud music from the close-by gym. Just birds chirping away and the wind blowing on our red faces. My tank top was tight enough to reveal the shape of my black bra. My one bra strap was down from my shoulder, waving itself from the warm wind that was passing by every minute or so. I raise my hand in order to make a shadow for my green, almond-shaped eyes. She liked my eyes. I squint them a bit as I look towards the distance, avoiding her cat-like, bluebell eyes that were hidden behind her massive, golden sunglasses. She is quick to reply as if the question was savored: "Do you really really really love me?""I really really really love you" I gave her a sideway grin and grabbed her smooth, delicate hand. "Well I like you even more", she whispered into my ear following that with a light kiss on my cheek. "Are you gonna finish that?" I point at the wrapped sweet on her lap. She looks at it with hesitation and slowly unwraps it. I look at her as she places the yellow sweet onto her tongue, she covers her mouth as she chews on the hard shell. And you have finally taken a taste of my sourness. Just like those cheap chewing gums that start of as sweet, your tongue rolls against its hard shell, when you finally crack it open a sour mixture fills your mouth. The shell is unswallowable, the sourness is stronger than the sweetness. Till she finally gets sick of the gum and spits it out, then she buys another one, that's sweeter better, thinner, smarter and prettier than the older one that's now lying in the bin amongst the other ones. "Why did you bite into it if you knew the sourness was within its fake, cheap sweetness?" She turns as she chews the last of the gum, then spits it out on her hand. "Even if I would have bit into it, the sourness would still have revealed itself, wouldn't it?" I turn my head to the side and smiled frowning my eyebrows in confusion. She laughs, and my heart starts beating quicker when I hear her whisper: "besides who says I don't like bitter sweets?" Just like the sweets flavour gets absorbed and is left with nothing, just like the light of a candle burns out after a cold night, just like the concerts soothing music finishes, our relationship had to end. I was thankful it did, because with a concert that goes on forever, how would the same excitement exist when the people are left with no more than endless love songs being played and no time for them to experience their own? How would dessert ever feel the same, if one does not sit through the patience and endurance to soon be greeted with the delightfulness sweet taste of soon-to-become, regretful calories? "Do you even love me anymore; did you ever love me? Or was it the big void I momentarily filled in your heart, huh? I don't want to be part of this void anymore, it's cold and dark and..." her words were hesitant to come out but sharp. She pauses, her body tenses as she crosses her arms. She looks around with tears streaming down her pink cheeks as if the winters trees would whisper her the right words she wanted to express. "Controlling, bossy, bitter, selfish, manipulative?" my voice was monotone, the words came out as smooth as the river's stream, almost as if they were scripted. Her body went momentarily slacked, hanging her head in disappointment as her words came out as a whisper. "That's the problem..." I avoid her eyes, turn my head to the side and close my eyes, almost as if I was aware of what she was about to say. "You don't believe in yourself." I look back at her almond-shaped, blue and now swollen eyes. I could see the disappointment on her face. I could hear it in her soft tone, almost as if she felt pity for me. My heart started to beat faster just by that thought, seeming weak. My eyes targeted hers for, what felt like an hour before my words finally came out of my dry mouth. "You're wrong," I say, louder and clearer than anything that has come out of my mouth before. She looks to the side. "I wish you sounded that confident when you told me you loved me." Her voice sounded like she was in pain as if my hands were around her neck. I swallow and close my eyes; a tear ran down my cheek. I don't remember the last time a genuine tear had run down my cheek. She looked at me in awed, waiting patiently for my words to come out. She was always patient with me, not like the others. "You're wro-" I choke on my words. I take a deep breath in, close my eyes and cross my arms. I straighten my back and open my eyes. "You're wrong. I don't love myself." I look up at her taking a sharp breath in. "...that's the problem." I looked far in the distance, amongst the parks untouched swings and unclimbed monkey bars that were now covered in spider webs and couldn't help but wonder: If my heart was on a shelf, would it also be covered in spider webs and dust? Why couldn't I give it to someone, was I scared of rejection, of the pain after separation, or was it a rare disorder that I hadn't known of? That's when the questions that were pilling in my head, since the age of six, were answered in less than a minute. "I understand. You can't love me unless you learn to love yourself first." She turns her back to me and starts walking away with her arms still crossed tight around her. I felt a chill running down my spine as her petite silhouette drew further and further away from me. My head was telling me to run after her, stop her and kiss her, but my heart stayed silent. Maybe that's what loving someone meant, to want to follow that person, kiss and hold them because you want to, not because it seems like the appropriate thing to do. Her words echoed in my mind once more. I wipe my nose "Learn it? Pf, they don't teach you that in school" I muttered. I felt like almost laughing hysterically. I lost her, but why wasn't I upset? Why wasn't I craving ice cream and break up songs, just like in the movies? This wasn't a matter of wondering, or gaining an answer, it was a matter of reflection. I walked in the opposite direction. I wiped the swings wooden seat and sat down. I held the ropes that were attached to it and pushed my feet back lightly. I did it once more, I wanted to feel the air on my face. I closed my eyes and pushed again harder this time. And I cried. I cried like there was no tomorrow. I cried like a toddler being denied another piece of cake. I cried till my green eyes were swollen and my nose was wetter than my shirt from the rain that hit me. Nobody was going to love me like this, nobody was going to love me like her. I ran with that thought, I ran my way back because I needed to speak out. She deserved an explanation. "It seems cheesy, and I am sorry that I couldn't say it without a stutter, without a pinch of lie wearing a fake grin. I am sorry for not looking at you in the eyes, I am sorry for weighing you down and hurting you and I know that my sorry means nothing for the years of isolation and abuse I projected onto you." I take a deep breath in and stare at her green, almond-shaped that I know learned to admire as well. "I-uh God." I laughed lightly and rolled my eyes. "I love you." I reached out and wiped a smudge off the mirror, smiling. | My voice was but a whisper passing through the planted lilies and violets, amongst the soft wind that occasionally brushed through our skirts delighted to be swift through this devilish, hot weather that covered us in sweat and a helpless need of cold lemonade. She looked down at her white socks, now muddied with the color of green from the freshly cut grass. It wasn't a look that I was unfamiliar with, especially these last few dark days. I didn't want to admit it in front of her, but I have been treating her with a rather positive tone these past few years. I hate lying. Not because I find it sinful or hurtful for the other person, but because I was never good at it. At least I thought I wasn't. She rolls her eyes at the sound of my words with a smile on her bright face. It was a sunny afternoon at the park; The flowers were blooming from the summer sun and the neighborhood was suspiciously quiet. No cars, no people on the street, no loud music from the close-by gym. Just birds chirping away and the wind blowing on our red faces. My tank top was tight enough to reveal the shape of my black bra. My one bra strap was down from my shoulder, waving itself from the warm wind that was passing by every minute or so. I raise my hand in order to make a shadow for my green, almond-shaped eyes. She liked my eyes. I squint them a bit as I look towards the distance, avoiding her cat-like, bluebell eyes that were hidden behind her massive, golden sunglasses. She is quick to reply as if the question was savored: "Do you really really really love me?"" I really really really love you" I gave her a sideways grin and grabbed her smooth, delicate hand. "Well I like you even more", she whispered into my ear following that with a light kiss on my cheek. "Are you going to finish that?" I point at the wrapped sweet on her lap. She looks at it with hesitation and slowly unwraps it. I look at her as she places the yellow sweet onto her tongue, she covers her mouth as she chews on the hard shell. And you have finally taken a taste of my sourness. Just like those cheap chewing gums that start of as sweet, your tongue rolls against its hard shell, when you finally crack it open a sour mixture fills your mouth. The shell is unswallowable, the sourness is stronger than the sweetness. Till she finally gets sick of the gum and spits it out, then she buys another one, that's sweeter better, thinner, smarter and prettier than the older one that's now lying in the bin amongst the other ones. "Why did you bite into it if you knew the sourness was within its fake, cheap sweetness?" She turns as she chews the last of the gum, then spits it out on her hand. "Even if I would have a bit into it, the sourness would still have revealed itself, wouldn't it?" I turn my head to the side and smiled frowning my eyebrows in confusion. She laughs, and my heart starts beating quicker when I hear her whisper: "besides who says I don't like bitter sweets?" Just like the sweets flavor gets absorbed and is left with nothing, just like the light of a candle burns out after a cold night, just like the concerts soothing music finishes, our relationship had to end. I was thankful it did, because with a concert that goes on forever, how would the same excitement exist when the people are left with no more than endless love songs being played and no time for them to experience their own? How would desert ever feel the same, if one does not sit through the patience and endurance to soon be greeted with the frightfulness sweet taste of soon-to-become, regretful calories? "Do you even love me anymore; did you ever love me? Or was it the big void I momentarily filled in your heart, huh? I don't want to be part of this void anymore, it's cold and dark and..." her words were hesitant to come out but sharp. She pauses, her body tenses as she crosses her arms. She looks around with tears streaming down her pink cheeks as if the winters trees would whisper her the right words she wanted to express. "Controlling, bossy, bitter, selfish, manipulative?" my voice was monotone, the words came out as smooth as the river's stream, almost as if they were scripted. Her body went momentarily slacked, hanging her head in disappointment as her words came out as a whisper. "That's the problem..." I avoid her eyes, turn my head to the side and close my eyes, almost as if I was aware of what she was about to say. "You don't believe in yourself." I look back at her almond-shaped, blue and now swollen eyes. I could see the disappointment on her face. Furthermore, I could hear it in her soft tone, almost as if she felt pity for me. My heart started to beat faster just by that thought, seeming weak. My eyes targeted hers for, what felt like an hour before my words finally came out of my dry mouth. "You're wrong," I say, louder and clearer than anything that has come out of my mouth before. She looks to the side. "I wish you sounded that confident when you told me you loved me." Her voice sounded like she was in pain as if my hands were around her neck. I swallow and close my eyes; a tear ran down my cheek. I don't remember the last time a genuine tear had run down my cheek. She looked at me in awed, waiting patiently for my words to come out. She was always patient with me, not like the others. "You're who-" I choke on my words. I take a deep breath in, close my eyes and cross my arms. I straighten my back and open my eyes. "You're wrong. I don't love myself." I look up at her taking a sharp breath in. "...that's the problem." I looked far in the distance, amongst the parks untouched swings and climbed monkey bars that were now covered in spider webs and couldn't help but wonder: If my heart was on a shelf, would it also be covered in spider webs and dust? Why couldn't I give it to someone, was I scared of rejection, of the pain after separation, or was it a rare disorder that I hadn't known of? That's when the questions that were pilling in my head, since the age of six, were answered in less than a minute. "I understand. You can't love me unless you learn to love yourself first." She turns her back to me and starts walking away with her arms still crossed tight around her. I felt a chill running down my spine as her petite silhouette drew further and further away from me. My head was telling me to run after her, stop her and kiss her, but my heart stayed silent. Maybe that's what loving someone meant, to want to follow that person, kiss and hold them because you want to, not because it seems like the appropriate thing to do. Her words echoed in my mind once more. I wipe my nose "Learn it? Pf, they don't teach you that in school" I muttered. I felt like almost laughing hysterically. I lost her, but why wasn't I upset? Why wasn't I craving ice cream and break up songs, just like in the movies? This wasn't a matter of wondering, or gaining an answer, it was a matter of reflection. I walked in the opposite direction. I wiped the swings wooden seat and sat down. Furthermore, I held the ropes that were attached to it and pushed my feet back lightly. Furthermore, I did it once more, I wanted to feel the air on my face. Furthermore, I closed my eyes and pushed again harder this time. And I cried. I cried like there was no tomorrow. I cried like a toddler being denied another piece of cake. Furthermore, I cried till my green eyes were swollen, and my nose was wetter than my shirt from the rain that hit me. Nobody was going to love me like this, nobody was going to love me like her. I ran with that thought, I ran my way back because I needed to speak out. She deserved an explanation. "It seems cheesy, and I am sorry that I couldn't say it without a stutter, without a pinch of lie wearing a fake grin. I am sorry for not looking at you in the eyes, I am sorry for weighing you down and hurting you and I know that my sorry means nothing for the years of isolation and abuse I projected onto you." I take a deep breath in and stare at her green, almond-shaped that I know learned to admire as well. "I-uh God." I laughed lightly and rolled my eyes. "I love you." I reached out and wiped a smudge off the mirror, smiling. |
At sunset beside glass windows of the science center, I'm amateur Gregor Mendel, experimenting with the genomes and hosting the dual of the dominant vs the recessive. With friends in robotics, I'm putting in eye and hair colors of our teammates into my Punnett square app, jokingly predicting the appearance of their hypothetical child. At 12:30 am, I'm a battleship commander, hunting behind fogs in the moonless night, with every position coming out of my mouth turn into quivering ashes and collapsing ships. While the virtual I am fighting in the battleship app I created, I'm fighting another battle against bugs and time, working at max-compacity detecting every bug before 1:30, when I can no longer get helped from my best friends: stack-overflow and GitHub. Computer science is the witch that forges these souls together into me, along with these applications. When I lay my hands on the keyboard with NetBeans, Eclipse, or RStudio in front of me, I can feel the power computer science has given me, to turn me into different characters throughout the day and in turn, give convenience to those characters through my creations. | At sunset beside glass windows of the science center, I'm amateur Gregor Mendel, experimenting with the genomes and hosting the dual of the dominant vs the recessive. With friends in robotics, I'm putting in eye and hair colors of our teammates into my Punnett square app, jokingly predicting the appearance of their hypothetical child. At 12:30 am, I'm a battleship commander, hunting behind fogs in the moonless night, with every position coming out of my mouth turn into quivering ashes and collapsing ships. While the virtual I am fighting in the battleship app I created, I'm fighting another battle against bugs and time, working at max-compacity detecting every bug before 1:30, when I can no longer get helped from my best friends: stack-overflow and GitHub. Computer science is the witch that forges these souls together into me, along with these applications. When I lay my hands on the keyboard with NetBeans, Eclipse, or Studio in front of me, I can feel the power computer science has given me, to turn me into different characters throughout the day and in turn, give convenience to those characters through my creations. |
Essay topic:Describe some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you. March 13, 2016, 18.45A warm spring day. I am walking with my earphones on, softly blowing wind accompanies the song that ı am listening. I am thinking about how it was a hard day after long courses in school and academy. Notwithstanding ı do every Sunday,ı decided to take the metro instead of a bus all of sudden. While walking in a rush ı felt that ground is shaking with vigorous noise.No it is not an earthquake, it's impossible to occur an earthquake in Ankara. Then, what was that? I take down my earphones slowly to understand what is going on clearly. I was perplexed. People are screaming to each other ''Run!'' , ''Just run!'' and ı see them crying, running and yelling. And ı can't even move any part of my body. Not even my finger, ı was in shock. Smoke in the sky is getting higher and higher, ambulances and police cars come and goes. People are yelling their friends, wives, boyfriends names to ensure if they are alive. That moments ı spent in here was the longest minutes of my life. It was a Terrorist attack that 38 people died while waiting for a bus. That happened in the capital of Turkey a couple of years ago. It was fate or luck that ı decided to take the metro in that day, ı will never know. Terrorism. You will never know where or when you get an attack. And no matter where you live in a metropolitan area in Europe or the middle of the war in Gaza. Its frightens people despite their age, gender and race. After that horrifying day, whenever ı am waiting for a bus with numerous of people or hearing a sound of fireworks ı startle and get scared, the attack destroyed my feeling of security. This unfortunate experience has led me to think about how kids and young people overcome their struggles in war or bombing attacks. And most of the time they don't have even a house. Thousands of children have been dying because of violence at war every year. Children living in violent terrorized environments experience such horrors as the destruction of their home and the death of their parents, siblings and friends. They can not go out without the fear of being shot or bombed, they leave the house knowing it might be the last time. They cant eat properly, they can't even find clean water to drink. Such tragic events are so frequent and take place nearly every other day. Children living in the war-related area that have been exposed to and are suffering from a range of trauma and abuse. This puts them at high risk for the development of mental health problems will carry these heavy emotional burdens into adulthood. To have better options, victims of terror tries to migrate all around the world. Migration is a very delicate problem that almost every country faces these days. There are now more than 70 million refugees and displaced people around the world. And today, one out of every 35 people in the world is an immigrant. There are more than 4 million refugees lives in my country, Turkey, today. Furthermore, several of them run the risk of death in unsafe in the boat while trying to reach their gateway to Europe. They accept to work in substandard or hazardous conditions for lower-wage, for children between the ages of 6-18 education is undoubtedly the most crucial factor. Therefore providing an education for these children has become an urgent problem. They deserve to live a fearless and appropriate condition of life as much everyone does. It is utterly unrealistic to think millions of immigrants would not be a serious problem. It must concern every people in this world. Refugees should not be treated as passive recipients of humanitarian they should be permitted to get a role in society and get behave equally. | Essay topic:Describe some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you. March 13, 2016, 18.45A warm spring day. I am walking with my earphones on, softly blowing wind accompanies the song that ı am listening. I am thinking about how it was a hard day after long courses in school and academy. Notwithstanding ı do every Sunday, ı decided to take the metro instead of a bus all of a sudden. While walking in a rush ı felt that ground is shaking with vigorous noise. No it is not an earthquake, it's impossible to occur an earthquake in Ankara. Then, what was that? I take down my earphones slowly to understand what is going on clearly. I was perplexed. People are screaming to each other ''Run!'' , ''Just run!'' and ı see them crying, running and yelling. And ı can't even move any part of my body. Not even my finger, ı was in shock. Smoke in the sky is getting higher and higher, ambulances and police cars come and goes. People are yelling their friends, wives, boyfriends names to ensure if they are alive. That moments ı spent in here was the longest minutes of my life. It was a Terrorist attack that 38 people died while waiting for a bus. That happened in the capital of Turkey a couple of years ago. It was fate or luck that ı decided to take the metro in that day, ı will never know. Terrorism. You will never know where or when you get an attack. And no matter where you live in a metropolitan area in Europe or the middle of the war in Gaza. Its frightens people despite their age, gender and race. After that horrifying day, whenever ı am waiting for a bus with numerous of people or hearing a sound of fireworks ı startle and get scared, the attack destroyed my feeling of security. This unfortunate experience has led me to think about how kids and young people overcome their struggles in war or bombing attacks. And most of the time they don't have even a house. Thousands of children have been dying because of violence at war every year. Children living in violent terrorized environments experience such horrors as the destruction of their home and the death of their parents, siblings and friends. They can not go out without the fear of being shot or bombed, they leave the house knowing it might be the last time. They can't eat properly, they can't even find clean water to drink. Such tragic events are so frequent and take place nearly every other day. Children living in the war-related area that have been exposed to and are suffering from a range of trauma and abuse. This puts them at high risk for the development of mental health problems will carry these heavy emotional burdens into adulthood. To have better options, victims of terror tries to migrate all around the world. Migration is a very delicate problem that almost every country faces these days. There are now more than 70 million refugees and displaced people around the world. And today, one out of every 35 people in the world is an immigrant. There are more than 4 million refugees lives in my country, Turkey, today. Furthermore, several of them run the risk of death in unsafe in the boat while trying to reach their gateway to Europe. They accept to work in substandard or hazardous conditions for lower-wage, for children between the ages of 6-18 education is undoubtedly the most crucial factor. Therefore, providing an education for these children has become an urgent problem. They deserve to live a fearless and appropriate condition of life as much everyone does. It is utterly unrealistic to think millions of immigrants would not be a serious problem. It must concern every people in this world. Refugees should not be treated as passive recipients of humanitarian they should be permitted to get a role in society and get behave equally. |
July 10, 2019 The Recruitment CommitteeAU Youth Volunteer Corps-10th Cohort Reff: Application for AU-YV; Cohort 10 Dear SirMadam; I am writing to apply as an African Union Youth Volunteer for cohort 10. I am a Liberian national with over 7 years of professional and volunteering experience in community development work. I hold a BA degree in Sociology from the United Methodist University in Monrovia, Liberia. I currently work at the YMCA of Liberia as project officer on its Community dialogue for conflict reconciliation and mitigation project in 7 conflict affected communities. As project officer, my role is to create safe spaces where meaningful reconciliations can take place and where social cohesion and intergroup harmony can be fostered. I also work to increase corporation and civic trust between communities, Civil Societies and Government through facilitating positive and inclusive encounters and dialogues using the proven community based sociotheraphy method and approach. As a pan Africanist, I aspire to be at the forefront of promoting Africa's growth and development by fostering peace and unity. Additionally, I want to gain international experiences, develop self-reliance, acquire new professional skills, experience a new African culture and network with people to collectively achieve our desire for prosperity and well-being, for unity and integration and for a continent of free citizens and expanded prospects where the full potential of women and youth are realized with freedom from fear of violence and disease. I am an active young professional with community development oriented skills and experiences particularly in Peace building, Health, Research, Community Mobilization, Youth Leadership Development and Advocacy. I am a good team player, dedicated, creative, productive, self-motivated, task oriented, and time conscious. My past experience has given me skills that are unique to the AU-YV program thereby making best suited for this role. I bring to my host Organization and the AU-YV program creativity, willingness to learn and a new perspective of conflict mitigation which is the proven community based sociotheraphy approach and method of conflict reconciliation. When accepted to participate in the AU-YV program, I will work to integrate the experience I have gained into my community by designing and developing programs and activities that will nurture the culture of peace and tolerance in African's younger generation in an effort to achieve the Africa we want. RegardsLawrence S. Dolo JrApplicant | July 10, 2019, The Recruitment Committee AU Youth Volunteer Corps-10th Cohort Jeff: Application for AUY; Cohort 10 Dear Sir Madam; I am writing to apply as an African Union Youth Volunteer for cohort 10. I am a Liberian national with over 7 years of professional and volunteering experience in community development work. I hold a BA degree in Sociology from the United Methodist University in Monrovia, Liberia. Furthermore, I currently work at the YMCA of Liberia as project officer on its Community dialogue for conflict reconciliation and mitigation project in 7 conflict affected communities. As project officer, my role is to create safe spaces where meaningful reconciliations can take place and where social cohesion and intergroup harmony can be fostered. I also work to increase corporation and civic trust between communities, Civil Societies and Government through facilitating positive and inclusive encounters and dialogues using the proven community based sociotheraphy method and approach. As a pan Africanist, I aspire to be at the forefront of promoting Africa's growth and development by fostering peace and unity. Additionally, I want to gain international experiences, develop self-reliance, acquire new professional skills, experience a new African culture and network with people to collectively achieve our desire for prosperity and well-being, for unity and integration and for a continent of free citizens and expanded prospects where the full potential of women and youth are realized with freedom from fear of violence and disease. I am an active young professional with community development oriented skills and experiences particularly in Peace building, Health, Research, Community Mobilization, Youth Leadership Development and Advocacy. I am a good team player, dedicated, creative, productive, self-motivated, task oriented, and time conscious. My experience has given me skills that are unique to the AUY program thereby making best suited for this role. I bring to my host Organization and the AUY program creativity, willingness to learn and a new perspective of conflict mitigation which is the proven community based sociotheraphy approach and method of conflict reconciliation. When accepted to participate in the AUY program, I will work to integrate the experience I have gained into my community by designing and developing programs and activities that will nurture the culture of peace and tolerance in African's younger generation in an effort to achieve the Africa we want. Regards Lawrence S. Solo Applicant |
- Extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences- If applicable, describe awards you have received, publications you have made, or skills you have acquired, etc. Businesses moves the world, which somehow makes us all connected. Is interesting think about how the people depend on businesses to satisfy their needs and desires, no matter in what part of the world they are; that's why it is vital to properly understand the complexity of what are and represents the industries. This led me to realize that business is more than just sales, is a large set of resources such as information management, market knowledge, innovation, but above all, the most important leadership, creativity and relationships. I have always been focused on applying these concepts and being able to recognize human needs as well as take full advantage of them. For example, when I was at school the students had problems with the food in the cafeteria, so I found a way to sell sandwiches during breaks. It's not a very ostentatious activity but by doing this, I was able to obtain some profits (this is just one of several examples of what I have done). I grew up with this great idea in my mind of how incredible it would be to be an entrepreneur of business, so I have this goal very clear. It is well known that in the 21st century the future of the economy and business is in Asia. the accomplishment of the economy of powerful countries such as South Korea, China and Japan is that their business models are hybrid of traditional culture and modern practices, as is explained in books like "the future is Asia" by Parag Khanna and "the Korean way in business" by Boyé Lafayette De Mente. However, the secret of its success and rapid expansion is its financing on education, research and development. The reduction of the probability that a business fails depend of the strategic study of each of the linkages that directly affect the implementation of activities and achievement of the objectives of companies; this can be learned through professional education and it is something that South Korea knows well as it can be seen at the level of its educational programs as well as the level of development of its society. The transformation that South Korea underwent to become one of the most socially and economically forward countries in less than 50 years, it a prove of their investment in the pursuit of quality knowledge. I consider that education is one of the most important bases for human and social growth, so it is necessary to acquire knowledge and never cease the learning process. Nevertheless, it is essential that people who have access to education fully benefit from these opportunities, so this is the area where the real effort is reflected. I strongly believe that all the effort and sacrifices that I make during my youth will help me to properly build my future and be excellent at a professional and personal level, so every day this idea inspires me to constantly strive for achieving my goals. I identify myself as a persistent, responsible and very dedicated person, many of these qualities I learned from my parents and the way they brought me up. One of the phrases that really identifies my family is "Success is not final; failure is not fatal: It is the courage to continue that counts." by Winston S. Churchill. Since my father's family had limited resources, he had to enlist in the army in order to earn an income, even though his great desire was to be able to study engineering. He never gave up with his dream and is currently studying industrial engineering at age 42, doing his fifth semester of college. As for my mother, got pregnant when she was 20 years old, but that didn't stop her from studying to be a professional nurse. She had to take care of me and study at the same time, however, never thought of giving up because she had very clear goals and wanted to achieve them at all costs. They really taught me that hardships are part of the process but I must always keep trying. After I graduated from high school, in 2015 I had the opportunity to enter a public university here in Colombia, so I started to study industrial engineering because I thought this career will allow me to learn in a specific way the management of company processes. Unfortunately, since the end of 2017 and beginning of 2018 the public universities in Colombia have had many problems regarding the quality of education and resources given to students (such as laboratories, computer rooms, etc.). For this reason, in the middle of 2018 there was a national strike until the first months of 2019, which delayed us for almost 2 semesters (1 year). This drove me to think a lot about the quality of study I really wanted and deserved, so I began to pursuit options to study an undergraduate abroad even if I had to start again. More than a hardship I see this as an opportunity to search for new horizons, being a more mature person and with the advantage of some previous knowledge. Therefore, I decided to apply to the Korean Government Scholarship Program (KGSP); through it I will be able to achieve a proper accredited education and show who I am, what I am capable of and the person I want to be in the future. With this new possibility, I decided not to study industrial engineering although I already had some previous knowledge of the semesters I have studied here in my country, in order to approach directly in business administration. Also, I pondered about a phrase I heard in one of my classes "if you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his language, that goes to his heart" by Nelson Mandela; it inspired me to want to develop into a polyglot and understand how important it is to know new cultures. This is something I want to apply to business, it's amazing to think about the international relations that could be achieved through cultural and language exchange. I've started with this objective, My native language is Spanish, I finished my English course and currently I am studying Korean. I started studying Korean by myself in march of this year and in April entered an "advanced" course dictated by professor Jung Sook Min from KOICA. Other extracurricular activities that I have done is I was in a logistic club in addition I went to industrial visits to manufacturing plants of companies as Postobón, Jamar, Coca-Cola, etc. Also, the closest work experience I've had is that I used to help my stepfather at his auto parts store. They had a quite disorganized and mechanized business model, so I helped them organize their workstations more efficiently and automate part of the processes. For example, they bought a computer for me to teach them how to type invoices and have an inventory. In, addition, I received certification in short courses of development of new commercial strategies, one in calculation and interpretation of financial indicators and one in the use of Microsoft tools such as excel. I also have an English course certificate, where I receive an award for best conversational achievement, and lastly a Korean course certificate. I genuinely feel prepared to accomplish this challenge, being able to study in an outstanding institution through KGSP is a wonderful opportunity to develop my future, to really learn the value of Korean culture and also to show to this beautiful country my Colombian traditions. | - Extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences- If applicable, describe awards you have received, publications you have made, or skills you have acquired, etc. Business moves the world, which somehow makes us all connected. Is interesting think about how the people depend on businesses to satisfy their needs and desires, no matter in what part of the world they are; that's why it is vital to properly understand the complexity of what are and represents the industries. This led me to realize that business is more than just sales, is a large set of resources such as information management, market knowledge, innovation, but above all, the most important leadership, creativity and relationships. I have always been focused on applying these concepts and being able to recognize human needs as well as take full advantage of them. For example, when I was at school the students had problems with the food in the cafeteria, so I found a way to sell sandwiches during breaks. It's not a very ostentatious activity but by doing this, I was able to obtain some profits (this is just one of several examples of what I have done). I grew up with this great idea in my mind of how incredible it would be to be an entrepreneur of business, so I have this goal very clear. It is well known that in the 21st century the future of the economy and business is in Asia. The accomplishment of the economy of powerful countries such as South Korea, China and Japan is that their business models are hybrid of traditional culture and modern practices, as is explained in books like "the future is Asia" by Parag Khanna and "the Korean way in business" by Bye Lafayette De Mente. However, the secret of its success and rapid expansion is its financing on education, research and development. The reduction of the probability that a business fails depend on the strategic study of each of the linkages that directly affect the implementation of activities and achievement of the objectives of companies; this can be learned through professional education, and it is something that South Korea knows well as it can be seen at the level of its educational programs as well as the level of development of its society. The transformation that South Korea underwent to become one of the most socially and economically forward countries in less than 50 years, it a proof of their investment in the pursuit of quality knowledge. I consider that education is one of the most important bases for human and social growth, so it is necessary to acquire knowledge and never cease the learning process. Nevertheless, it is essential that people who have access to education fully benefit from these opportunities, so this is the area where the real effort is reflected. I strongly believe that all the effort and sacrifices that I make during my youth will help me to properly build my future and be excellent at a professional and personal level, so every day this idea inspires me to constantly strive for achieving my goals. I identify myself as a persistent, responsible and very dedicated person, many of these qualities I learned from my parents and the way they brought me up. One of the phrases that really identifies my family is "Success is not final; failure is not fatal: It is the courage to continue that counts." by Winston S. Churchill. Since my father's family had limited resources, he had to enlist in the army in order to earn an income, even though his great desire was to be able to study engineering. He never gave up with his dream and is currently studying industrial engineering at age 42, doing his fifth semester of college. As for my mother, got pregnant when she was 20 years old, but that didn't stop her from studying to be a professional nurse. She had to take care of me and study at the same time, however, never thought of giving up because she had very clear goals and wanted to achieve them at all costs. They really taught me that hardships are part of the process, but I must always keep trying. After I graduated from high school, in 2015 I had the opportunity to enter a public university here in Colombia, so I started to study industrial engineering because I thought this career will allow me to learn in a specific way the management of company processes. Unfortunately, since the end of 2017 and beginning of 2018 the public universities in Colombia have had many problems regarding the quality of education and resources given to students (such as laboratories, computer rooms, etc.). For this reason, in the middle of 2018 there was a national strike until the first months of 2019, which delayed us for almost 2 semesters (1 year). This drove me to think a lot about the quality of study I really wanted and deserved, so I began to pursuit options to study an undergraduate abroad even if I had to start again. More than a hardship I see this as an opportunity to search for new horizons, being a more mature person and with the advantage of some previous knowledge. Therefore, I decided to apply to the Korean Government Scholarship Program (KGSP); through it, I will be able to achieve a proper accredited education and show who I am, what I am capable of and the person I want to be in the future. With this new possibility, I decided not to study industrial engineering, although I already had some previous knowledge of the semesters I have studied here in my country, in order to approach directly in business administration. Also, I pondered about a phrase I heard in one of my classes "if you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his language, that goes to his heart" by Nelson Mandela; it inspired me to want to develop into a polyglot and understand how important it is to know new cultures. This is something I want to apply to business, it's amazing to think about the international relations that could be achieved through cultural and language exchange. I've started with this objective, My native language is Spanish, I finished my English course, and currently I am studying Korean. I started studying Korean by myself in March of this year and in April entered an "advanced" course dictated by professor Jung Took Min from KO ICA. Other extracurricular activities that I have done is I was in a logistic club in addition I went to industrial visits to manufacturing plants of companies as Pontoon, Jamar, Coca-Cola, etc. Also, the closest work experience I've had is that I used to help my stepfather at his auto parts store. They had a quite disorganized and mechanized business model, so I helped them organize their workstations more efficiently and automate part of the processes. For example, they bought a computer for me to teach them how to type invoices and have an inventory. In, addition, I received certification in short courses of development of new commercial strategies, one in calculation and interpretation of financial indicators and one in the use of Microsoft tools such as excel. I also have an English course certificate, where I receive an award for best conversational achievement, and lastly a Korean course certificate. I genuinely feel prepared to accomplish this challenge, being able to study in an outstanding institution through KGSP is a wonderful opportunity to develop my future, to really learn the value of Korean culture and also to show to this beautiful country my Colombian traditions. |
My advisor has completely rejected it and told me to write another oneHow bad do you think this one is? P.s I know there are a lot of grammar errorsDon't focus on that partHow bad is the story ? 'No! That's not for me,'I said ,as I ran past a neighborhood group of thugs acting nonchalantly . They laughed at me and shouted in slow motion , 'so you think you are better than us! It's only a matter of time .' Only a matter of time, but don't I have a choice I thought critically in my infancy. As I packed what was left of my belongings in preparation for the upcoming second term of boarding school, I couldn't help but feel destitute after my brother sold most of my belongings to buy drugs. I didn't need much anyway for school besides books and soccer boots. The school environment wasn't utopian, but was still engaging. The school's unwritten slogan is 'love of work'.This phrase was excessively repeated throughout the day everyday as we did work ranging from sweeping to grass slashing. Apparently I even started to like work,and when the sweeping felt good,the books felt better. Nonetheless, soccer was always greatest. A day after playing soccer, my roommate and I decided to take the long route to our dormitory. As we walked past the school's sewer lake, I could help but give it a cold stare. 'So ,what do you in this sewage?' Muchindu asked.'We might as well start calling it fuel,' I said. Muchindu responded saying 'I thought you would never do drugs, listen to what you are saying now , you hypocrite '.I could not help but laugh out what he said. Nonetheless,I was focused to turn my theory into tangibles. From an empty room my school called a laboratory, I tried countless prototypes that were supposed to turn waste into usable energy. I had my eureka moment when one prototype deflected the needle of the multimeter measuring current. With the prototype working, I was able to produce electricity and natural gas from waste ranging from leaves to sewage. As I learnt more about bacteria and chemistry from books,I was able to drastically improve the output.But as the bacteria multiplied exponentially in the cells,and leading me to the Junior Engineer Technician and Scientist national fare ,I could not help but feel a sense of failure as I lost peers by the day to vices despite my best efforts to persuade them. 'I have problems you can't understand, ' they would say trying to puff up circumstances we shared. I felt like Sisyphus in trying to convince them that drugs are nothing but a burden. But I have a choice ,I think critically in my adulthood. 'If I am not for myself - who will be for me? If I am only for myself, who am I? If not now, when? ' Rabbi Hillel said. So I hoped to help my community in a way we needed it most, as such, I initiated a soccer team called Mitengo Football Club . I just don't want to see the analogy of the rich man dying of hunger in the midst of plenty by chewing rocks . | My advisor has completely rejected it and told me to write another somehow bad do you think this one is? P.s I know there are a lot of grammar errors Don't focus on that pathos bad is the story ? 'No! That's not for me,'I said, as I ran past a neighborhood group of thugs acting nonchalantly. They laughed at me and shouted in slow motion, 'so you think you are better than I! It's only a matter of time.' Only a matter of time, but don't I have a choice I thought critically in my infancy. As I packed what was left of my belongings in preparation for the upcoming second term of boarding school, I couldn't help but feel destitute after my brother sold most of my belongings to buy drugs. I didn't need much anyway for school besides books and soccer boots. The school environment wasn't utopian, but was still engaging. The school's unwritten slogan is 'love of work'. This phrase was excessively repeated throughout the day every day as we did work ranging from sweeping to grass slashing. Apparently I even started to like work, and when the sweeping felt good, the books felt better. Nonetheless, soccer was always greatest. A day after playing soccer, my roommate and I decided to take the long route to our dormitory. As we walked past the school's sewer lake, I could help but give it a cold stare. 'So, what do you in this sewage?' Machine asked.' We might as well start calling it fuel,' I said. Machine responded saying 'I thought you would never do drugs, listen to what you are saying now, you hypocrite '. I could not help but laugh out what he said. Nonetheless, I was focused to turn my theory into tangibles. From an empty room my school called a laboratory, I tried countless prototypes that were supposed to turn waste into usable energy. I had my eureka moment when one prototype deflected the needle of the multimeter measuring current. With the prototype working, I was able to produce electricity and natural gas from waste ranging from leaves to sewage. As I learned more about bacteria and chemistry from books, I was able to drastically improve the output. But as the bacteria multiplied exponentially in the cells, and leading me to the Junior Engineer Technician and Scientist national fare, I could not help but feel a sense of failure as I lost peers by the day to vices despite my best efforts to persuade them. 'I have problems you can't understand,' they would say trying to puff up circumstances we shared. I felt like Sisyphus in trying to convince them that drugs are nothing but a burden. But I have a choice, I think critically in my adulthood. 'If I am not for myself - who will be for me? If I am only for myself, who am I? If not now, when? ' Rabbi Hillel said. So I hoped to help my community in a way we needed it most, as such, I initiated a soccer team called Marengo Football Club. I just don't want to see the analogy of the rich man dying of hunger in the midst of plenty by chewing rocks. |
In my hindu religious community, it is frowned upon to think, speak or act on negative thoughts. We believe that no matter what unfortunate events are occurring in life, a positive outlook is a must. This belief comes from our legend that a goddess known as Saraswati is sitting on our tongue at all times. The moment we complain or spread negativity she makes it come true in an instant with a snap of her fingers. I believe that the moral lesson that my community follows from this legend is what I want to bring to the Emory community. I want to help motivate, inspire and help others through the power of positive thinking and being. At Emory, I want to foster a community of volunteers and students that help each other not only get through the stresses of life, depression and mental health but also help the georgia community. | In my Hindu religious community, it is frowned upon to think, speak or act on negative thoughts. We believe that no matter what unfortunate events are occurring in life, a positive outlook is a must. This belief comes from our legend that a goddess known as Sarasota is sitting on our tongue at all times. The moment we complain or spread negativity she makes it come true in an instant with a snap of her fingers. I believe that the moral lesson that my community follows from this legend is what I want to bring to the Emory community. I want to help motivate, inspire and help others through the power of positive thinking and being. At Emory, I want to foster a community of volunteers and students that help each other not only get through the stresses of life, depression and mental health but also help the Georgia community. |
It was a cold Saturday night when my mom and I received my father's last call. The second of July 2016, the date I invited in secret a special guy to my father's house at night, so I started the day excited. If I reflect on that day, it would be a beautiful one. My father, my hero whom I love very much. He would caress me with his big hands warm to the touch. He would always make his best effort to love me, guide me, and teach me. His age was affecting his health, he felt his knees weakening day by day and he would still work over eleven hours a day just for my sake. He signed me up in the Peruvian North American Cultural Institute when I was six to prepare me for the future. Believing that English would help me with more opportunities. Searching for the best schools and institutes to ensure my academic future. Apart from giving me academic chances, he consented me going to the cinema or having a walk just to unwind and talk afterward about our days. Everyone can picture me looking happy standing next to him. That is why the second of July was an exciting Saturday for me. I told my dad I would stay the night so we could spend the entire Sunday together. I was in my house packing some clothes in my backpack when the loud telephone rang and my mom rushed to pick it up. The next thing I remember was my mom trying to get a taxi to get to my father's place as fast as we could. When we arrived, they had already taken him to the hospital. The special guy I mentioned before came after I heard the devastating words "he didn't make it". I explained the situation to him he hugged me whispering an "everything will be okay" and went home. Maybe the words of my father's departure didn't hit me that hard at the time but I busied myself with comforting my siblings and my mother, the tears and the loud cries filled the air. Later, I would feel the whole spectrum of consequences. My father was my main financial aid, and he paid for my school and other extracurricular activities. Innova Schools where I finished high school was nice enough to offer me a circumstantial scholarship. But the most painful consequence was the void he left in me. For months, I would wander around without a purpose when it hit me. I was taking my father's death as a setback instead of honoring his hard work. I decided it was time to take action and follow my passion no matter the challenges. I'm applying for a college in the United States of America first because it was always my dream ever since I discovered their education system and student life. Second, I believe I can do so much more, and no matter how difficult I will give my all to achieve my dreams. | It was a cold Saturday night when my mom and I received my father's last call. The second of July 2016, the date I invited in secret a special guy to my father's house at night, so I started the day excited. If I reflect on that day, it would be a beautiful one. My father, my hero whom I love very much. He would caress me with his big hands warm to the touch. He would always make his best effort to love me, guide me, and teach me. His age was affecting his health, he felt his knees weakening day by day, and he would still work over eleven hours a day just for my sake. He signed me up in the Peruvian North American Cultural Institute when I was six to prepare me for the future. Believing that English would help me with more opportunities. Searching for the best schools and institutes to ensure my academic future. Apart from giving me academic chances, he consented me going to the cinema or having a walk just to unwind and talk afterward about our days. Everyone can picture me looking happy standing next to him. That is why the second of July was an exciting Saturday for me. I told my dad I would stay the night, so we could spend the entire Sunday together. I was in my house packing some clothes in my backpack when the loud telephone rang and my mom rushed to pick it up. The next thing I remember was my mom trying to get a taxi to get to my father's place as fast as we could. When we arrived, they had already taken him to the hospital. The special guy I mentioned before came after I heard the devastating words "he didn't make it". I explained the situation to him, he hugged me whispering an "everything will be okay" and went home. Maybe the words of my father's departure didn't hit me that hard at the time, but I busied myself with comforting my siblings and my mother, the tears and the loud cries filled the air. Later, I would feel the whole spectrum of consequences. My father was my main financial aid, and he paid for my school and other extracurricular activities. In nova Schools where I finished high school was nice enough to offer me a circumstantial scholarship. But the most painful consequence was the void he left in me. For months, I would wander around without a purpose when it hit me. I was taking my father's death as a setback instead of honoring his hard work. I decided it was time to take action and follow my passion no matter the challenges. Furthermore, I'm applying to a college in the United States of America first because it was always my dream ever since I discovered their education system and student life. Second, I believe I can do so much more, and no matter how difficult I will give my all to achieve my dreams. |
I need lots of help on the flow and style of my essay. Also, I would like if I could get a better title for my common application essay. *****************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************As a child, I had strongly believed that friendship could only be built on trust. As society is today, trust is extremely hard to come by. Therefore, I only had a small group of around 10 made up of true friends growing up, ones who I could talk to freely without a care in the world. I wished to have friends that gave me total freedom from the restraining control adults had. Those remaining were classified as an acquaintance in my head. Those around me had hundreds of friends with little to no discrepancy between each "friend". Social media played a role by misguiding and unintentionally influencing their users to mark every friend, enemy, close friends, and acquaintances as a friend by default. However, recently, Instagram posted a new update to allow users to customize their "Close Friends" list. But, that's beyond the point. I stuck to what I thought was right persistently year after year without fail. Sadly, life doesn't like to play fair and my ideas were going to change forever. Years passed by. Maturity developed. During the summer before 10th grade, I obtained a well-deserved vacation to Xiamen, China. There I met my soon-to-be-best friend, ______. This destined encounter leads my world into a state of disarray. Slowly but surely, she gained my trust. Now when I look back, I find that wasn't the only reason she became my best friends. We had similarities, similarities I never noticed until before. Upon the afternoon of August 2 in the year 2018, she casually remarked that "friends aren't all about trust, you know ... " That seemingly casual statement changed my concept of the world overnight. Throughout the night, I was deep in reflection. Hours ticked by. Frustration grew as I contemplated the meaning of true friendship. I tossed and turned, refusing to succumb to the powerful lull of sleep. I questioned myself if a friendship could be formed from feelings other than trust. I asked myself if true friendships were caused by trust and only trust. I probed my memory for past interaction with my companions. I researched the true meaning of friendship with the power of Google. Perhaps life's answers aren't as obvious as they seemed to be. Throughout that restless night, I found an answer. An answer acceptable to my standards. I confidently concluded that friendships don't only have to do with trust. For now, friendship is a complex, dynamic number of connections that allow people to bond from their common interest and values with the addition of having quality and meaningful time spent together. With an unforeseen bonus, I gained the ability to try and try again against the impossible until I reached something that I find worthy to be called mine. After all of this, I mean myself a new person. I made myself have a sense of responsibility to the happiness and well being of my true friends. After all, the true meaning of anything is subject change, until further notice. | I need lots of help on the flow and style of my essay. Also, I would like if I could get a better title for my common application essay. *****************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************As a child, I had strongly believed that friendship could only be built on trust. As society is today, trust is extremely hard to come by. Therefore, I only had a small group of around 10 made up of true friends growing up, ones who I could talk to freely without a care in the world. I wished to have friends that gave me total freedom from the restraining control adults had. Those remaining were classified as an acquaintance in my head. Those around me had hundreds of friends with little to no discrepancy between each "friend". Social media played a role by misguiding and unintentionally influencing their users to mark every friend, enemy, close friends, and acquaintances as a friend by default. However, recently, Instagram posted a new update to allow users to customize their "Close Friends" list. But, that's beyond the point. I stuck to what I thought was right persistently year after year without fail. Sadly, life doesn't like to play fair, and my ideas were going to change forever. Years passed by. Maturity developed. During the summer before 10th grade, I obtained a well-deserved vacation to Xi amen, China. There I met my soon-to-be-best friend, ______. This destined encounter leads my world into a state of disarray. Slowly but surely, she gained my trust. Now when I look back, I find that wasn't the only reason she became my best friends. We had similarities, similarities I never noticed until before. Upon the afternoon of August 2 in the year 2018, she casually remarked that "friends aren't all about trust, you know ..." That seemingly casual statement changed my concept of the world overnight. Throughout the night, I was deep in reflection. Hours ticked by. Frustration grew as I contemplated the meaning of true friendship. I tossed and turned, refusing to succumb to the powerful lull of sleep. I questioned myself if a friendship could be formed from feelings other than trust. Furthermore, I asked myself if true friendships were caused by trust and only trust. Furthermore, I probed my memory for past interaction with my companions. Furthermore, I researched the true meaning of friendship with the power of Google. Perhaps life's answers aren't as obvious as they seemed to be. Throughout that restless night, I found an answer. An answer acceptable to my standards. I confidently concluded that friendships don't only have to do with trust. For now, friendship is a complex, dynamic number of connections that allow people to bond from their common interest and values with the addition of having quality and meaningful time spent together. With an unforeseen bonus, I gained the ability to try and try again against the impossible until I reached something that I find worthy to be called mine. After all of this, I mean myself a new person. I made myself have a sense of responsibility to the happiness and well-being of my true friends. After all, the true meaning of anything is subject change, until further notice. |
The buzz of a broken speaker on a hot quasi-summer afternoon filled the air as I was walking up on the stage. "This is it, I guess", I exclaimed to no one in particular, "everything I've worked for is over". And within the next minute or so, I walked off the stage, high school diploma in my hands. It wasn't too difficult of a task to work for, but I made some meaningful memories along the way. It was around this time that I decided on a mentality for my life goals: take a step in making the world a better place, no matter how small the influence. There was a problem, though - I didn't really know what steps to take in achieving it. Due to living in Washington my whole life, I only applied to in-state schools, and after a tough decision I chose to attend the University of Washington-Bothell due to initial interest in the school's appealing teaching and learning style, small classes, and accessible faculty. I chose to embark on a learning path that would expand my mind and enhance my knowledge of the world, thinking and learning more and more about its complexities through an interdisciplinary education, and making valuable connections through different clubs and programs across two college campuses. At UWB, I mostly took courses in the School of Interdisciplinary Arts & Sciences to fulfill the requirements for my initial degree plans as a first step. Through the first-year Discovery Core course series, however, I learned the most I ever could compared to my other classes. These classes covering performing arts, creative writing, and film, had me bring together my learning of inclusive practices and creative collaboration to pursue meaning in my academic and social life and deepen my experience, both as a student and as a person. I do not think I could have made a better choice to transition into the college setting - every single memory I have of that class will forever be in my mind as a positive and enriching experience. Putting my heart and soul into creative assignments and creating valuable connections with a variety of classmates by collaborating and evaluating really went a long way to improving me as a student and as a person. One of my favorite experiences since coming here, however, was in the Seattle campus, and it was how I truly found a community. Through the Department of Student Life's emails in the summer, I heard about a tri-campus program known as Unite UW, which builds bridges between domestic and international students at the university, breaking down barriers and boundaries and ultimately inspiring lasting relationships to unify the world. Every minute I spent in that program was worth it. I was going through a rough patch towards the end of last spring and even attempted suicide twice. It was not a good time. But, after reaching out to the right people who I met in that program, receiving the support that I never knew I needed, and continuing my participation in the program to share my story, hear the story of others, and become what I never thought I could have been to myself and others, I finally felt like I belonged somewhere. Life may be hard at times, but when you know your struggles and do the right things to move past them, improvement is certain. Although I'm applying without a major, I do know what I want to do in life. Ever since I started at UWB, I had the goal of attaining a double major, or even a double degree if possible. I believe that I would not be able to have the full college experience I wanted with just one field of study, and that through an education with skills transferrable across academic disciplines, I would get the most out of my time in college. Although my coursework may not 100% show it, I do have clear areas which I want to study. My experiences may have provided me with many valuable experiences and opportunities for teaching and learning across cultures, but I do believe that it is a formal education in these core topics as well that can bring me closer to my goals. For this very reason, I am more than certain that UW Seattle will allow me to obtain and develop the full Husky experience necessary to achieve my life goal of making the world a better place. With that in mind, my main intended major is Education, Communities & Organizations (ECO). Ever since I was a child and influenced by education in a variety of ways, I knew that it would be the career for me. I have been proactive in finding my career path so far, and I have come to terms that education is a very culturally and socially diverse field, and one that is integral to making the world work. Although there is an Educational Studies major at UWB, and it is a wonderful program, it is rather generalized in its approach, and I am specifically interested in any way of guiding future generations and having them learn core values in acceptance, appreciation, inclusion, and accountability - fostering the same sense of community that I have had through my own school experiences, and no program does it better than the ECO major. Community engagement and diversity, especially through education, have always been important qualities in my life, as I was raised in my household to believe that society thrives best when people from all over the world come together, regardless of boundaries and prejudice, and create something meaningful, and there is no better way to foster that than through facilitated interaction and engagement of various communities. Each and every experience I had so far has given me valuable skills that I can translate easily into the major and into my career. Through my performing arts class this past spring, I gained effective communication and leadership skills that will be useful in any setting. My lab section for biology had me constantly collaborating and assisting students in tasks when they needed it. My experience at Unite UW has allowed me to connect with people from all over the world and hear their stories while sharing my own experiences and becoming more and more of a genuine example for others. I felt comfortable being in front of others and learning from them as much as they learned from me. This coming fall quarter, I am taking B EDUC 210 (Education in Diverse Societies) so that I can understand what this diverse field entails across different cultures and societies, and I could not be more excited for this golden opportunity to propel me closer to the career. If admitted, I will take EDUC 280 (Introduction to Community Education) as soon as possible not just so that I can declare the major upon its completion, but in fact to have the fullest understanding of my intended career field, take the next step in engaging with diverse communities, and use old skills to find new ways to express my own identity in the world. Ultimately, I came to realize that focusing purely on my own education was never my passion, but that enriching the lives of others through any form of education is. Though I enjoy learning many things and have a vast knowledge of multiple subjects, the study of education itself - and especially the creativity, philosophy, psychology, and diversity behind it - has always appealed to me. Teaching and learning doesn't just happen in your run-of-the-mill classroom, but it happens in any way that engages our society in rapidly and actively changing the way they think. This is especially true in a "melting-pot"-type of city like Seattle, where many people who never get the chance for formal education will still have enriching experiences, and with people who are able to engage those experiences the city can truly flourish from its diversity. I hope to be able to apply what I learn through the university's program to finally reach my life goals, and with what I've done so far, I am confident to enter UW with an open mind, and definitely prepared for what the future has in store for me in the Seattle area. With all these terrific advantages, UW will truly push me closer and closer towards my goal of changing the world for the better, even with the smallest step forward. Other stats (if you're interested):Current Cumulative GPA 3.6 (improvement from high school, positive trend)Application: In the summer, for winter quarter 2019 (summer quarter will be over for me)Dean's list for 22 quarters so far, expected to receive it in spring & summerIntended majors at UWB if I stay are Culture, Literature & the Arts and Educational Studies as a double major, intended major besides ECO is probably Informatics (why I'm taking INFO 200 + stats) Active in clubs at both UWB and UW Seattle: Unite UW, Film Club (Seattle), Husky Gaming Club (Bothell) Courses:Fall 2018:B WRIT 134 English Composition (3.6)B CORE 104 Creative Writing & Storytelling: Re-Imagining Performance (4.0)B CHEM 139 Introductory General Chemistry (3.1) - I can explain, I took this class because my friends from HS were doing it and I wanted to transition as well as possible into university Winter 2019:B WRIT 135 Research Writing (3.5)B CORE 117 Images of Women & Feminism in Film (4.0)B BIO 180 Introductory Biology I (3.4)B BIO 181 Biology Lab I (credit received) Spring 2019:BIS 315 Statistics for Social Science (4.0)BIS 170 Introduction to Psychology (in progress)B CORE 120 Performing Arts & Community Building (in progress, expected 4.0)B CUSP 133 First Year Reflection (credit received) Summer 2019 (at UW Seattle):COM 200 Introduction to CommunicationINFO 200 Foundations of InformationPHIL 100 Introduction to Philosophy Fall 2019 (back at UWB):B EDUC 210 Education in Diverse CommunitiesBIS IA 207 Creative WritingBIS 218 Geographic Visualization | The buzz of a broken speaker on a hot quasi-summer afternoon filled the air as I was walking up on the stage. "This is it, I guess", I exclaimed to no one in particular, "everything I've worked for is over". And within the next minute or so, I walked off the stage, high school diploma in my hands. It wasn't too difficult of a task to work for, but I made some meaningful memories along the way. It was around this time that I decided on a mentality for my life goals: take a step in making the world a better place, no matter how small the influence. There was a problem, though - I didn't really know what steps to take in achieving it. Due to living in Washington my whole life, I only applied to in-state schools, and after a tough decision I chose to attend the University of Washington-Bothell due to initial interest in the school's appealing teaching and learning style, small classes, and accessible faculty. I chose to embark on a learning path that would expand my mind and enhance my knowledge of the world, thinking and learning more and more about its complexities through an interdisciplinary education, and making valuable connections through different clubs and programs across two college campuses. At USB, I mostly took courses in the School of Interdisciplinary Arts camp; Sciences to fulfill the requirements for my initial degree plans as a first step. Through the first-year Discovery Core course series, however, I learned the most I ever could compare to my other classes. These classes covering performing arts, creative writing, and film, had me bring together my learning of inclusive practices and creative collaboration to pursue meaning in my academic and social life and deepen my experience, both as a student and as a person. I do not think I could have made a better choice to transition into the college setting - every single memory I have of that class will forever be in my mind as a positive and enriching experience. Putting my heart and soul into creative assignments and creating valuable connections with a variety of classmates by collaborating and evaluating really went a long way to improving me as a student and as a person. One of my favorite experiences since coming here, however, was in the Seattle campus, and it was how I truly found a community. Through the Department of Student Life's emails in the summer, I heard about a tri-campus program known as Unite UW, which builds bridges between domestic and international students at the university, breaking down barriers and boundaries and ultimately inspiring lasting relationships to unify the world. Every minute I spent in that program was worth it. I was going through a rough patch towards the end of last spring and even attempted suicide twice. It was not a good time. But, after reaching out to the right people who I met in that program, receiving the support that I never knew I needed, and continuing my participation in the program to share my story, hear the story of others, and become what I never thought I could have been to myself and others, I finally felt like I belonged somewhere. Life may be hard at times, but when you know your struggles and do the right things to move past them, improvement is certain. Although I'm applying without a major, I do know what I want to do in life. Ever since I started at USB, I had the goal of attaining a double major, or even a double degree if possible. I believe that I would not be able to have the full college experience I wanted with just one field of study, and that through an education with skills transferrable across academic disciplines, I would get the most out of my time in college. Although my coursework may not 100% show it, I do have clear areas which I want to study. My experiences may have provided me with many valuable experiences and opportunities for teaching and learning across cultures, but I do believe that it is a formal education in these core topics as well that can bring me closer to my goals. For this very reason, I am more than certain that UW Seattle will allow me to obtain and develop the full Husky experience necessary to achieve my life goal of making the world a better place. With that in mind, my main intended major is Education, Communities camp; Organizations (ECO). Ever since I was a child and influenced by education in a variety of ways, I knew that it would be the career for me. I have been proactive in finding my career path so far, and I have come to terms that education is a very culturally and socially diverse field, and one that is integral to making the world work. Although there is an Educational Studies major at USB, and it is a wonderful program, it is rather generalized in its approach, and I am specifically interested in any way of guiding future generations and having them learn core values in acceptance, appreciation, inclusion, and accountability - fostering the same sense of community that I have had through my own school experiences, and no program does it better than the ECO major. Community engagement and diversity, especially through education, have always been important qualities in my life, as I was raised in my household to believe that society thrives best when people from all over the world come together, regardless of boundaries and prejudice, and create something meaningful, and there is no better way to foster that than through facilitated interaction and engagement of various communities. Each and every experience I had so far has given me valuable skills that I can translate easily into the major and into my career. Through my performing arts class this past spring, I gained effective communication and leadership skills that will be useful in any setting. My lab section for biology had me constantly collaborating and assisting students in tasks when they needed it. My experience at Unite UW has allowed me to connect with people from all over the world and hear their stories while sharing my own experiences and becoming more and more of a genuine example for others. I felt comfortable being in front of others and learning from them as much as they learned from me. This coming fall quarter, I am taking B EDUC 210 (Education in Diverse Societies) so that I can understand what this diverse field entails across different cultures and societies, and I could not be more excited about this golden opportunity to propel me closer to the career. If admitted, I will take EDUC 280 (Introduction to Community Education) as soon as possible not just so that I can declare the major upon its completion, but in fact to have the fullest understanding of my intended career field, take the next step in engaging with diverse communities, and use old skills to find new ways to express my own identity in the world. Ultimately, I came to realize that focusing purely on my own education was never my passion, but that enriching the lives of others through any form of education is. Though I enjoy learning many things and have a vast knowledge of multiple subjects, the study of education itself - and especially the creativity, philosophy, psychology, and diversity behind it - has always appealed to me. Teaching and learning doesn't just happen in your run-of-the-mill classroom, but it happens in any way that engages our society in rapidly and actively changing the way they think. This is especially true in a "melting-pot"-type of city like Seattle, where many people who never get the chance for formal education will still have enriching experiences, and with people who are able to engage those experiences the city can truly flourish from its diversity. I hope to be able to apply what I learn through the university's program to finally reach my life goals, and with what I've done so far, I am confident to enter UW with an open mind, and definitely prepared for what the future has in store for me in the Seattle area. With all these terrific advantages, UW will truly push me closer and closer towards my goal of changing the world for the better, even with the smallest step forward. Other stats (if you're interested):Current Cumulative GPA 3.6 (improvement from high school, positive trend)Application: In the summer, for winter quarter 2019 (summer quarter will be over for me)Dean's list for 22 quarters so far, expected to receive it in spring camp; superintended majors at USB if I stay are Culture, Literature camp; the Arts and Educational Studies as a double major, intended major besides ECO is probably Informatics (why I'm taking INFO 200 + stats) Active in clubs at both USB and UW Seattle: Unite UW, Film Club (Seattle), Husky Gaming Club (Bothell) Courses:Fall 2018:B WRIT 134 English Composition (3.6)B CORE 104 Creative Writing camp; Storytelling: Re-Imagining Performance (4.0)B CHEM 139 Introductory General Chemistry (3.1) - I can explain, I took this class because my friends from HS were doing it and I wanted to transition as well as possible into university Winter 2019:B WRIT 135 Research Writing (3.5)B CORE 117 Images of Women camp; Feminism in Film (4.0)B BIO 180 Introductory Biology I (3.4)B BIO 181 Biology Lab I (credit received) Spring 2019:BIS 315 Statistics for Social Science (4.0)BIS 170 Introduction to Psychology (in progress)B CORE 120 Performing Arts camp; Community Building (in progress, expected 4.0)B CUSP 133 First Year Reflection (credit received) Summer 2019 (at UW Seattle):COM 200 Introduction to CommunicationINFO 200 Foundations of Informational 100 Introduction to Philosophy Fall 2019 (back at USB):B EDUC 210 Education in Diverse Communities BIS IA 207 Creative Writing BIS 218 Geographic Visualization |
"Get up, we need to go!!", my mother screeched. With blurry vision and a groggy mood, a nine year old me reluctantly joined my family outside. There it was the dreaded hand pump, taunting me. groggily, I got to it, pumping till my arms were sore... Next was making laddus, an activity I enjoyed. Then collecting shoes at the temple. This is how I spend 10-15 days of my summer since I was 5. I couldn't understand as a child why I should tire myself so much doing laborious and small jobs for free. But that has shaped a huge part of my life now. My whole life I've done 'sewa'(altruistic helping). I've always been taught to help people in some form or other. When I turned 10, every other weekend I went to an NGO with 50 kids to teach English, Math, Public Speaking and to even tell jokes. Whenever I used to meet them, they had a glimmer in their eyes, portraying the genuine excitement they felt, which made me work hard to plan every class better than the last. Our family paid for their school fees and their books. I grew up with these kids, I've heard some kids teenage problems, others domestic problems. They're family, they've helped me grow into the person I am now. They motivated me to help others like them, so I taught at another NGO, which was starting out, so didn't have many resources. There I saw that 70% of the kids didn't even go to school, cause they couldn't afford the books. I never realised how big the problem was until then. That group was huge, around 200 kids! Ironically, 2 weeks later my finals for 11th grade ended, what I saw next shocked me. As I exited my exam hall, I saw papers flying in the air, on the ground, all torn in pieces. Books that could've get a child to school, books that could educate, books thrown by the educated. I picked up each and every paper, with the support of my friends. thats when it hit me, exam season had ended, and books will be thrown, I decided to start a book drive, I put posters in school, circulated e-posters on WhatsApp, contacted an NGO to collaborate with to touch a larger audience. In one month, we collected around 1500 books. When I gave those books to those kids, their faces lit up and they told me that you've made my life. A small effort, got 17 10th graders to give their boards and many more to school. I continue to teach several students important life skills, trying to provide all the resources which I can, through myself, my friends and my family. The hidden talent in the streets of many cities in India, motivate me to get up and help in whatever way I can. These kids have taught me to be grateful and work hard to achieve my dreams. They have taught me that excuses are for losers. They have unknowingly given me strength during my hardest times. | "Get up, we need to go!!", my mother screeched. With blurry vision and a groggy mood, a nine-year-old me reluctantly joined my family outside. There it was the dreaded hand pump, taunting me. Groggily, I got to it, pumping till my arms were sore... Next was making lands, an activity I enjoyed. Then collecting shoes at the temple. This is how I spend 10-15 days of my summer since I was 5. I couldn't understand as a child why I should tire myself so much doing laborious and small jobs for free. But that has shaped a huge part of my life now. My whole life I've done 'sea'(altruistic helping). I've always been taught to help people in some form or other. When I turned 10, every other weekend I went to an NGO with 50 kids to teach English, Math, Public Speaking and to even tell jokes. Whenever I used to meet them, they had a glimmer in their eyes, portraying the genuine excitement they felt, which made me work hard to plan every class better than the last. Our family paid for their school fees and their books. I grew up with these kids, I've heard some kids teenage problems, others domestic problems. They're family, they've helped me grow into the person I am now. They motivated me to help others like them, so I taught at another NGO, which was starting out, so didn't have many resources. There I saw that 70% of the kids didn't even go to school, because they couldn't afford the books. I never realized how big the problem was until then. That group was huge, around 200 kids! Ironically, 2 weeks later my finals for 11th grade ended, what I saw next shocked me. As I exited my exam hall, I saw papers flying in the air, on the ground, all torn in pieces. Books that could've got a child to school, books that could educate, books thrown by the educated. I picked up each and every paper, with the support of my friends. that's when it hit me, exam season had ended, and books will be thrown, I decided to start a book drive, I put posters in school, circulated e-posters on WhatsApp, contacted an NGO to collaborate with to touch a larger audience. In one month, we collected around 1500 books. When I gave those books to those kids, their faces lit up, and they told me that you've made my life. A small effort, got 17 10th graders to give their boards and many more to school. I continue to teach several students important life skills, trying to provide all the resources which I can, through myself, my friends and my family. The hidden talent in the streets of many cities in India, motivate me to get up and help in whatever way I can. These kids have taught me to be grateful and work hard to achieve my dreams. They have taught me that excuses are for losers. They have unknowingly given me strength during my hardest times. |
"I have chosen Canada because of its comprehensive and competitive education system. Canadian universities offer advanced technological facilities and it is a multicultural country. I have chosen the program of Computer Science because I am very interested in computers and technology. My interest in computers started to grow rapidly after 2010 when I got my first very own desktop computer and till this day it intrigues me more and more as I dive deeper into the world of technology. I have always been the tech guy among my friends and family and they would always ask me for suggestions related to computers, smartphones, cameras or any consumer electronics in general. It always made me happy and I'm always up for help. On top of my interests, everyone else suggested me to pursue a career in this field from my mentors to friends to seniors reassuring my decision. My university of choice, Memorial University of Newfoundland, has been ranked at 401-500th best in the world to study Computer Science by Times Higher Education's ranking 2019 and 449th overall by Webometrics University World Rankings. It is one of the best and most affordable public universities in Canada so I've chosen Memorial University's Computer Science. My educational goal is to get a university degree in Computer Science from a reputable university. With a diversified community, such found in Memorial University, I will gain valuable knowledge and skills that build a strong foundation for my career. Consequently, I will be able to extend my network internationally. Then get a good job when I get back to Bangladesh and complete my dreams of becoming a software engineer. I'm not pursuing a similar program in Bangladesh because in our country we don't have high ranked universities and the quality of education on my program is poor and outdated. Whereas Canada is one of the best places on earth to get high-quality education with over 25 Canadian universities marking its place among the top 500 best universities in the world. The cost is also affordable, particularly when compared to the US and the UK yet the quality of education is on par. The Co-op program offered at Memorial University will also benefit me at gaining real-world experience at working for a software company. I believe it to be a totally worthy investment for my future. Based on recent statistics, most graduates from abroad are more likely to get a better job and out-earned those who graduate locally. Getting a bachelor's degree from Memorial University will put me at an advantage at getting better jobs in my country as Canadian degrees are valued well and is highly sought after in Bangladesh. Finishing my study abroad and returning home will help me get a new perspective on culture, language, quality education and a willingness to learn which are very attractive to future employers. It will greatly benefit my career opportunities here in my homeland. Today, most companies prefer recruiting people with diversified and advanced skills and knowledge. They don't mind paying more as long as they can have those who can take their company to an international level. For a successful future, each individual has to present himself with an outstanding qualification and talent that separates him from the mass which I will get in Canada. My family members (father, mother and younger sister) all live in Bangladesh. All of my close relatives and the majority of my friends are here in Bangladesh. My father will be paying my tuition fees and living expenses for me while I study in Canada. I will try to help him out as I will be able to earn there during vacations and can do some part-time job while studying." Thanks for reviewing! | "I have chosen Canada because of its comprehensive and competitive education system. Canadian universities offer advanced technological facilities, and it is a multicultural country. I have chosen the program of Computer Science because I am very interested in computers and technology. My interest in computers started to grow rapidly after 2010 when I got my first very own desktop computer and till this day it intrigues me more and more as I dive deeper into the world of technology. I have always been the tech guy among my friends and family, and they would always ask me for suggestions related to computers, smartphones, cameras or any consumer electronics in general. It always made me happy, and I'm always up for help. On top of my interests, everyone else suggested me to pursue a career in this field from my mentors to friends to seniors reassuring my decision. My university of choice, Memorial University of Newfoundland, has been ranked at 401-500th best in the world to study Computer Science by Times Higher Education's ranking 2019 and 449th overall by Geometrics University World Rankings. It is one of the best and most affordable public universities in Canada, so I've chosen Memorial University's Computer Science. My educational goal is to get a university degree in Computer Science from a reputable university. With a diversified community, such found in Memorial University, I will gain valuable knowledge and skills that build a strong foundation for my career. Consequently, I will be able to extend my network internationally. Then get a good job when I get back to Bangladesh and complete my dreams of becoming a software engineer. I'm not pursuing a similar program in Bangladesh because in our country we don't have high ranked universities and the quality of education on my program is poor and outdated. Whereas Canada is one of the best places on earth to get high-quality education with over 25 Canadian universities marking its place among the top 500 best universities in the world. The cost is also affordable, particularly when compared to the US and the UK, yet the quality of education is on par. The Co-op program offered at Memorial University will also benefit me at gaining real-world experience at working for a software company. I believe it to be a totally worthy investment for my future. Based on recent statistics, most graduates from abroad are more likely to get a better job and out-earned those who graduate locally. Getting a bachelor's degree from Memorial University will put me at an advantage at getting better jobs in my country as Canadian degrees are valued well and is highly sought after in Bangladesh. Finishing my study abroad and returning home will help me get a new perspective on culture, language, quality education and a willingness to learn which are very attractive to future employers. It will greatly benefit my career opportunities here in my homeland. Today, most companies prefer recruiting people with diversified and advanced skills and knowledge. They don't mind paying more as long as they can have those who can take their company to an international level. For a successful future, each individual has to present himself with an outstanding qualification and talent that separates him from the mass which I will get in Canada. My family members (father, mother and younger sister) all live in Bangladesh. All of my close relatives and the majority of my friends are here in Bangladesh. My father will be paying my tuition fees and living expenses for me while I study in Canada. I will try to help him out as I will be able to earn there during vacations and can do some part-time job while studying." Thanks for reviewing! |
Hi my name is Karla. I was born in Phoenix Arizona, my Mother moved to Texas when I was 15. I am a first time student at Kilgore College. My hobbies are mostly spending time with my family. I have a three year old daughter with my fiance. He has three girls from a previous marriage. They are my bonus kids, at times it's a bit stressful caring for four girls but I love them to pieces. I also have two biological sisters as well as three step sisters and one step brother. I consider myself to be a quiet person, though very easy-going and lovable. My biggest motivation is my Mother, she has truly shown me that I must work hard in order to achieve my goals. She raised my two sister and I alone, I remember her working long days and coming home to us and somehow managing being the best mother. She taught me to never depend on another person to get you through life. I have always had an interest in the healthcare field. Helping others is what I live to do. My whole life I planned on becoming a nurse, I thought that was what I was destined to do. I had been working at a dental office for six years, not sure how I ended up there, soon shortly I realized that was not where I had planned to be. I was not happy working there. At first I thought maybe this is enough for me but after six years I began to dread the days I was there. Every morning I would think of a reason to not go. So today I begin a new journey to follow my dreams. Please check and correct this essay. Thank you. | Hi my name is Karla. I was born in Phoenix Arizona, my Mother moved to Texas when I was 15. I am a first time student at Kilgore College. My hobbies are mostly spending time with my family. I have a three-year-old daughter with my fiancé. He has three girls from a previous marriage. They are my bonus kids, at times it's a bit stressful caring for four girls, but I love them to pieces. I also have two biological sisters as well as three stepsisters and one step-brother. I consider myself to be a quiet person, though very easy-going and lovable. My biggest motivation is my Mother, she has truly shown me that I must work hard in order to achieve my goals. She raised my two sister and I alone, I remember her working long days and coming home to us and somehow managing being the best mother. She taught me to never depend on another person to get you through life. I have always had an interest in the healthcare field. Helping others is what I live to do. My whole life I planned on becoming a nurse, I thought that was what I was destined to do. I had been working at a dental office for six years, not sure how I ended up there, soon shortly I realized that was not where I had planned to be. I was not happy working there. At first, I thought maybe this is enough for me but after six years I began to dread the days I was there. Every morning I would think of a reason to not go. So today I begin a new journey to follow my dreams. Please check and correct this essay. Thank you. |
My name is Thi Ngoc Loan Nguyen, I'm 18 years old and I graduated from Tien Giang High School For The Gifted.I think Australia is a suitable place for me to study university because Australia is a developed country and well-known as the best country for the international students. The government of Australia cares about the living of international students, provides an array of convenient conditions and makes sure about their security when they are studying in there. Furthermore, the system of transportation and the climate in Australia are both terrific. Especially, the education of Australia has high quality. I am going to attend University of Technology Sydney ( UTS Insearch ). UTS is located in central city with the modern facilities and equipment. Additionally, technology is the strong point of UTS and the Communication course is in accordance with my requirements. Before I study Diploma of Communication, I will take the two-months English course which begins on July 1st, 2019 so as to improve my academic English and get use to the environment of university . In the Communication course, I will learn about "soft skills" as creativity, interpersonal communication skills, the ability to the problem solve and to work well in collaboration. After I complete the Bachelor of Communication, I will come back to Viet Nam in order to continue to pursue my dream. I want to be a lecturer in Viet Nam 's university, teach what I can learn from developed country to the younger generation and impulse the development of Communication in Viet Nam. Please point out my mistakes in this essay and give me some your ideas . I'm very grateful . | My name is The NGC Loan Nguyen, I'm 18 years old, and I graduated from Then Gang High School For The Gifted. I think Australia is a suitable place for me to study university because Australia is a developed country and well-known as the best country for the international students. The government of Australia cares about the living of international students, provides an array of convenient conditions and makes sure about their security when they are studying in there. Furthermore, the system of transportation and the climate in Australia are both terrific. Especially, the education of Australia has high quality. I am going to attend University of Technology Sydney (ITS In search). ITS is located in central city with the modern facilities and equipment. Additionally, technology is the strong point of ITS and the Communication course is in accordance with my requirements. Before I study Diploma of Communication, I will take the two-months English course which begins on July 1st, 2019 to improve my academic English and get use to the environment of university. In the Communication course, I will learn about "soft skills" as creativity, interpersonal communication skills, the ability to the problem solve and to work well in collaboration. After I complete the Bachelor of Communication, I will come back to Vietnam in order to continue to pursue my dream. I want to be a lecturer in Vietnam is university, teach what I can learn from developed country to the younger generation and impulse the development of Communication in Vietnam. Please point out my mistakes in this essay and give me some ideas. I'm very grateful. |
"Three days and she'll be six years old", I think to myself midst the chaos of the workday. The sounds of anxiety and pain bouncing off the trays and the echoing phones surround me. Here we are pushing through, waiting for the hands to reach the end. In three days she will be six years old, where does that leave me? - I'm currently writing my admission to pharmacy school as to why i chose pharmacy and how i can contribute. I'm a single mom... And would like to include my daughter in this. She has pushed me and has been every reason for my success thus far. Any feedback appreciated. | "Three days and she'll be six years old", I think to myself midst the chaos of the workday. The sounds of anxiety and pain bouncing off the trays and the echoing phones surround me. Here we are pushing through, waiting for the hands to reach the end. In three days she will be six years old, where does that leave me? - I'm currently writing my admission to pharmacy school as to why I chose pharmacy and how I can contribute. I'm a single mom... And would like to include my daughter in this. She has pushed me and has been every reason for my success thus far. Any feedback appreciated. |
To be honest, I have sent a gap year to explore what is my strengths and weaknesses, what I desire to become in order to find a suitable way for myself. There are many people asked me why I choose to waste my time instead of studying at university then graduated like other friends. I was really nervous and puzzled even sometimes wonder if I am wrong. Looking at my friends who studied at university make me moved to tears. However, I strongly believe that I need to make my choice worthy. Regarding the post which I have read, "It turns out that adults are children who walk in the school, because of the drum-call then run disorderly in fear". The drum-call of 18, 25 or 30 years old are invisible pressure. The pressure of choosing a university and career than have good work in order to have a family are social norms which press against their shoulder - children who live in adults form. Society always looks at the score to define a person and somehow it still happens when turning to work. They look at the salary to decide the personality of mortals. When I was 16, I had read a book called Slumdog Millionaire of Vikas Swarup - an Indian author. Incredibly, it really impressed me and directly influenced my destination. I still remember there was a quote in that book "Dream just only has power on our heads but money has power on other heads". I know money is really important but rather than money is how we control it instead of being controlled. If we use it effectively, its benefits can help not only us but also other people. In fact, I have always be inspired by this quote when choosing International Business Management because I want to create valuable things instead of just gaining profits. I hope to see my brainchild can bring the best service for people and make them satisfied. But I can understand clearly that if I want to fulfill my dream, I need to do and learn more. The more things I can learn, the more valuable things I can create. Within the last 3 years, I have participated in some non-government organizations especially Project Sugar. Besides helping children in shelters to have a better life, I had a chance to learn soft skills such as team working, communication and organization management which seems to have a similar way in setting up and controlling a business that brings good value. I had always remembered the day when applying for Executive Committee position of Project Sugar. The tears on our president eyes were obsessing me. He said that he could see himself in us, the person who is enthusiast, innocent even pointless but never scared or give up. Moreover, he appreciated and hoped that even in the next 5 or 10 years we will have to think about "bread and butter" but we will keep this spirit and believe in ourselves. We both cried when listening to him because we can realize his love for this organization and people in here. I did not know that a person can cry, hurt and dedicate for an organization even it does not bring any salaries or assets. The only precious property is people and the value that we try to create every day. We believe that we have the same purpose and need to fight for it - the visible thing that can change our mind in a positive way. Fortunately, I have many chances to discuss with leaders who have the ability to inspire others even in Sugar or until now is AIESEC, they always give me the belief of a person who I want to become and the working environment which I want to create in the future. Professional - Equity - Development. I believe that everything is originated by small steps. By focusing on the way my leader behave, I can learn the way that he takes care and appreciates members also how he communicates and supports them. This position is not easy because of its responsibility and loneliness but after all, it is worthy. Therefore, to achieve this position, I am trying to improve my ability and develop what I have such as empathy, analytics, and self-awareness. Sometimes, everyone will hear their drum-call appear in their heart. No matter what it is, I will always turn it into my motivation and try to become the best version of myself instead of the pressure which can prevent me from striving for my life-long dream. | To be honest, I have sent a gap year to explore what is my strengths and weaknesses, what I desire to become in order to find a suitable way for myself. There are many people asked me why I choose to waste my time instead of studying at university then graduated like other friends. I was really nervous and puzzled even sometimes wonder if I am wrong. Looking at my friends who studied at university make me moved to tears. However, I strongly believe that I need to make my choice worthy. Regarding the post which I have read, "It turns out that adults are children who walk in the school, because of the drum-call then run disorderly in fear". The drum-call of 18, 25 or 30 years old are invisible pressure. The pressure of choosing a university and career than have good work in order to have a family are social norms which press against their shoulder - children who live in adults form. Society always looks at the score to define a person, and somehow it still happens when turning to work. They look at the salary to decide the personality of mortals. When I was 16, I had read a book called Slumdog Millionaire of Vikas Sharp - an Indian author. Incredibly, it really impressed me and directly influenced my destination. I still remember there was a quote in that book "Dream just only has power on our heads, but money has power on other heads". I know money is really important but rather than money is how we control it instead of being controlled. If we use it effectively, its benefits can help not only us but also other people. In fact, I have always been inspired by this quote when choosing International Business Management because I want to create valuable things instead of just gaining profits. I hope to see my brainchild can bring the best service for people and make them satisfied. But I can understand clearly that if I want to fulfill my dream, I need to do and learn more. The more things I can learn, the more valuable things I can create. Within the last 3 years, I have participated in some non-government organizations especially Project Sugar. Besides helping children in shelters to have a better life, I had a chance to learn soft skills such as team working, communication and organization management which seems to have a similar way in setting up and controlling a business that brings good value. I had always remembered the day when applying for Executive Committee position of Project Sugar. The tears on our president eyes were obsessing me. He said that he could see himself in us, the person who is enthusiast, innocent even pointless but never scared or give up. Moreover, he appreciated and hoped that even in the next 5 or 10 years we will have to think about "bread and butter" but we will keep this spirit and believe in ourselves. We both cried when listening to him because we can realize his love for this organization and people in here. I did not know that a person can cry, hurt and dedicate for an organization even it does not bring any salaries or assets. The only precious property is people and the value that we try to create every day. We believe that we have the same purpose and need to fight for it - the visible thing that can change our mind positively. Fortunately, I have many chances to discuss with leaders who have the ability to inspire others even in Sugar or until now is AIESEC, they always give me the belief of a person who I want to become and the working environment which I want to create in the future. Professional - Equity - Development. I believe that everything is originated by small steps. By focusing on the way my leader behave, I can learn the way that he takes care and appreciates members also how he communicates and supports them. This position is not easy because of its responsibility and loneliness but after all, it is worthy. Therefore, to achieve this position, I am trying to improve my ability and develop what I have such as empathy, analytics, and self-awareness. Sometimes, everyone will hear their drum-call appear in their heart. No matter what it is, I will always turn it into my motivation and try to become the best version of myself instead of the pressure which can prevent me from striving for my life-long dream. |
Greetings, Here is the full question of the essay: How do you plan to lead a Poverty Eradication project or create awareness on Poverty Eradication in your home country after this programme? So basically, I would like to apply for a volunteer program (We will do a community-based project abroad for a month). Thus, I need to submit an essay about that topic. This is the most difficult question for me because I haven't found an example of this essay. I mean, I know that to answer this question I need to be realistic to give an example of a project that I can do. But I still can't imagine what kind of project I can make. Can anybody give me an example to answer this question with detail of the project or action that we can do? Currently, I only have an idea to make a campaign by posting a poster on social media. But I think it is a bad idea since I am not an influencer. So, please give me an idea. Thank you | Greetings, Here is the full question of the essay: How do you plan to lead a Poverty Eradication project or create awareness on Poverty Eradication in your home country after this program? So basically, I would like to apply for a volunteer program (We will do a community-based project abroad for a month). Thus, I need to submit an essay about that topic. This is the most difficult question for me because I haven't found an example of this essay. I mean, I know that to answer this question I need to be realistic to give an example of a project that I can do. But I still can't imagine what kind of project I can make. Can anybody give me an example to answer this question with detail of the project or action that we can do? Currently, I only have an idea to make a campaign by posting a poster on social media. But I think it is a bad idea since I am not an influencer. So, please give me an idea. Thank you |
Thank you in advance, I have been studying production engineering at the Federal University of Juiz de Fora and during this period I have been engaging myself in many different extra class activities. I was part of Student Society, which aims to work in projects that benefit students to achieve extra knowledge in production engineering; Consulting club, which aims to do engineering consulting to local companies; Professor assistant, I was the tutor for students and participate in Engineering conferences from my state. Those activities helped me to develop important skills like leadership, teamwork, project management, and creativity. Given my path there are three may reasons why I want to participate in the Chonnam National University GKS summer program. First of all, the GKS can provide unique in-depth academic training from engineering professors with a different background. Learning from them will provide me useful and new knowledge and also another perspective to understand already know subjects. Furthermore, the interaction with other Koreans and Latin American's from different countries could improve my intercultural skills since it would be a valuable exchange culture. Secondly, the GKS can make my dream to go back to Korea a reality. In the last year, I studied one semester in a business school in Korea with a scholarship from my university. I absolutely loved this experience and I adapted very well living there. I learned about culture, history, and technology which opened my mind about Korea living style. I also took Korean classes and I have been studying Korean since I come back to Brazil. During this time, I had the opportunity to solve real cases from Samsung and LG. In LG's competition, my team passed to the finals and we presented our idea to LG's manager. Visit Korea again would be a great opportunity to practice my Korean and try new experiences. Finally, one of the goals that I have, when I started my major, was to participle in a research program and discover solutions for real problems. Until now I didn't have the opportunity to do this in my university, so the GKS summer program would be a once in life chance to challenge myself in this field and search for an important unsolved problem that my country is struggling to solve it. For one year I was an engineering intern in a core of innovation and technology transfer at a federal institute of education, science and technology and there I experienced that exists a big distance between mostly universities and companies in Brazil. I do believe that Korea can be a great environment for this research because it has many contributions and successful cases for partnership between universities and companies. | Thank you in advance, I have been studying production engineering at the Federal University of Juiz de Fora and during this period I have been engaging myself in many extra class activities. I was part of Student Society, which aims to work in projects that benefit students to achieve extra knowledge in production engineering; Consulting club, which aims to do engineering consulting to local companies; Professor assistant, I was the tutor for students and participate in Engineering conferences from my state. Those activities helped me to develop important skills like leadership, teamwork, project management, and creativity. Given my path there are three may reason why I want to participate in the Chennai National University GKS summer program. First, the GKS can provide unique in-depth academic training from engineering professors with a different background. Learning from them will provide me useful and new knowledge and also another perspective to understand already know subjects. Furthermore, the interaction with other Koreans and Latin American's from different countries could improve my intercultural skills since it would be a valuable exchange culture. Secondly, the GKS can make my dream to go back to Korea a reality. In the last year, I studied one semester in a business school in Korea with a scholarship from my university. I absolutely loved this experience and I adapted very well living there. I learned about culture, history, and technology which opened my mind about Korea living style. Furthermore, I also took Korean classes and I have been studying Korean since I come back to Brazil. During this time, I had the opportunity to solve real cases from Samsung and LG. In LG's competition, my team passed to the finals, and we presented our idea to LG's manager. Visit Korea again would be a great opportunity to practice my Korean and try new experiences. Finally, one of the goals that I have, when I started my major, was to participle in a research program and discover solutions for real problems. Until now, I didn't have the opportunity to do this in my university, so the GKS summer program would be a once in life chance to challenge myself in this field and search for an important unsolved problem that my country is struggling to solve it. For one year I was an engineering intern in a core of innovation and technology transfer at a federal institute of education, science and technology and there I experienced that exists a big distance between mostly universities and companies in Brazil. I do believe that Korea can be a great environment for this research because it has many contributions and successful cases for partnership between universities and companies. |
Currently, a business model called Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR) which is motivating the company to be socially accountable to itself and the public is accepted by more and more multinational companies. Caramela (2018) defines CSR as an approach for corporations to take social and environmental responsibility during business operations, which can help the companies demonstrate company's corporate citizenship and keep the corporation away from external threat surrounds the corporation. In the current social environment, the primary purpose of companies formulate the CSR policies is to guarantee that their product is safe and keep sustainability. In this essay, the IKEA company (IKEA) and the Apple company (Apple) offer demonstrations about what they did in these CSR aspects. IKEA is the largest and the valuable brand with worth over 18 billion dollars furniture retailer, operating 389 stores in present 47 countries (Statista,2019a). The largest technology multinational corporation in the world, Apple, have reached 950 billion dollars sales from 1976 to 2018 (Statista, 2019b). This essay will compare and contrast two companies' CSR policies, particularly in product safety and sustainability strategy. To begin with, both IKEA and Apple focus on product safety. As the largest furniture retailer, IKEA committed to providing affordable products while guaranteeing product quality and safety (IKEA, 2019). In order to realize this purpose, they formulate the strict rules and the standers on the markets and follow the requirements seriously even go beyond these rules (IKEA, 2019). Additionally, IKEA owns two test labs, which test the products in wide range of areas by using different standers, to minimize the potential safety risks and confirm that the best material can be used (IKEA, 2019). Finally, when it comes to chemicals, it only use the chemicals needed in order to keep the products away from harmful chemicals (IKEA, 2019). As for Apple, the strict rules are also set by Apple for the materials they would use, which also go beyond these during operation (Apple, 2019a). Additionally, different with IKEA's labs, Apple built the lab not only to test the equality and safety but also to use hazard and risk assessment tools to find safe materials and understand the effect on human and the planet (Apple, 2019a). In the end, Apple formed the Green Chemistry Advisory Board composed of researchers and academics, aiming to find innovative approaches to minimize toxins from the supply chain (Apple, 2019a). In summary, both two firms focus on how to create a safe product and set rules to ensure these. However, Apple formed an institution to research and study these, which is a better way in this filed. The second part of CSR towards sustainability which two companies focused. As for IKEA, it launched a program called The People and Positive strategy which take measures to improve health and reduce humanity's impact to the planet (IKEA, 2017). In addition, in order to promote the use of renewable energy, about 750,00 solar panels were installed on buildings which power to company operations and customers (IKEA, 2017). At the moment, IKEA made a pledge to invest £471m in this area in the COP21 and vowed to be the net exporter of green energy by 2020 (The Guardian, 2016). When it comes to Apple, they achieve the goal of energy use by recycling the old devices, through the program called Apple GiveBack (Apple, 2019b). Daisy, a robot in this program, take apart old devices, remove and chose components which can be reused in the new devices to reduce resources (Apple, 2019b). Comparing with IKEA's renewable energy strategy, Apple has already powered by 100 percent green energy, which has already beyond other multinational corporation such as IKEA (TechLife News, 2018). Though from the new Apple park headquarters to its distribution centers and retail stores have used the 100 percent green power, it cannot involve the suppliers and manufacturers (TechLife News, 2018). To sum up, they are trying to achieve sustainability through different approaches in recycle devices and renewable resources. In these aspects, comparing with IKEA's unrealized strategies, Apple does set an excellent example not only on strategy but also carried out for multinational's CSR. From the information above, both IKEA and Apple have paid more attention to product safety and sustainability. For the product safety, through two companies have made own efforts such as formulating the strict rules, test on the lab and research on chemical materials, Apple do those better than IKEA. Apple invests more money and spends more time to analyze and research. When it comes to sustainability, it can be concluded that Apple's strategies are more practical and feasible than what IKEA put forward. In conclusion, form what Apple and IKEA do for the CSR, it seems to offer some suggestions for all of the multinational companies about how should they do on the product safety and sustainability. Only all of the companies take CSR responsibility actively can this planet be more Stability and harmony. | Currently, a business model called Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR) which is motivating the company to be socially accountable to itself and the public is accepted by more and more multinational companies. Caramel (2018) defines CSR as an approach for corporations to take social and environmental responsibility during business operations, which can help the companies demonstrate company's corporate citizenship and keep the corporation away from external threat surrounds the corporation. In the current social environment, the primary purpose of companies formulate the CSR policies is to guarantee that their product is safe and keep sustainability. In this essay, the IKEA company (IKEA) and the Apple company (Apple) offer demonstrations about what they did in these CSR aspects. IKEA is the largest and the valuable brand with worth over 18 billion dollars furniture retailer, operating 389 stores in present 47 countries (Statista,2019a). The largest technology multinational corporation in the world, Apple, have reached 950 billion dollars sales from 1976 to 2018 (Statista, 2019b). This essay will compare and contrast two companies' CSR policies, particularly in product safety and sustainability strategy. To begin with, both IKEA and Apple focus on product safety. As the largest furniture retailer, IKEA committed to providing affordable products while guaranteeing product quality and safety (IKEA, 2019). In order to realize this purpose, they formulate the strict rules and the standers on the markets and follow the requirements seriously even go beyond these rules (IKEA, 2019). Additionally, IKEA owns two test labs, which test the products in wide range of areas by using different standers, to minimize the potential safety risks and confirm that the best material can be used (IKEA, 2019). Finally, when it comes to chemicals, it only uses the chemicals needed in order to keep the products away from harmful chemicals (IKEA, 2019). As for Apple, the strict rules are also set by Apple for the materials they would use, which also go beyond these during operation (Apple, 2019a). Additionally, different with IKEA's labs, Apple built the lab not only to test the equality and safety but also to use hazard and risk assessment tools to find safe materials and understand the effect on human and the planet (Apple, 2019a). In the end, Apple formed the Green Chemistry Advisory Board composed of researchers and academics, aiming to find innovative approaches to minimize toxins from the supply chain (Apple, 2019a). In summary, both two firms focus on how to create a safe product and set rules to ensure these. However, Apple formed an institution to research and study these, which is a better way in this filed. The second part of CSR towards sustainability which two companies focused. As for IKEA, it launched a program called The People and Positive strategy which take measures to improve health and reduce humanity's impact to the planet (IKEA, 2017). In addition, in order to promote the use of renewable energy, about 750,00 solar panels were installed on buildings which power to company operations and customers (IKEA, 2017). At the moment, IKEA made a pledge to invest £471m in this area in the COP21 and vowed to be the net exporter of green energy by 2020 (The Guardian, 2016). When it comes to Apple, they achieve the goal of energy use by recycling the old devices, through the program called Apple Giveback (Apple, 2019b). Daisy, a robot in this program, take apart old devices, remove and chose components which can be reused in the new devices to reduce resources (Apple, 2019b). Comparing with IKEA's renewable energy strategy, Apple has already powered by 100 percent green energy, which has already beyond other multinational corporation such as IKEA (Techie News, 2018). Though from the new Apple park headquarters to its distribution centers and retail stores have used the 100 percent green power, it cannot involve the suppliers and manufacturers (Techie News, 2018). To sum up, they are trying to achieve sustainability through different approaches in recycle devices and renewable resources. In these aspects, comparing with IKEA's unrealized strategies, Apple does set an excellent example not only on strategy but also carried out for multinational's CSR. From the information above, both IKEA and Apple have paid more attention to product safety and sustainability. For the product safety, through two companies have made own efforts such as formulating the strict rules, test on the lab and research on chemical materials, Apple does those better than IKEA. Apple invests more money and spends more time to analyze and research. When it comes to sustainability, it can be concluded that Apple's strategies are more practical and feasible than what IKEA put forward. In conclusion, form what Apple and IKEA do for the CSR, it seems to offer some suggestions for all the multinational companies about how should they do on the product safety and sustainability. Only all the companies take CSR responsibility actively can this planet be more Stability and harmony. |
Because I found that this major would support me to become a data analyst. Data analysis is an important skill in this age of big data. The ability to gain insight from data would help the policymakers to decide their actions so that it would boost a nation's prosperity in the end. The business side would take advantage too if they have a data analyst on their side since the economic policies would be made accurately and based on data. Besides, the course is related to my undergraduate study, so I think I wouldn't have any difficulty regarding the main concept understandings. With statistical skill that I got from my undergraduate experiences, I believe that this course would be a happy place to learn and the right place to develop. | Because I found that this major would support me to become a data analyst. Data analysis is an important skill in this age of big data. The ability to gain insight from data would help the policymakers to decide their actions so that it would boost a nation's prosperity in the end. The business side would take advantage too if they have a data analyst on their side since the economic policies would be made accurately and based on data. Besides, the course is related to my undergraduate study, so I think I wouldn't have any difficulty regarding the main concept understandings. With statistical skill that I got from my undergraduate experiences, I believe that this course would be a happy place to learn and the right place to develop. |
Dear SirMadam I am writing to apply for POSCO Asia Fellowship 2019, where I am very interested. to apply and study at one of the campuses in Korea and get a degree from one of the universities which are my opportunity to enrich my knowledge and professional development so that it contributes to the development of my country and to learn and have new experiences. My name is Adeembas I'm Currently working as an election supervisor in the sub-district of my region because soon Indonesia will hold a presidential election, members of the provincial legislature and cities in Indonesia this time the democratic party is the biggest because it combines the presidential and legislative elections throughout Indonesia Coming from Indonesia my greatest challenge is in helping to improve the livelihoods of developing nations through sustainable development and good governance principles. The need for policymakers, who are able to employ cross jurisdictions and cross-disciplinary strategies to overcome complex challenges is essential. and this is what I see in the Korean state in various challenges in making political, economic, and strategic decisions in the Korean peninsula as well as building relations between both South Korea and North Korea which are currently working and heading towards peace. I considered necessary to continue with my studies and do a master's degree in Korea for increasing my level of knowledge and opportunity to work in the government and to become policymakers, especially in South Korea. I see POSCO Asia Fellowship as an opportunity for me to excel and develop my skills in a country where the universities offer master's degree that is a focus in politics and regulation study. Only a few countries in the world offer a unique approach to education as this program does. The high level of education that Korea has, which is recognized throughout the world, placing itself in the first places with one of the top educations in the world, is what made me choose POSCO Asia Fellowship korea over other countries, but also seeks to encourage at the same time international exchange, as well as promoting friendship between different countries. I would be grateful to be provided with sponsorship to further my education and build a career and POSCO Asia Fellowship will be immensely helpful. My future potential employer especially in the public and government sector such as local universities,research study about politics and policymakers that capable of creating a good policy make regulations that regulate and facilitate and help people to live better in the area will be a good channel my focus is where I can transfer the knowledge gained in an optimized manner to my country and future generations. In addition, if get selected I will get to know people from various regions with different backgrounds and different cultures. The exposure is important for interaction and integration of diverse ideas and perspectives pertaining to various global issues; With the right people, culture, and values, you can accomplish great things. I am determined to make the most of the scholarship benefits. I will study, collect, search and find many ideas that will apply when I return to my country to contribute to my country Indonesia. Once again I am grateful for considering my application and I look forward to a favorable reply. Pls kindly Review my essay | Dear Sir Madam I am writing to apply for PASCO Asia Fellowship 2019, where I am very interested. To apply and study at one of the campuses in Korea and get a degree from one of the universities which are my opportunity to enrich my knowledge and professional development so that it contributes to the development of my country and to learn and have new experiences. My name is Adverbs I'm Currently working as an election supervisor in the sub-district of my region because soon Indonesia will hold a presidential election, members of the provincial legislature and cities in Indonesia this time the Democratic Party is the biggest because it combines the presidential and legislative elections throughout Indonesia Coming from Indonesia my greatest challenge is in helping to improve the livelihoods of developing nations through sustainable development and good governance principles. The need for policymakers, who are able to employ cross jurisdictions and cross-disciplinary strategies to overcome complex challenges is essential. And this is what I see in the Korean state in various challenges in making political, economic, and strategic decisions in the Korean peninsula as well as building relations between both South Korea and North Korea which are currently working and heading towards peace. I considered necessary to continue with my studies and do a master's degree in Korea for increasing my level of knowledge and opportunity to work in the government and to become policymakers, especially in South Korea. I see PASCO Asia Fellowship as an opportunity for me to excel and develop my skills in a country where the universities offer master's degree that is a focus in politics and regulation study. Only a few countries in the world offer a unique approach to education as this program does. The high level of education that Korea has, which is recognized throughout the world, placing itself in the first places with one of the top educations in the world, is what made me choose PASCO Asia Fellowship Korea over other countries, but also seeks to encourage at the same time international exchange, as well as promoting friendship between different countries. I would be grateful to be provided with sponsorship to further my education and build a career and PASCO Asia Fellowship will be immensely helpful. My future potential employer especially in the public and government sector such as local universities, research study about politics and policymakers that capable of creating a good policy make regulations that regulate and facilitate and help people to live better in the area will be a good channel my focus is where I can transfer the knowledge gained in an optimized manner to my country and future generations. In addition, if you get selected I will get to know people from various regions with different backgrounds and different cultures. The exposure is important for interaction and integration of diverse ideas and perspectives pertaining to various global issues; With the right people, culture, and values, you can accomplish great things. I am determined to make the most of the scholarship benefits. I will study, collect, search and find many ideas that will apply when I return to my country to contribute to my country Indonesia. Once again I am grateful for considering my application and I look forward to a favorable reply. Pls kindly Review my essay |
Sure my pleasureI'll be happy to Hello professors, I'm really honored to be here today.My name is Darren, My friend call me niuchond,they alway say I'm a tender people,and I consider myself as a good listener who is listen people's perspective and idea. In highschool period,I was impressed by English drama which I took charge of actor and edition.Before English drama, I'm afraid of talking English to people,After this activity,I gradually realized that I should improve my English grammar and verbal ability,so that can use on work and around the world I really want to be part of department of Applied English,and use my power to make student love Studying language,I Will put what I learn in university into practice effectly in future Above all is myself introduce, I very want to learn from u ,thanks professors. | Sure my pleasure'll be happy to Hello professors, I'm really honored to be here today. My name is Darren, My friend call me Richmond, they away say I'm a tender people, and I consider myself as a good listener who is listen people's perspective and idea. In high school period, I was impressed by English drama which I took charge of actor and edition. Before English drama, I'm afraid of talking English to people, After this activity, I gradually realized that I should improve my English grammar and verbal ability, so that can use on work and around the world I really want to be part of department of Applied English, and use my power to make student love Studying language, I Will put what I learn in university into practice effect in future Above all is myself introduce, I very want to learn from u, thanks professors. |
Over the past four years at Harker Heights High School, athletics has not only been a hobby of mine, but has been my lifestyle as well. Athletics has influenced my character by instilling the values of teamwork, and leadership. Personally I can not imagine my life without sports. At the age of three I was already kicking around a soccer ball and begging my parents to let me play on a team like my older brother did, they eventually did and thats when I fell in love with the sport. Time went on and soccer became routine, I would shuffle from school practice to LoneStar Soccer Club practice, four days a week. It was not until I entered Harker Heights when sports began to influence my character without me even realizing it simply by instilling the values into my life. I learned the value of how to be a team player and the true definition of teamwork when I ran Varsity Cross Country my freshman year. I learned the value of teamwork from running along side six other girls who we all depended on each other to do our best- to win for our each other. Numerous meets were spent cheering each other on to simply do their best for our team. Without each others support we would not have been successful or felt the need to compete and go into the next "gear" (as Coach Taylor would say) for one another. This was the first time in all my years of being on numerous teams of how much each individuals' work and support contributed to our teams successes. Senior year I was given the opportunity to be one of two captains to lead the Varsity Soccer team, a program I have been a part of for four years. This was an opportunity to challenge myself along with my teammates everyday to push the team as a whole to be better. Being a captain led me to be able to demonstrate the ability to be a leader. There were multiple games after we had lost that I would have to reassure everyone that a loss does not define us but the way we react does. However being in a leadership position also meant I had to lead by example, academics were very important to me personally as the team as a whole. If my teammates were struggling in a class I would always offer to help them study and help them get back into a better position. Harker Heights athletics has not just been a time for me to play the sports I love but also have taught me many valuable lessons along with long lasting memories. As I reflect on my time spent at Harker Heights it will not be the countless hours spent in classrooms that I will remember but instead it will be the short season where I got to spend it with the people that mean the most to me; my teammates and my coaches who ultimately have became my family over four years. These values that have been instilled in me I will take with me throughout college and onto my future endeavors. | Over the past four years at Parker Heights High School, athletics has not only been a hobby of mine, but has been my lifestyle as well. Athletics has influenced my character by instilling the values of teamwork, and leadership. Personally I can not imagine my life without sports. At the age of three I was already kicking around a soccer ball and begging my parents to let me play on a team like my older brother did, they eventually did and that's when I fell in love with the sport. Time went on and soccer became routine, I would shuffle from school practice to Lodestar Soccer Club practice, four days a week. It was not until I entered Parker Heights when sports began to influence my character without me even realizing it simply by instilling the values into my life. I learned the value of how to be a team player and the true definition of teamwork when I ran Varsity Cross Country my freshman year. I learned the value of teamwork from running alongside six other girls who we all depended on each other to do our best- to win for our each other. Numerous meets were spent cheering each other on to simply do their best for our team. Without each other's support we would not have been successful or felt the need to compete and go into the next "gear" (as Coach Taylor would say) for one another. This was the first time in all my years of being on numerous teams of how much each individuals' work and support contributed to our teams successes. Senior year I was given the opportunity to be one of two captains to lead the Varsity Soccer team, a program I have been a part of for four years. This was an opportunity to challenge myself along with my teammates every day to push the team as a whole to be better. Being a captain led me to be able to demonstrate the ability to be a leader. There were multiple games after we had lost that I would have to reassure everyone that a loss does not define us but the way we react does. However, being in a leadership position also meant I had to lead by example, academics were very important to me personally as the team as a whole. If my teammates were struggling in a class I would always offer to help them study and help them get back into a better position. Parker Heights athletics has not just been a time for me to play the sports I love but also have taught me many valuable lessons along with long-lasting memories. As I reflect on my time spent at Parker Heights it will not be the countless hours spent in classrooms that I will remember, but instead it will be the short season where I got to spend it with the people that mean the most to me; my teammates and my coaches who ultimately have become my family over four years. These values that have been instilled in me, I will take with me throughout college and onto my future endeavors. |
My name is Sayed Ishraque Hossain, and currently, I am a high school student from Sunnydale School in Dhaka. I am expected to graduate by August 2019. I have accepted my offer from the Department of Environmental Science at York University and I am very eager to pursue my undergraduate study there. I was born in the city of Dhaka in 2001. I started my school life at Sunnydale School from 2004, and completed my Ordinary Level Examinations in 2017 and successively my Advanced Subsidiary Level Examinations in 2018. I will be sitting for my Advanced Level Examinations in May 2019. Canada's quality of education system is renowned in the world. Canada is an ideal country for pursuing higher, not only for the quality education but also for its welcoming and non-discriminatory society. It is one of the leading countries in the world that is considered very safe and suitable for its own citizens and immigrants to live together in a peaceful and disciplined community. York University is one of the top-ranked universities in Canada and its department of Environmental Science is considered one of the best amongst many other universities. Overall the interactive community and stimulating environment of York University is quite well known which is one of the prime reasons why I applied there. Environmental Science program is an interdisciplinary program that integrates core courses in the disciplines of biology, chemistry and geography. It is a very interesting subject and many Canadian universities including York University offer this four-year long undergraduate program. I believe Canada is the best place to study environmental science as the country is very careful about maintaining and devising environmental pacts and policies. Canada is one of the members of the Group of 7 that is commonly known as G 7, where the country focuses on climate change as one of its key global and domestic priority. Environmental and ecological problems are one the most growing concerns in the world and in Canada the country is working relentlessly to resolve these issues from growing any further. Hence, the above reason solely makes it the best place to study the subject of my interest. After I finish my study I will come back to Bangladesh and expect to conduct research and formulate new plans for conservation and improvement of environmental conditions, which will help the society, in general, to find and solve complex and profound concerns of the world, for example, different forms of pollution. I would like to specialize as an Environmental sustainability consultant. Bangladesh does not have many universities that offer Environmental Science in undergraduate programs. This subject is comparatively new and has been introduced quite recently. The few universities which do offer this particular are not very much enhanced and up to date. This program has become one of the most demanded programs in our country although it is still in an evolving stage. However, Bangladesh does hold many prospective career opportunities for an environmental science degree graduate. Many possible career outcomes are available which includes: sustainability management, environment and chemical responsibility (ECR), and it is even possible to become a lecturer in many of our domestic universities. There is also the Bangladesh Ministry for the environment, forest and climatic change which also holds possible career paths with the right credentials. If I pursue my education at York University in Canada I believe that it will enhance my employment opportunities and make me a more preferential candidate in my countries job market. My family consists of my father, mother and a younger brother. My father, Sayed Iqbal Hossain is currently occupied as a Government official. My mother, Rafeza Akhter is a housewife. My younger brother is currently a student of fifth grade at Sunnydale School, Dhaka. They are all currently residing here in Bangladesh with citizenship of the current respective country. Furthermore, all my friends and family members live in Bangladesh and it is a very important reason; that after I finish my undergraduate studies in Canada I will come back to my country. | My name is Stayed Braque Hossain, and currently, I am a high school student from Sunnyvale School in Dhaka. I am expected to graduate by August 2019. I have accepted my offer from the Department of Environmental Science at York University, and I am very eager to pursue my undergraduate study there. Furthermore, I was born in the city of Dhaka in 2001. Furthermore, I started my school life at Sunnyvale School from 2004, and completed my Ordinary Level Examinations in 2017 and successively my Advanced Subsidiary Level Examinations in 2018. Furthermore, I will be sitting for my Advanced Level Examinations in May 2019. Canada's quality of education system is renowned in the world. Canada is an ideal country for pursuing higher, not only for the quality education but also for its welcoming and non-discriminatory society. It is one of the leading countries in the world that is considered very safe and suitable for its own citizens and immigrants to live together in a peaceful and disciplined community. York University is one of the top-ranked universities in Canada and its department of Environmental Science is considered one of the best amongst many other universities. Overall the interactive community and stimulating environment of York University is quite well known which is one of the prime reasons why I applied there. Environmental Science program is an interdisciplinary program that integrates core courses in the disciplines of biology, chemistry and geography. It is a very interesting subject and many Canadian universities including York University offer this four-year long undergraduate program. I believe Canada is the best place to study environmental science as the country is very careful about maintaining and devising environmental pacts and policies. Canada is one of the members of the Group of 7 that is commonly known as G 7, where the country focuses on climate change as one of its key global and domestic priority. Environmental and ecological problems are one of the most growing concerns in the world and in Canada the country is working relentlessly to resolve these issues from growing any further. Hence, the above reason solely makes it the best place to study the subject of my interest. After I finish my study I will come back to Bangladesh and expect to conduct research and formulate new plans for conservation and improvement of environmental conditions, which will help the society, in general, to find and solve complex and profound concerns of the world, for example, different forms of pollution. I would like to specialize as an Environmental sustainability consultant. Bangladesh does not have many universities that offer Environmental Science in undergraduate programs. This subject is comparatively new and has been introduced quite recently. The few universities which do offer this particular are not very much enhanced and up to date. This program has become one of the most demanded programs in our country, although it is still in an evolving stage. However, Bangladesh does hold many prospective career opportunities for an environmental science degree graduate. Many possible career outcomes are available which includes: sustainability management, environment and chemical responsibility (ECR), and it is even possible to become a lecturer in many of our domestic universities. There is also the Bangladesh Ministry for the environment, forest and climatic change which also holds possible career paths with the right credentials. If I pursue my education at York University in Canada I believe that it will enhance my employment opportunities and make me a more preferential candidate in my countries job market. My family consists of my father, mother and a younger brother. My father, Stayed Iqbal Hossain is currently occupied as a Government official. My mother, Raffia Akhtar is a housewife. My younger brother is currently a student of fifth grade at Sunnyvale School, Dhaka. They are all currently residing here in Bangladesh with citizenship of the current respective country. Furthermore, all my friends and family members live in Bangladesh, and it is a very important reason; that after I finish my undergraduate studies in Canada I will come back to my country. |
My essay: Hi everyone Today I would like to introduce myself. My name is Amirul. I am 25 years old and I came from an ordinary family. I was born and grew up in my Muar. When I was a child I am naught boy. My parents always scold me. But when I became adult I am shy person because I think I am not perfect enough. Besides that, Why I am here, because I am studying in college and at the same time I am learning public speaking in Mahadhir Academy at Bukit Jalil. Currently, I am studying information security in Kolej University Poly-Tech MARA Kuala Lumpur because I would like to be a programmer. I really love this field because it really challenges me and also we can learn how to secure our data or information from the hacker. That all about me. Thank you. | My essay: Hi everyone Today I would like to introduce myself. My name is Admiral. I am 25 years old, and I came from an ordinary family. I was born and grew up in my Mar. When I was a child I am naught boy. My parents always scold me. But when I became adult I am shy person because I think I am not perfect enough. Besides that, Why I am here, because I am studying in college and at the same time I am learning public speaking in Marathi Academy at Bu kit Jail. Currently, I am studying information security in Role University Poly-Tech MARA Kuala Lumpur because I would like to be a programmer. I really love this field because it really challenges me, and also we can learn how to secure our data or information from the hacker. That all about me. Thank you. |
My goal is to study biology and enter the medical field. I've always liked working with children, getting to know them, and helping them. What I would like to do in life is to become a pediatrician so I can help children be healthy to the best of my abilities. Thank you so much for your help! | My goal is to study biology and enter the medical field. I've always liked working with children, getting to know them, and helping them. What I would like to do in life is to become a pediatrician, so I can help children be healthy to the best of my abilities. Thank you so much for your help! |
Ariana Grande is a person that I have admired more than four years. I started finding some information about her through her song 'Problem'. She was born in June,26th,1993 in U.S. She is not only a singer but also a songwriter and a actress.She began her career in 2008. Thanks to her talent and luck, she has received everyone's love and quickly achieved great success. In addtion, Ariana Grande has striking features that I can not take my eyes off. She is quite tall and really slender. Especially, she is famousfor long thick brown poytail and swarthy complexion. She looks graceful with her deep brown eyes, straight edged nose and full lips. I was impressed by her sexy voice but powerful. She looks so great with good looking and her career. That is why she is my idol and the person I want to be. Thank you for your comments. | Ariana Grande is a person that I have admired more than four years. I started finding some information about her through her song 'Problem'. She was born in June,26th,1993 in U.S. She is not only a singer but also a songwriter and an actress. She began her career in 2008. Thanks to her talent and luck, she has received everyone's love and quickly achieved great success. In addition, Ariana Grande has striking features that I can not take my eyes off. She is quite tall and really slender. Especially, she is famous for long thick brown ponytail and swarthy complexion. She looks graceful with her deep brown eyes, straight edged nose and full lips. I was impressed by her sexy voice but powerful. She looks so great with good-looking and her career. That is why she is my idol and the person I want to be. Thank you for your comments. |
Why I decided to apply for this program? At first I thought it was just a fleeting moment of my youth, I thought that I would forget it the next week, but no. With the pass of the months I realized that this is something I really want, it became my priority and my biggest goal, that is why I started to do a lot of things that can be useful to have a chance to get the scholarship. Now, that I am almost a university student I decided that getting the scholarship is the start of the way I am going to show myself I can do something to change the world, to try to change the days that are waiting for us in the future. The department I'm applying for is linguistics. Why did I choose linguistics? For me is easy to answer: we can't do anything without the communication by speaking or write something. The greatest scientists couldn't make the world know about their discovers if they couldn't communicate it one way or another; so yes, it's true that technology is important these days since we're living in a world that requires it, but how can we express all the knowledge science give us? There's no other way but the language, the same one that is going to be essential part of the future world's development by making a union between nations. Through the language we can create the perfect tool for the next advances. But not everything was that easy to get to the final decision about my career. I have to be honest, the first year of college was the worst in my whole academic life, I did not know what I wanted to do with my life I just thought about leisure and have fun as a 15 years old girl. At the final of that year I realized that the way I was doing it wouldn't take me to the life I wanted in the future, I felt lost, I had no purposes, that took me to think about me, about my capacities... "I got it!" I said. The answer was the languages, people who is close to me always tell me that I have talent to learn them and I can easily become fluent, also I realized that languages has always been my passion since I learned English by my own without an official teacher until the secondary school. I really can do anything related with language without receiving any kind of payment. Little by little I discovered that I want to be a person who belongs to the world and by learning new languages I started to get more information about other cultures different to mine, every time I'm more excited to know about the society as long as the language let me. It was not easy to get to the final decision of apply for the scholarship, I thought a lot about it over and over, I was not sure about taking this big risk. At the end I decided to leave all behind to get my goal, it does not matter the price I have to pay for, I am disposed to leave my house and family for years and even the education that I receive in Mexico to go for something that I know, will be important for the future of both nations since the relationship between these countries is becoming closer. I am aware about the impact of South Korea here in Mexico not only with the contemporary culture but also the traditional culture; more and more people are interested about the country and they are looking for people who are into this topic to show them want they want to know. On my college which is part of UNAM (National Autonomous University of Mexico) there are many cultural workshops about Korea which I didn't heard before when I was a child, I think this is because Korea is expanding a lot because of its amazing technology advances, ideologies, traditions, modern life style and all it has to offer to the entire world. Also as Korea is a country totally different to mine, the way the education is given, amazed me because I am a student with a disciplinate study form since if one thing does not result as I want, I practice and study until is completely good. I think that the way of my study can fits with the Korean study programs, so I believe that I would feel comfortable studying in it's universities. In this process, my family has always been by my side, my relatives and closest friends always cheer me and they show me their interest on support me. My dad always tells me that I don't have to give up and that I have to work even harder to achieve my goals. My mom is a vital inspiration for me; she studied her bachelor degree when she was already a mother and even with the difficulties she had around that process, she graduated with honors being one of the best ones of her generation. Since that day I decided I had to follow her example and go over the hard moments to achieve the dream, the goal, the wish. So, here I am, challenging myself to get the scholarship in South Korea. Respective with my experiences with the country, I had a closer experience with Korea when I started to study the language in a christian church which is powered by Koreans. Many people of around my age come to Mexico every year as voluntaries and we make a cultural exchange, so there was a time when I was really closer to this church and I had the chance of being part of the staff of one of the various camps they make all over the year. In that opportunity the camp was Korea's thematic and I had a direct contact with these culture in particular, I learned about simple things like the convenience store culture until the ancient history of this fascinating country; and the most important part was that I could share my culture with the Korean volunteers and they could share yours with me, even though in that time no one of us couldn't speak the foreign language that well. This last part is what I want to do at a big scale when I finally get the scholarship, my desire is to spread my culture as far as I can, and receive what Korea have to me as well. | Why I decided to apply for this program? At first, I thought it was just a fleeting moment of my youth, I thought that I would forget it the next week, but no. With the pass of the months I realized that this is something I really want, it became my priority and my biggest goal, that is why I started to do a lot of things that can be useful to have a chance to get the scholarship. Now, that I am almost a university student I decided that getting the scholarship is the start of the way I am going to show myself I can do something to change the world, to try to change the days that are waiting for us in the future. The department I'm applying for is linguistics. Why did I choose linguistics? For me is easy to answer: we can't do anything without the communication by speaking or write something. The greatest scientists couldn't make the world know about their discovers if they couldn't communicate it one way or another; so yes, it's true that technology is important these days since we're living in a world that requires it, but how can we express all the knowledge science give us? There's no other way but the language, the same one that is going to be essential part of the future world's development by making a union between nations. Through the language we can create the perfect tool for the next advances. But not everything was that easy to get to the final decision about my career. I have to be honest, the first year of college was the worst in my whole academic life, I did not know what I wanted to do with my life I just thought about leisure and have fun as a 15 years old girl. At the final of that year I realized that the way I was doing it wouldn't take me to the life I wanted in the future, I felt lost, I had no purposes, that took me to think about me, about my capacities... "I got it!" I said. The answer was the languages, people who are close to me always tell me that I have talent to learn them and I can easily become fluent, also I realized that languages has always been my passion since I learned English by my own without an official teacher until the secondary school. I really can do anything related with language without receiving any kind of payment. Little by little I discovered that I want to be a person who belongs to the world and by learning new languages I started to get more information about other cultures different to mine, every time I'm more excited to know about the society as long as the language let me. It was not easy to get to the final decision of apply for the scholarship, I thought a lot about it over and over, I was not sure about taking this big risk. At the end I decided to leave all behind to get my goal, it does not matter the price I have to pay for, I am disposed to leave my house and family for years and even the education that I receive in Mexico to go for something that I know, will be important for the future of both nations since the relationship between these countries is becoming closer. I am aware about the impact of South Korea here in Mexico not only with the contemporary culture but also the traditional culture; more and more people are interested about the country, and they are looking for people who are into this topic to show them want they want to know. On my college which is part of UNAM (National Autonomous University of Mexico) there are many cultural workshops about Korea which I didn't hear before when I was a child, I think this is because Korea is expanding a lot because of its amazing technology advances, ideologies, traditions, modern lifestyle and all it has to offer to the entire world. Also, as Korea is a country totally different to mine, the way the education is given, amazed me because I am a student with a discipline study form since if one thing does not result as I want, I practice and study until is completely good. I think that the way of my study can fit with the Korean study programs, so I believe that I would feel comfortable studying in its universities. In this process, my family has always been by my side, my relatives and closest friends always cheer me, and they show me their interest on support me. My dad always tells me that I don't have to give up and that I have to work even harder to achieve my goals. My mom is a vital inspiration for me; she studied her bachelor degree when she was already a mother and even with the difficulties she had around that process, she graduated with honors being one of the best ones of her generation. Since that day I decided I had to follow her example and go over the hard moments to achieve the dream, the goal, the wish. So, here I am, challenging myself to get the scholarship in South Korea. Respective with my experiences with the country, I had a closer experience with Korea when I started to study the language in a Christian church which is powered by Koreans. Many people of around my age come to Mexico every year as voluntaries, and we make a cultural exchange, so there was a time when I was really closer to this church and I had the chance of being part of the staff of one of the various camps they make all over the year. In that opportunity the camp was Korea's thematic, and I had a direct contact with these culture in particular, I learned about simple things like the convenience store culture until the ancient history of this fascinating country; and the most important part was that I could share my culture with the Korean volunteers, and they could share yours with me, even though in that time no one of us couldn't speak the foreign language that well. This last part is what I want to do at a big scale when I finally get the scholarship, my desire is to spread my culture as far as I can, and receive what Korea have to me as well. |
This is my first post here on EssayForum, and from my research I am excited for the potential positive, or negative, feedback that I may receive. I am look to transfer this upcoming fall and this is a rough draft of the essay that I am looking to submit. My question to the forum would be, do you feel as though I have demonstrated my new found passion and willingness to learn? I want to also communicate that I am hard working and I am excited for what my future holds in this field. What are your biggest take aways from reading this? Thanks so much!!Matt Ever since I was young, I have been curious, intrigued, by the unknown. Growing up, I dreamed of one day be able to create something. To work hands on with something that would make a difference. However, I never knew what that was or how I would get there. Throughout high school I knew that I wanted to make a difference. Because of this, I had thought that I wanted to become a police officer. I assumed that if I studied criminal justice and went on to join a department, that I would be able to make a difference. And so I applied to CCRI, RIC, and of course URI. All but one school, URI, accepted me. Looking back, I can now see the lack of passion for what I wanted to do. And because of that, I believe that not being accepted into URI was one of the best things that could of happened to me. It forced me to reconsider my decisions up until that point. I began to wonder, what should I really be pursuing and what is my true passion. This thought of, what is my passion, has been a question that I reflect upon very often. It is not easy, nor should it be, for one to discover what they truly love. Unfortunately for me, it was staring right at me my entire life. Since I was young and could use tools, up until now having access to my own shop, I have loved to work on things. I have always enjoyed fixing things, and understanding how things work. Within my shop I spend hours upon hours fixing engines, fixing cars, fixing motorcycles, woodworking, and learning. Not everyone reads schematics and blueprints for fun, nor do they read entire books on different designs of bridges, buildings, and airplanes. To me, this is what i enjoy, and this is my passion. The pivotal moment in my life, and for my career has been the opportunity to join the Tiffany & Company manufacturing facility located in Cumberland, Rhode Island. In my initial position I was exposed to CNC machines, or Computer Numerically Controlled machines. Along with this, the exposure to the engineering team demonstrated the type of opportunities there are within the engineering realm. Up until this point, I did not know how to correlate my passion to a career. Since having the exposure to the manufacturing facility and the team of excellent engineers, I have been able to propel my passion even further than what it originally was. Now, not only do I still want to create and understand components, I now want to understand the machines and processes that make those components and systems real. Through this exposure to manufacturing and manufacturing technology, I have been able to identify what career will allow me to pursue my passion. I now plan to become a mechanical engineer, and specialize in manufacturing technologies and processes. Eventually I would like to use my experience and knowledge to become a systems engineer. I believe that this path best correlates with my passion, and would provide the best opportunity for my to fulfill my dream. Over my time at CCRI, I have had the opportunity to work with some inspiring professors that have guided me along my current path. I have enjoyed my time at CCRI and I appreciate all those that have assisted me in my quest. I have completed my course program with great success and I ready for the next chapter in my life. I will of course miss CCRI as it is were I found my passion; however, I am excited as to where this stepping stone will take me next. From my research on where to continue my education, I believe that within Rhode Island, no other school can provide the level of rigorous curriculum, and opportunities to learn and grow than what that of what URI can provide. For this, I am submitting my application to be apart of the 2019 fall transfer class. I would like the opportunity to prove to my future professors at URI, that I can live up to, if not exceed their expectations. I would be honored to be a URI Engineering student, and I can promise you that I will work to the best of my ability to demonstrate my passion to learn. | This is my first post here on EssayForum, and from my research I am excited about the potential positive, or negative, feedback that I may receive. I look to transfer this upcoming fall and this is a rough draft of the essay that I am looking to submit. My question to the forum would be, do you feel as though I have demonstrated my new-found passion and willingness to learn? I want to also communicate that I am hardworking, and I am excited for what my future holds in this field. What are your biggest takeaways from reading this? Thanks so much!! Matt Ever since I was young, I have been curious, intrigued, by the unknown. Growing up, I dreamed of one day be able to create something. To work hands on with something that would make a difference. However, I never knew what that was or how I would get there. Throughout high school I knew that I wanted to make a difference. Because of this, I had thought that I wanted to become a police officer. I assumed that if I studied criminal justice and went on to join a department, that I would be able to make a difference. And so I applied to CCRI, RIC, and of course URI. All but one school, URI, accepted me. Looking back, I can now see the lack of passion for what I wanted to do. And because of that, I believe that not being accepted into URI was one of the best things that could have happened to me. It forced me to reconsider my decisions up until that point. I began to wonder what should I really be pursuing and what is my true passion. This thought of, what is my passion, has been a question that I reflect upon very often. It is not easy, nor should it be, for one to discover what they truly love. Unfortunately for me, it was staring right at me my entire life. Since I was young and could use tools, up until now having access to my own shop, I have loved to work on things. I have always enjoyed fixing things, and understanding how things work. Within my shop I spend hours upon hours fixing engines, fixing cars, fixing motorcycles, woodworking, and learning. Not everyone reads schematics and blueprints for fun, nor do they read entire books on different designs of bridges, buildings, and airplanes. To me, this is what I enjoy, and this is my passion. The pivotal moment in my life, and for my career has been the opportunity to join the Tiffany camp; Company manufacturing facility located in Cumberland, Rhode Island. In my initial position I was exposed to CNC machines, or Computer Numerically Controlled machines. Along with this, the exposure to the engineering team demonstrated the type of opportunities there are within the engineering realm. Up until this point, I did not know how to correlate my passion to a career. Since having the exposure to the manufacturing facility and the team of excellent engineers, I have been able to propel my passion even further than what it originally was. Now, not only do I still want to create and understand components, I now want to understand the machines and processes that make those components and systems real. Through this exposure to manufacturing and manufacturing technology, I have been able to identify what career will allow me to pursue my passion. I now plan to become a mechanical engineer, and specialize in manufacturing technologies and processes. Eventually I would like to use my experience and knowledge to become a systems engineer. I believe that this path best correlates with my passion, and would provide the best opportunity for my to fulfill my dream. Over my time at CCRI, I have had the opportunity to work with some inspiring professors that have guided me along my current path. I have enjoyed my time at CCRI and I appreciate all those that have assisted me in my quest. I have completed my course program with great success and I ready for the next chapter in my life. Furthermore, I will of course miss CCRI as it is where I found my passion; however, I am excited as to where this stepping stone will take me next. From my research on where to continue my education, I believe that within Rhode Island, no other school can provide the level of rigorous curriculum, and opportunities to learn and grow than what that of what URI can provide. For this, I am submitting my application to be a part of the 2019 fall transfer class. I would like the opportunity to prove to my future professors at URI, that I can live up to, if not exceed their expectations. I would be honored to be a URI Engineering student, and I can promise you that I will work to the best of my ability to demonstrate my passion to learn. |
Growing up in my father's business affairs and nostalgic talks between my parents, I am geared to build an innovative decision making system to completely revolutionize current agriculture which exclusively relies on unprofessional government officials with superficial researches. However, frustrated by those mathematical concepts and symbols in game theory papers plus more parameters from hilly environments, I decided to devote myself in mathematics. An old photo caught my attention- mom and dad were leaning together with big smiles while batch transplanting in the paddy. An ugly leech was sucking blood unscrupulously on my mom's naked part of the right leg, while mom was totally unaware. The leech led me to find how hard farm-working is. During one third of my parents' lives, they struggled with farm work to make a living. Now my father is a successful businessman and we moved away from the small mountain village in Anhui Province. But villagers there still live in the way of 1980s for geographical constraints. Among the books my father treasures, The Great Defeat became my initial glimmer to tackle current problems by applying mature game theory from business to Chinese hilly agriculture. This genuine motivation channeled me to seize opportunities to cultivate my skills. In the machine-learning lab, most my peers were Computer Science majors. To be on even footing, I self studied an online course CS231n in Stanford and Python. Under instructions of Dr. Xu about computer vision and natural language processing, I gradually understood basic principles of machine learning and incredibly came up with an idea that what if I collected those strategy data of typical successful agriculture and input them to train a neural network, then practiced on agriculturally primitive areas like my hometown. However, understanding leading models of machine learning like DenseNet requires profound comprehension of topology, function analysis and convex optimization. Besides, abstracting those strategies and mapping them to mathematically usable data can be a challenge. Then the project No-Limited Texas Holdem Poker in the lab endows me a practice of game theory in machine learning, which ultimately enlightens me of how to apply game theory into hilly agriculture. Lacking guidance when reading papers and enough computation resources of Poker AI, I seriously think transferring to Cornell to major in mathematics will provide me more support for Poker AI research and my personal academic goal. Additionally, Cornell's world-beating level in agriculture will crest my idea of applying game theory to Chinese hilly agriculture. With my passion in hilly agriculture and interdisciplinary nature of math, I hope to gain exceptional experience at Cornell. In courses like Dynamic Models in Biology, I will use scripting and graphics environment to construct a biological system model, which can be my prototype of my hilly agriculture project. Also with the course MATH 4260 Numerical Analysis, I will pay more attention to basic techniques of optimization for a nonlinear system, which can be equipped in the neural network part of my project since the neural network is a typical nonlinear system. Besides, if permitted, I expect Nonlinear Dynamics and Chaos course, trying to apply those theories about nonlinear system to agricultural decision-making system. Furthermore, I really appreciate Professor Joseph Y. Halpern for his multidisciplinary career in mathematics, economics and philosophy from whom I will learn across disciplines to meet my agricultural project demands. I plan to apply to be the teaching assistant at his class Decision-Making in Complex Environments to benefit my project. Outside the classroom, I will exchange mathematical ideas with fellow students in Mathematics Club on Thursday evening puzzle sessions. With the academic excellence and abundant resources, I know I can develop a solid math background, while continuing my hilly agriculture project. Any feedbacks or grammar mistakes would be appreciated! That is my second version and I know my essay sucks because it is not attractive and unique at all. | Growing up in my father's business affairs and nostalgic talks between my parents, I am geared to build an innovative decision-making system to completely revolutionize current agriculture which exclusively relies on unprofessional government officials with superficial researches. However, frustrated by those mathematical concepts and symbols in game theory papers plus more parameters from hilly environments, I decided to devote myself in mathematics. An old photo caught my attention-mom and dad were leaning together with big smiles while batch transplanting in the paddy. An ugly leech was sucking blood unscrupulously on my mom's naked part of the right leg, while mom was totally unaware. The leech led me to find how hard farm-working is. During one third of my parents' lives, they struggled with farm work to make a living. Now my father is a successful businessman, and we moved away from the small mountain village in Anhui Province. But villagers there still live in the way of 1980s for geographical constraints. Among the books my father treasures, The Great Defeat became my initial glimmer to tackle current problems by applying mature game theory from business to Chinese hilly agriculture. This genuine motivation channeled me to seize opportunities to cultivate my skills. In the machine-learning lab, most my peers were Computer Science majors. To be on even footing, I self studied an online course CS231n in Stanford and Python. Under instructions of Dr. EU about computer vision and natural language processing, I gradually understood basic principles of machine learning and incredibly came up with an idea that what if I collected those strategy data of typical successful agriculture and input them to train a neural network, then practiced on agriculturally primitive areas like my hometown. However, understanding leading models of machine learning like Densest requires profound comprehension of topology, function analysis and convex optimization. Besides, abstracting those strategies and mapping them to mathematically usable data can be a challenge. Then the project No-Limited Texas Holder Poker in the lab endows me a practice of game theory in machine learning, which ultimately enlightens me of how to apply game theory into hilly agriculture. Lacking guidance when reading papers and enough computation resources of Poker AI, I seriously think transferring to Cornell to major in mathematics will provide me more support for Poker AI research and my personal academic goal. Additionally, Cornell's world-beating level in agriculture will crest my idea of applying game theory to Chinese hilly agriculture. With my passion in hilly agriculture and interdisciplinary nature of math, I hope to gain exceptional experience at Cornell. In courses like Dynamic Models in Biology, I will use scripting and graphics environment to construct a biological system model, which can be my prototype of my hilly agriculture project. Also, with the course MATH 4260 Numerical Analysis, I will pay more attention to basic techniques of optimization for a nonlinear system, which can be equipped in the neural network part of my project since the neural network is a typical nonlinear system. Besides, if permitted, I expect Nonlinear Dynamics and Chaos course, trying to apply those theories about nonlinear system to agricultural decision-making system. Furthermore, I really appreciate Professor Joseph Y. Happen for his multidisciplinary career in mathematics, economics and philosophy from whom I will learn across disciplines to meet my agricultural project demands. I plan to apply to be the teaching assistant at his class Decision-Making in Complex Environments to benefit my project. Outside the classroom, I will exchange mathematical ideas with fellow students in Mathematics Club on Thursday evening puzzle sessions. With the academic excellence and abundant resources, I know I can develop a solid math background, while continuing my hilly agriculture project. Any feedbacks or grammar mistakes would be appreciated! That is my second version and I know my essay sucks because it is not attractive and unique at all. |
Born and raised in a suburban neighborhood in Austin, Texas, and living here my whole life has been pretty generic. No major traumatic events have happened to me, I've had an average childhood. But in a way, that average life shaped me to be my own unaverage person. My home has been fairly loving and warm, I've had rough patches with my parents and some spats with siblings, but what teenager hasn't? I've had a roof over my head and food on the table every night of my life, even though it was more of a struggle to get there at some times. We've had the financial downfalls and stressful periods of a typical middle class family, but we're happy and thankful. My mother and I butt heads quite often, and our relationship is love-hate, but at the end of the day, she's taught me to be the outspoken and stubbornly passionate person I am today. She is the person that can make me happy or sad with just a sentence, the person that can encourage or put me down just with the tone of her voice. She passed her online shopping obsession, loud music loving, lazy Sunday napping, hard-working characteristics on to me. Although we can disagree a lot, at the end of the day, I love her and I know her tough love is in my best interest. My father is beyond caring to everyone he meets and although he can struggle with putting a filter over his thoughts at times, his witty humor, smart comments and loving heart can be seen when looking at me. He's the one to drag our family out on nature hikes at 6 am on a Saturday morning but the first one to suggest staying in to watch a Will Ferrell movie instead of going out. He cheers the loudest at our sporting events and will stand up at any opportunity to coach of get closer to the field, court or course. He can make anyone laugh with his somewhat offensive sense of humor or Daffy Duckesque sneeze. He can be a little strict at times, but I know his tough love is in my best interest. He's taught me how to stand up for what I believe in and stick up for myself. Because of him I know how to be generous and kind to to others but also to know my own worth and what I deserve. We wake up to the smell of biscuits or cinnamon rolls on the weekends and fall asleep to the sound of an awfully enjoyable Live PD marathon. Together, they've taught my siblings and I how to be genuinely good kids. We all make mistakes, it's part of growing up, but I'd like to think that we are genuinely good. I want to take all of the best parts of myself that I got from my parents and put them to work in the best of my ability, making them proud of who I've become. I know I am one of the fortunate ones. My parents are still happily married, and my siblings and I get along for the most part. I have a loving family, I go to a good school, I have great friends, I don't live in a community where I have to worry about my safety, and I'm generally happy, and I am beyond grateful for my vanilla life. | Born and raised in a suburban neighborhood in Austin, Texas, and living here my whole life has been pretty generic. No major traumatic events have happened to me, I've had an average childhood. But in a way, that average life shaped me to be my own average person. My home has been fairly loving and warm, I've had rough patches with my parents and some spats with siblings, but what teenager hasn't? I've had a roof over my head and food on the table every night of my life, even though it was more of a struggle to get there at some times. We've had the financial downfalls and stressful periods of a typical middle class family, but we're happy and thankful. My mother and I butt heads quite often, and our relationship is love-hate, but at the end of the day, she's taught me to be the outspoken and stubbornly passionate person I am today. She is the person that can make me happy or sad with just a sentence, the person that can encourage or put me down just with the tone of her voice. She passed her online shopping obsession, loud music loving, lazy Sunday napping, hard-working characteristics on to me. Although we can disagree a lot, at the end of the day, I love her and I know her tough love is in my best interest. My father is beyond caring to everyone he meets, and although he can struggle with putting a filter over his thoughts at times, his witty humor, smart comments and loving heart can be seen when looking at me. He's the one to drag our family out on nature hikes at 6 am on a Saturday morning but the first one to suggest staying in to watch a Will Ferrell movie instead of going out. He cheers the loudest at our sporting events and will stand up at any opportunity to coach of get closer to the field, court or course. Furthermore, he can make anyone laugh with his somewhat offensive sense of humor or Daffy Burlesque sneeze. Furthermore, he can be a little strict at times, but I know his tough love is in my best interest. Furthermore, he's taught me how to stand up for what I believe in and stick up for myself. Because of him I know how to be generous and kind to others but also to know my own worth and what I deserve. We wake up to the smell of biscuits or cinnamon rolls on the weekends and fall asleep to the sound of an awfully enjoyable Live PD marathon. Together, they've taught my siblings and I how to be genuinely good kids. We all make mistakes, it's part of growing up, but I'd like to think that we are genuinely good. I want to take all the best parts of myself that I got from my parents and put them to work in the best of my ability, making them proud of whom I've become. I know I am one of the fortunate ones. My parents are still happily married, and my siblings and I get along for the most part. I have a loving family, I go to a good school, I have great friends, I don't live in a community where I have to worry about my safety, and I'm generally happy, and I am beyond grateful for my vanilla life. |
Prompt: ALL APPLICANTS: As Georgetown is a diverse community, the Admissions Committee would like to know more about you in your own words. Please submit a brief essay, either personal or creative, which you feel best describes you. If you are transferring from a four-year institution, please include your reasons for transferring. As I hesitantly gazed into the unwavering eyes across from me, I knew something was not right. Overcome with apprehension, I gripped my aunt's hand forcefully trying to suppress the angst that rapidly consumed me. The seriousness of the situation-the profound smell of mundane sterilization-coupled with nonstop panic for the last three days was too much to bear; I was going to give. The nurse's mouth uttered the words I wished I never had to hear, concluding the visual stalemate that seemed endless. "I'm so sorry to tell you that your mom's been pronounced braindead. There is nothing else that we can do. I'm just so sorry." The knot in my stomach grew, followed by a downpour of tears and an outbreak of unrelentless agony. My mother, my confidant, my best friend-- who'd single-handedly ushered my brother and I into adulthood just a week before- would no longer be able to guide me through the crests and troughs of life. Change was imminent, change that would forever alter my life; however, I was able to find solace in League of Legends, one of my favorite games, giving me a newfound appreciation for the simple things in life and its importance in overcoming difficult situations. Life after my mother's death was complicated and demanding. Besides attending high school as a senior, newfound responsibilities stood before me: cooking for myself, getting a job to be financially independent, paying my own bills, and grieving. The absence of my father only made the situation worse. My mental health was rapidly declining, facing a conundrum I had no idea how to fix; the massive weight that rested upon my shoulders seemed too much to overcome- I needed a resolve. One day, after completing an assignment for my senior English class, I mistakenly clicked on the golden-blue "L" logo on my computer's taskbar. The words "League of Legends," a game that once occupied copious amounts of my time, appeared boldly on my screen. I don't know why, but I decided to play a game for "old-time's sake." For 45 minutes, the typical game length, I felt exhilarated. For 45 minutes, I was free from the external burdens that exhausted me; the weight that rested upon my shoulders was lifted for the first time in months. For 45 minutes, I subconsciously battled my fears and insecurities that manifested themselves into the opposing team. For 45 minutes, I was sane, and suppressed the negativity that consumed me. This mindset followed me outside the game, helping me overcome the challenges I faced in everyday life. I started playing League of Legends regularly, which quickly became the outlet for the fear and doubt that was holding me back. I realized that the simple things in life-often overlooked- can have the most prevalent impacts on you, helping you maintain sanity in a world filled with obstacles you cannot control. It is this appreciation for the simple things in life that helps balance me today. It is this appreciation for the simple things that allows me to triumph over tragedy, to overcome life's hurdles, and find happiness-no matter how small-in life's most simple pleasures. It is this perspective on life that I bring to Georgetown University's community as a transfer applicant for Fall 2019. So, why Georgetown? First and foremost, appreciating the small things in life has allowed me to expand my ways of thought and have different perspectives on situations. A biproduct of this appreciation has been my revitalized relationship with God through Catholicism. Being closer to my faith has allowed me to cope with my mother's death; I now believe that my mother, along with God, oversee me and guide me. Attending a Jesuit school such as Georgetown would allow to more easily express and practice my faith by going to Dahlgren Chapel, which serves as the spiritual heart of the Georgetown community. I can connect with other spiritual students at the university who may have been through similar experiences. Furthermore, I am transferring as a government major at Georgetown University. I favor this type of major, as political science is very broad; Georgetown caters the government major to learn about more specific fields of study, such as: American Government, Comparative Government, International Relations, and Political Theory. In addition, due to jointed appointed faculty and shared programming, the government department has strong connections to Georgetown's other major schools associated with politics and policy: the Edmund A. Walsh School of Foreign Service, the McCourt School of Public Policy, and the Georgetown Law Center. This strong bond between schools will enable me to explore my interests and expand my network. Lastly, Georgetown University's location in Washington, DC offers me unparalleled opportunities to get hands-on experience in my desired field; the location keeps my goals and desires of becoming a politician very relevant. Oh, and let's not forget about the Georgetown University Avocado Club (GUAC), that's pretty great. | Prompt: ALL APPLICANTS: As Georgetown is a diverse community, the Admissions Committee would like to know more about you in your own words. Please submit a brief essay, either personal or creative, which you feel best describes you. If you are transferring from a four-year institution, please include your reasons for transferring. As I hesitantly gazed into the unwavering eyes across from me, I knew something was not right. Overcome with apprehension, I gripped my aunt's hand forcefully trying to suppress the angst that rapidly consumed me. The seriousness of the situation-the profound smell of mundane sterilization-coupled with nonstop panic for the last three days was too much to bear; I was going to give. The nurse's mouth uttered the words I wished I never had to hear, concluding the visual stalemate that seemed endless. "I'm so sorry to tell you that your mom's been pronounced brain dead. There is nothing else that we can do. I'm just so sorry." The knot in my stomach grew, followed by a downpour of tears and an outbreak of relentless agony. My mother, my confidant, my best friend-- who'd single-handedly ushered my brother and I into adulthood just a week before-would no longer be able to guide me through the crests and troughs of life. Change was imminent, change that would forever alter my life; however, I was able to find solace in League of Legends, one of my favorite games, giving me a newfound appreciation for the simple things in life and its importance in overcoming difficult situations. Life after my mother's death was complicated and demanding. Besides attending high school as a senior, newfound responsibilities stood before me: cooking for myself, getting a job to be financially independent, paying my own bills, and grieving. The absence of my father only made the situation worse. My mental health was rapidly declining, facing a conundrum I had no idea how to fix; the massive weight that rested upon my shoulders seemed too much to overcome- I needed a resolve. One day, after completing an assignment for my senior English class, I mistakenly clicked on the golden-blue "L" logo on my computer's taskbar. The words "League of Legends," a game that once occupied copious amounts of my time, appeared boldly on my screen. I don't know why, but I decided to play a game for "old-time's sake." For 45 minutes, the typical game length, I felt exhilarated. For 45 minutes, I was free from the external burdens that exhausted me; the weight that rested upon my shoulders was lifted for the first time in months. For 45 minutes, I subconsciously battled my fears and insecurities that manifested themselves into the opposing team. For 45 minutes, I was sane, and suppressed the negativity that consumed me. This mindset followed me outside the game, helping me overcome the challenges I faced in everyday life. I started playing League of Legends regularly, which quickly became the outlet for the fear and doubt that was holding me back. I realized that the simple things in life-often overlooked-can have the most prevalent impacts on you, helping you maintain sanity in a world filled with obstacles you cannot control. It is this appreciation for the simple things in life that helps balance me today. It is this appreciation for the simple things that allows me to triumph over tragedy, to overcome life's hurdles, and find happiness-no matter how small-in life's most simple pleasures. Furthermore, it is this perspective on life that I bring to Georgetown University's community as a transfer applicant for Fall 2019. So, why Georgetown? First and foremost, appreciating the small things in life has allowed me to expand my ways of thought and have different perspectives on situations. A byproduct of this appreciation has been my revitalized relationship with God through Catholicism. Being closer to my faith has allowed me to cope with my mother's death; I now believe that my mother, along with God, oversee me and guide me. Attending a Jesuit school such as Georgetown would allow to more easily express and practice my faith by going to Dahlgren Chapel, which serves as the spiritual heart of the Georgetown community. I can connect with other spiritual students at the university who may have been through similar experiences. Furthermore, I am transferring as a government major at Georgetown University. I favor this type of major, as political science is very broad; Georgetown caters the government major to learn about more specific fields of study, such as: American Government, Comparative Government, International Relations, and Political Theory. In addition, due to jointed appointed faculty and shared programming, the government department has strong connections to Georgetown's other major schools associated with politics and policy: the Edmund A. Walsh School of Foreign Service, the McCourt School of Public Policy, and the Georgetown Law Center. This strong bond between schools will enable me to explore my interests and expand my network. Lastly, Georgetown University's location in Washington, DC offers me unparalleled opportunities to get hands-on experience in my desired field; the location keeps my goals and desires of becoming a politician very relevant. Oh, and let's not forget about the Georgetown University Avocado Club (GUAM), that's pretty great. |
I love traveling. When I travel, not only do I get to experience the different cultures, but I also admire the distinct architectures each country and city holds. Since I was little, I have always wondered why things are the way they are. For example, why do houses in Vietnam normally have multiple stories, while in San Diego, they usually have one story? Why don't many Koreans have beds or dining chairs but they eat and sleep on the floor instead? All of these are designs with purposes behind them. Houses in Vietnam have more than one story because Vietnam is a small country with a high population. Building multiple-story houses reduces the ground space needed while maintaining enough area for normal daily activities. The fact that Koreans have a floor oriented culture is because instead of air heaters, Koreans use heated floors to stay warm in the winter. How much thought was put into the design processes to harmonize the cultural characteristics, economic, societal, religious values, and the environmental challenges never fails to astonish me. It is the mission of designers to create functional, convenient, and inspiring livingworking space while keeping them aesthetically pleasing, and suited to the customer lifestyle. I find such mission to be very intellectually satisfying. The huge impact that design has on our life is another reason why I found my passion for Interior Design. One irrational design can taint the whole living experience. For instance, one time I went to a friend's house for a cooking night, I noticed that it was very hard to see the food color to know whether it was cooked. Immediately, I realized the light on the ceiling was oddly placed which provided very poor lighting to the stove area. After that experience, I took it upon myself to become proficient in Interior Design and use what I learned to design spaces that promise to provide customers with the fullest living experience. I acknowledge the importance of problem-solving when it comes to interior designing. In the first semester at the University of Cincinnati, I got involved in the Design for America organization, where I got to learn about the design process and problem-solving. I had the opportunity to practice and apply my creativity and designing skills to help create impacts in the local community. When I was in high school, I was in the top 10% of over 2,000 students in the National Drawing Examination. The examination was not about drawing the best picture but was using the tools that I was taught to express myself in the form of art. Line weight, color, texture, and perspective were all considered. I believe understanding art and having the creative capabilities of producing art are important skills necessary in becoming an interior designer. Furthermore, having been a team leader in Girl Scouts, I understand how important is leadership to a vast community like university campus. The more I look into it, the more eager I am to pursue my education in Interior Design. The idea of being able to improve one's life with my design is so compelling to me that I know for a fact this is what I want to do. This is my life's dream, and I have what it takes to earn it. As is well established, UC has one of the best Interior Design programs. Participation in such a well-established program would allow me to explore every potential of surrounding spaces in enhancing human's life. I have only scratched the surface of this truly captivating and evolving subject, and I believe UC is the best choice for me to keep nurturing my love for Interior Design. Additionally, in attending UC's Interior Design program, I will contribute my leadership skills and passionate mind to the campus community. By pursuing a degree from UC, I will have a good foundation to move ahead on my path of becoming an interior designer and to fulfill my passion while developing my philosophy of design. | I love traveling. When I travel, not only do I get to experience the different cultures, but I also admire the distinct architectures each country and city holds. Since I was little, I have always wondered why things are the way they are. For example, why do houses in Vietnam normally have multiple stories, while in San Diego, they usually have one story? Why don't many Koreans have beds or dining chairs, but they eat and sleep on the floor instead? All of these are designs with purposes behind them. Houses in Vietnam have more than one story because Vietnam is a small country with a high population. Building multiple-story houses reduces the ground space needed while maintaining enough area for normal daily activities. The fact that Koreans have a floor oriented culture is because instead of air heaters, Koreans use heated floors to stay warm in the winter. How much thought was put into the design processes to harmonize the cultural characteristics, economic, societal, religious values, and the environmental challenges never fails to astonish me. It is the mission of designers to create functional, convenient, and inspiring living working space while keeping them aesthetically pleasing, and suited to the customer lifestyle. I find such mission to be very intellectually satisfying. The huge impact that design has on our life is another reason why I found my passion for Interior Design. One irrational design can taint the whole living experience. For instance, one time I went to a friend's house for a cooking night, I noticed that it was very hard to see the food color to know whether it was cooked. Immediately, I realized the light on the ceiling was oddly placed which provided very poor lighting to the stove area. After that experience, I took it upon myself to become proficient in Interior Design and use what I learned to design spaces that promise to provide customers with the fullest living experience. I acknowledge the importance of problem-solving when it comes to interior designing. In the first semester at the University of Cincinnati, I got involved in the Design for America organization, where I got to learn about the design process and problem-solving. I had the opportunity to practice and apply my creativity and designing skills to help create impacts in the local community. When I was in high school, I was in the top 10% of over 2,000 students in the National Drawing Examination. The examination was not about drawing the best picture but was using the tools that I was taught to express myself in the form of art. Line weight, color, texture, and perspective were all considered. I believe understanding art and having the creative capabilities of producing art are important skills necessary in becoming an interior designer. Furthermore, having been a team leader in Girl Scouts, I understand how important is leadership to a vast community like university campus. The more I look into it, the more eager I am to pursue my education in Interior Design. The idea of being able to improve one's life with my design is so compelling to me that I know for a fact this is what I want to do. This is my life's dream, and I have what it takes to earn it. As is well established, UC has one of the best Interior Design programs. Participation in such a well-established program would allow me to explore every potential of surrounding spaces in enhancing human's life. I have only scratched the surface of this truly captivating and evolving subject, and I believe UC is the best choice for me to keep nurturing my love for Interior Design. Additionally, in attending UC's Interior Design program, I will contribute my leadership skills and passionate mind to the campus community. By pursuing a degree from UC, I will have a good foundation to move ahead on my path of becoming an interior designer and to fulfill my passion while developing my philosophy of design. |
Growing up, I was more of a "go with the flow" type of person. I never really thought about what really mattered in terms of my education, so I became one of those students who never did their homework and instead did well on the tests and quizzes. I'd always been really good with math and science, but when it came to school, I didn't have the motivation to get the grades that I needed. Along with this, I didn't have a plan for my life. Although I had many hobbies growing up, such as playing the guitar and playing football, nothing really stuck with me as much as my love for the weather did. Even back to my early days in elementary school, I was known by my family and friends for obsessively watching The Weather Channel. Even as a kid, I was more up-to-date than my other family members with events such as Hurricanes Ike and Rita before they struck, and after those storms, I helped my parents and my grandfather clean up the damage left behind from them. Although I had this clear passion, however, it wasn't something I considered to be my future until well after high school. Even though I had been accepted into Texas A&M's Galveston campus shortly after high school, I decided to delay my attendance to figure out what I really wanted to do with my future. After being out of school for two years to figure myself out and help with taking care of my mother while she was sick, I signed up for classes at a local community college. Just before the semester had a chance to begin, however, Hurricane Harvey struck and devastated much of the area around Houston. Fortunately, even though the water got extremely close, the street my family's house is on was spared while the surrounding streets weren't as lucky. It shocked me to see the area that I grew up in was under water, with cars abandoned in streets I would drive through every day. On the other side of town, my brother wasn't one of the fortunate people either, especially considering he had just moved in just weeks before. Water filled his first floor, destroying many of his belongings. Because of this, other family members and I joined in to help with tearing out everything from furniture to the walls and floors, which all were damaged by the water. These experiences made me realize that I wanted to help people better protect themselves in case an event like Hurricane Harvey ever happens again. After being accepted into Texas A&M's Galveston campus shortly after high school, I ended up delaying my college attendance, but at the orientation I could feel the school's strong sense of community. I believe that, considering the fact that Texas A&M has one of the most respected meteorology programs in the country, having it coupled with a very strong community is something that's unique to me. Meteorology is something that needs to be studied in order save lives, but if meteorologists don't also understand and know the community impacted, then they won't truly be able to help them. | Growing up, I was more of a "go with the flow" type of person. I never really thought about what really mattered in terms of my education, so I became one of those students who never did their homework and instead did well on the tests and quizzes. I'd always been perfect with math and science, but when it came to school, I didn't have the motivation to get the grades that I needed. Along with this, I didn't have a plan for my life. Although I had many hobbies growing up, such as playing the guitar and playing football, nothing really stuck with me as much as my love for the weather did. Even back to my early days in elementary school, I was known by my family and friends for obsessively watching The Weather Channel. Even as a kid, I was more up-to-date than my other family members with events such as Hurricanes Ike and Rita before they struck, and after those storms, I helped my parents and my grandfather clean up the damage left behind from them. Although I had this clear passion, however, it wasn't something I considered to be my future until well after high school. Even though I had been accepted into Texas Camp;M's Galveston campus shortly after high school, I decided to delay my attendance to figure out what I really wanted to do with my future. After being out of school for two years to figure myself out and help with taking care of my mother while she was sick, I signed up for classes at a local community college. Just before the semester had a chance to begin, however, Hurricane Harvey struck and devastated much of the area around Houston. Fortunately, even though the water got extremely close, the street my family's house is on was spared while the surrounding streets weren't as lucky. It shocked me to see the area that I grew up in was underwater, with cars abandoned in streets I would drive through every day. On the other side of town, my brother wasn't one of the fortunate people either, especially considering he had just moved in just weeks before. Water filled his first floor, destroying many of his belongings. Because of this, other family members and I joined in to help with tearing out everything from furniture to the walls and floors, which all were damaged by the water. These experiences made me realize that I wanted to help people better protect themselves in case an event like Hurricane Harvey ever happens again. After being accepted into Texas Camp;M's Galveston campus shortly after high school, I ended up delaying my college attendance, but at the orientation I could feel the school's strong sense of community. I believe that, considering the fact that Texas Camp;M has one of the most respected meteorology programs in the country, having it coupled with a very strong community is something that's unique to me. Meteorology is something that needs to be studied in order save lives, but if meteorologists don't also understand and know the community impacted, then they won't truly be able to help them. |
Please help me proofread my essay. I would appreciate it if you take the time to read and critique it and correct any error (e.g grammar)! Being bold is what I firmly hold onto. As daunting as some challenges may be, only those who are daring enough to take the first step and try can they make a change. I used to be timid and was afraid of everything. However as I grew up, I slowly built my courage and boldness. I readily faced any obstacle I encounter and tried out many things such as self-learning subjects like forex trading and attempting to start an online business. As they say, fortune favours the bold. I believe opportunities do not just present themselves to anyone but to those who are bold enough to try. It is because I dare to step out of my comfort zone and attempt new challenges would I be able to open doors to new opportunities and success. I firmly believe that only by being bold can you get anywhere. "Continuous effort, not strength or intelligence, is the key to unlocking our potential." -Winston Churchill. This is a quote that has greatly inspired me and another value which I hold strongly to. Perseverance. Since young, I was never a fit nor athletic individual. Sports was never easy for me. However, with a firm resolve, I participated and persevered through strenuous physical training frequently. As a result, I was able to hone my body and my mind to achieve my sports and military achievements today. I believe the bottom line of success is about persevering. It is about picking ourselves up and trying again despite failures. It is about pushing ourselves to go on even when we feel exhausted. It is about pushing through adversity. Obstacles and setbacks are there as challenges to further develop us. Persevering on, they are but stepping stones that will allow me to get closer to my goal each time. ----------------How is it? | Please help me proofread my essay. I would appreciate it if you take the time to read and critique it and correct any error (e.g. grammar)! Being bold is what I firmly hold onto. As daunting as some challenges may be, only those who are daring enough to take the first step and try can they make a change. I used to be timid and was afraid of everything. However, as I grew up, I slowly built my courage and boldness. I readily faced any obstacle I encounter and tried out many things such as self-learning subjects like forex trading and attempting to start an online business. As they say, fortune favors the bold. I believe opportunities do not just present themselves to anyone but to those who are bold enough to try. It is because I dare to step out of my comfort zone and attempt new challenges would I be able to open doors to new opportunities and success. I firmly believe that only by being bold can you get anywhere. "Continuous effort, not strength or intelligence, is the key to unlocking our potential." -Winston Churchill. This is a quote that has greatly inspired me and another value which I hold strongly to. Perseverance. Since young, I was never a fit nor athletic individual. Sports was never easy for me. However, with a firm resolve, I participated and persevered through strenuous physical training frequently. As a result, I was able to hone my body and my mind to achieve my sports and military achievements today. I believe the bottom line of success is about persevering. It is about picking ourselves up and trying again despite failures. It is about pushing ourselves to go on even when we feel exhausted. Furthermore, it is about pushing through adversity. Obstacles and setbacks are there as challenges to further develop us. Persevering on, they are but stepping stones that will allow me to get closer to my goal each time. ----------------How is it? |
Throughout my childhood, I moved to new places and new schools frequently. Never having the joy of growing up with a best friend in the same neighborhood, at first I blamed my parents and regretted my decisions that led up to me moving every two years. But in the end, I realized that this experience was the most powerful card in the deck. Moving to New Zealand at 11 years old, not knowing how to speak English and feeling isolated by strangers' glares were enough to scare me to adjust to reality and into solitary. I had to adapt to their culture and languages in order to stand up for myself and my younger brother. Three months into the jungle, I was able to fight back a child who verbally abused me with racist slurs. Next destination was Canada, where instead of feeling frightened, I elaborated what I've learned in New Zealand to immerse myself into the new community. I grew up with people with broaden perspectives and acceptance towards other cultures, allowing me to apprehend their principles and enriching mine as well. By overcoming language and cultural barriers as a student with English as their second language, I felt proud and confident by the time I came back to Korea. It is because these combination of experiences, that made me who I am today. Going through adversities and learning to stand up for myself helped to endure hardships and adapt to surroundings. This paved my way into becoming a person who is not abided to entitled perspectives, but a person who accepts and adapts to different aspects of culture. By studying Global Studies in Ritsumeikan University, I aim to apply my past experience to support the surrounding environment and widen student's perspectives into becoming global leaders. | Throughout my childhood, I moved to new places and new schools frequently. Never having the joy of growing up with a best friend in the same neighborhood, at first I blamed my parents and regretted my decisions that led up to me moving every two years. But in the end, I realized that this experience was the most powerful card in the deck. Moving to New Zealand at 11 years old, not knowing how to speak English and feeling isolated by strangers' glares were enough to scare me to adjust to reality and into solitary. I had to adapt to their culture and languages in order to stand up for myself and my younger brother. Three months into the jungle, I was able to fight back a child who verbally abused me with racist slurs. Next destination was Canada, where instead of feeling frightened, I elaborated what I've learned in New Zealand to immerse myself into the new community. I grew up with people with broaden perspectives and acceptance towards other cultures, allowing me to apprehend their principles and enriching mine as well. By overcoming language and cultural barriers as a student with English as their second language, I felt proud and confident by the time I came back to Korea. It is because this combination of experiences, that made me who I am today. Going through adversities and learning to stand up for myself helped to endure hardships and adapt to surroundings. This paved my way into becoming a person who is not abided to entitled perspectives, but a person who accepts and adapts to different aspects of culture. By studying Global Studies in Ritsumeikan University, I aim to apply my experience to support the surrounding environment and widen student's perspectives into becoming global leaders. |
If you can, can you please rate my essay on the scale from 0 to 10? Thanks a lot! Alright, I'll paste my essay here. It wasn't long ago when the structure of our world was shaken by the change of manufacturing process from hand production to machinery. The Industrial Revolution in the 19th century gave life to the modern concept of "industry"-a concept that is fundamental to the shape of society we are living in right now. The past century saw an exponential growth in economy and science; the world has been subject to many transition points that have lead up to the current 4th Industrial Revolution, which is similar to Technological Revolution, that will transform the way our future looks like. The modern system of industry that was shaped by the First Industrial Revolution of the 18th century now faces its own fall from grace as the current generation experiences an unprecedented technological capacity, and it is more than just crucial for us to be able to accordingly respond to such rapid changes in order to succeed through the 4th Industrial Revolution. Thus my decision was made: to have Computer Science as my lifelong companion is the only certainly ensured means to be competent for my generation. To elaborate on my reasons for specifically describing Computer Science as "lifelong companion", it all has to do with my personal history. It was when I was three when I developed my first personal connections with this sophisticated machine known as a personal computer. I was born in Seoul, South Korea and was living with my aunt and grandmother at the time. My aunt was someone who the society would perceive as a "nerd". While sitting next to me, she would always watch gaming broadcasts (which was very popular in Korea at the time) on the television and let me watch her play video games on her computer. One day, she let me use her computer, play some children-friendly flash games on the internet. Growing up without my parents and a grandmother who was working almost full-time, this old desktop with a big, bulky CRT monitor always had my full attention. By the time I turned six, I learned how to type. I spent the first half of my elementary school life in Korea; Korean elementary schools offer a lot of paid extracurricular club activities to choose from; I joined the computer club in the first year of elementary school. I recall impressing my teachers by showing them how fast I can type, winning the first place in a typing competition held by the school, surpassing all the sixth and fifth graders; that's how I was invited to the club. In the club, I would learn how to handle certain software such as Microsoft Office, including PowerPoint, Word and Excel. By the time I finished the first grade, I became the youngest person in South Korea at the time to have acquired in an official qualification called Information Technology Qualification for Microsoft Word and PowerPoint. Such experiences in my childhood serve as a foundation for who I am as a person in my adolescence. When I turned sixteen, in the tenth grade of high school, I worked my first job during the summer holidays. I worked almost full-time, eight hours a day and five to six days every week. Some say that, what you buy with your first ever pay check can tell much about your personality; I decided to buy PC parts and build my own computer. It wasn't the easiest task I had to deal with, but the task proved to me that I genuinely find joy in learning about the complications of this machine. During the same high school year, I was briefly taught how to code in JavaScript and I took pride in the fact that I was one of the few students who were successful at it. However, there is one thing I think is unfortunate: The school I'm going to didn't offer IB Computer Science subject, so my very last academic experience with the subject is stuck at the tenth grade. I am seeking opportunities to reintroduce my life to the field of Computer Science by applying to this program. As said above in the introduction of the essay, I believe that in the 21th century, at this very moment, the demand for computer engineers is projected to grow at an exponentially increasing rate, just like the rate at which science has advanced in the last one hundred years. The question arises why it has to be Waseda University's School of Fundamental Science and Engineering. As far as my knowledge goes, Waseda is one of the few educational institutions in Japan to have the capability to correctly evaluate the versatility of the lingua franca of our age that is English; that is not only limited to the English-based program of the school; the Japanese students that are not a part of the English-based program are also required to be trained in English, to become active scholarly participants in the global English-speaking academia. Therefore, in prospect of my future career plans, the fact that I have studied in Waseda University's Computer Science and Communications Engineering program will serve as a great opportunity for me to demonstrate to my employers that I am readily educated to be a perfect fit for the globalised labour market. At Waseda's School of Fundamental Science and Engineering, I aspire to expand the knowledge in Computer Science, adapt to the international model of the future of the ideal workforce and eventually pursue a career in the computer engineering field and contribute to the vanguard of the technological revolution. The End | If you can, can you please rate my essay on the scale from 0 to 10? Thanks a lot! Alright, I'll paste my essay here. It wasn't long ago when the structure of our world was shaken by the change of manufacturing process from hand production to machinery. The Industrial Revolution in the 19th century gave life to the modern concept of "industry"-a concept that is fundamental to the shape of society we are living in right now. The past century saw an exponential growth in economy and science; the world has been subject to many transition points that have lead up to the current 4th Industrial Revolution, which is similar to Technological Revolution, that will transform the way our future looks like. The modern system of industry that was shaped by the First Industrial Revolution of the 18th century now faces its own fall from grace as the current generation experiences an unprecedented technological capacity, and it is more than just crucial for us to be able to accordingly respond to such rapid changes in order to succeed through the 4th Industrial Revolution. Thus, my decision was made: to have Computer Science as my lifelong companion is the only certainly ensured means to be competent for my generation. To elaborate on my reasons for specifically describing Computer Science as "lifelong companion", it all has to do with my personal history. It was when I was three when I developed my first personal connections with this sophisticated machine known as a personal computer. I was born in Seoul, South Korea and was living with my aunt and grandmother at the time. My aunt was someone who the society would perceive as a "nerd". While sitting next to me, she would always watch gaming broadcasts (which was very popular in Korea at the time) on the television and let me watch her play video games on her computer. One day, she let me use her computer, play some children-friendly flash games on the internet. Growing up without my parents and a grandmother who was working almost full-time, this old desktop with a big, bulky CRT monitor always had my full attention. By the time I turned six, I learned how to type. I spent the first half of my elementary school life in Korea; Korean elementary schools offer a lot of paid extracurricular club activities to choose from; I joined the computer club in the first year of elementary school. I recall impressing my teachers by showing them how fast I can type, winning the first place in a typing competition held by the school, surpassing all the sixth and fifth graders; that's how I was invited to the club. In the club, I would learn how to handle certain software such as Microsoft Office, including PowerPoint, Word and Excel. By the time I finished the first grade, I became the youngest person in South Korea at the time to have acquired in an official qualification called Information Technology Qualification for Microsoft Word and PowerPoint. Such experiences in my childhood serve as a foundation for who I am as a person in my adolescence. When I turned sixteen, in the tenth grade of high school, I worked my first job during the summer holidays. I worked almost full-time, eight hours a day and five to six days every week. Some say that, what you buy with your first ever pay check can tell much about your personality; I decided to buy PC parts and build my own computer. It wasn't the easiest task I had to deal with, but the task proved to me that I genuinely find joy in learning about the complications of this machine. During the same high school year, I was briefly taught how to code in JavaScript and I took pride in the fact that I was one of the few students who were successful at it. However, there is one thing I think is unfortunate: The school I'm going to don't offer IB Computer Science subject, so my very last academic experience with the subject is stuck at the tenth grade. I am seeking opportunities to reintroduce my life to the field of Computer Science by applying to this program. As said above in the introduction of the essay, I believe that in the 21st century, at this very moment, the demand for computer engineers is projected to grow at an exponentially increasing rate, just like the rate at which science has advanced in the last one hundred years. The question arises why it has to be Based University's School of Fundamental Science and Engineering. As far as my knowledge goes, Based is one of the few educational institutions in Japan to have the capability to correctly evaluate the versatility of the lingua franca of our age that is English; that is not only limited to the English-based program of the school; the Japanese students that are not a part of the English-based program are also required to be trained in English, to become active scholarly participants in the global English-speaking academia. Therefore, in prospect of my future career plans, the fact that I have studied in Based University's Computer Science and Communications Engineering program will serve as a great opportunity for me to demonstrate to my employers that I am readily educated to be a perfect fit for the globalized labor market. At Based's School of Fundamental Science and Engineering, I aspire to expand the knowledge in Computer Science, adapt to the international model of the future of the ideal workforce and eventually pursue a career in the computer engineering field and contribute to the vanguard of the technological revolution. The End |
Looking out the window and seeing New York City's skyline, casually strolling through buildings belonging to some of the world's biggest companies, and receiving a world class education is what a New York University student experiences on a daily basis. New York University's seamless integration with one of the world's largest and most famous cities is what makes it so unique. The city's lively nature will suit my restless nature to experiment and invent. As an innovator, I couldn't ask for a better place to continue my education. Computer science is my main academic interest, but liberal arts courses are also crucial towards better understanding the world. NYU's College of Arts and Sciences gives me the opportunity to study both. Computer science students are also able to take CS-related minor courses at Tandon School of Engineering. Game Engineering is a course I would love to take, and taking it off the main campus allows me to experience more of New York as well. But the most attractive part about New York University's Computer Science program is the Accelerated Bachelor's-Master's Program. This challenges students to do their absolute best in their classes and rewards them with a Master's Degree that could take them a long way in the future. The reason this program suits me so well is because I graduated high school earlier than most students. The additional year would not set me back and I will have graduated with a higher degree than others would at the same age. New York University offers its students a unique and valuable educational experience with its multiple schools and wide range of campuses. The chance to study what I love in addition to other liberal arts courses in an immersive environment are what make it the perfect place to continue my education. | Looking out the window and seeing New York City's skyline, casually strolling through buildings belonging to some of the world's biggest companies, and receiving a world-class education is what a New York University student experiences on a daily basis. New York University's seamless integration with one of the world's largest and most famous cities is what makes it so unique. The city's lively nature will suit my restless nature to experiment and invent. As an innovator, I couldn't ask for a better place to continue my education. Computer science is my main academic interest, but liberal arts courses are also crucial towards better understanding the world. NYU's College of Arts and Sciences gives me the opportunity to study both. Computer science students are also able to take CS-related minor courses at Tendon School of Engineering. Game Engineering is a course I would love to take, and taking it off the main campus allows me to experience more of New York as well. But the most attractive part about New York University's Computer Science program is the Accelerated Bachelor's-Master's Program. This challenges students to do their absolute best in their classes and rewards them with a Master's Degree that could take them a long way in the future. The reason this program suits me so well is that I graduated from high school earlier than most students. The additional year would not set me back, and I will have graduated with a higher degree than others would at the same age. New York University offers its students a unique and valuable educational experience with its multiple schools and wide range of campuses. The chance to study what I love in addition to other liberal arts courses in an immersive environment are what make it the perfect place to continue my education. |
When I graduated from high school, I traveled with my friends in Japan and became interested in foreign culture in other countries. In order to understand the culture of the country, I was taught myself English and Japanese. After I spent one year as an exchange student in the United States, I got AL on Opic test which is the highest rank. In addition, I made international students friends from all over the world, not only Americans but also Japanese, Europian, and Aussie, as my best friends. Based on these international capabilities, I will demonstrate my language skills and international sense while attending overseas branches as a vital employee of E company, a global company. I am good at communicating and have strengths in synthesizing and analyzing the opinions of many people. My advantage is that I am able to listen to everyone's speech in a flexible posture. When I was studying as an exchange student in the United States in 2017, I had first place in project class by studying how to effectively relocate the public bicycle program on a team with 6 friends who were randomly selected. We have assembled different opinions from our team members and users, and we have fully grasped the requirements of our customers through actual usage analysis and surveys. The ability to communicate smoothly is essential for the technical support work of the company. In 2016, I was interested in environmental issues, and I have created a game that teaches children how to dispose of recycled garbage. In the process of creating a game with team members, there was a dispute over how to play the game in terms of giving experience in case of failure. Based on the results of actual surveys of the users and the needs and desires of the customers, we were able to discuss with our team members and make the best conclusions. As we worked on a team project for a common goal, we naturally felt the importance of teamwork and learned how to make it more fun with our team members. At C company, my job was solving problems with our customers' devices and teaching them how to use new devices. I taught students how to use simple training materials for new students who are not familiar with using the projectors, scanners and smart classroom equipment at school, and helped solve problems when there was a problem with the device. and also I worked for Rectworks for 6 month to verifying and correcting mobile games for children and translated English, Japanese and many languages. We processed the error correction smoothly and swiftly with unique meticulousness and engineering knowledge, and made appropriate translation based on communication ability. E company is a leader in the cyclical economy for sustainable management. In particular, we introduced paper recycling system called paper wrap, which recycles paper without using water, and inkjet multifunction printer, which consumes less energy and can reduce waste. I am interested in environmental issues, and if I work for e company, we will realize the ultimate goals of life together. | When I graduated from high school, I traveled with my friends in Japan and became interested in foreign culture in other countries. In order to understand the culture of the country, I was taught myself English and Japanese. After I spent one year as an exchange student in the United States, I got AL on Epic test which is the highest rank. In addition, I made international students friends from all over the world, not only Americans but also Japanese, European, and Aussie, as my best friends. Based on these international capabilities, I will demonstrate my language skills and international sense while attending overseas branches as a vital employee of E company, a global company. I am good at communicating and have strengths in synthesizing and analyzing the opinions of many people. My advantage is that I am able to listen to everyone's speech in a flexible posture. When I was studying as an exchange student in the United States in 2017, I had first place in project class by studying how to effectively relocate the public bicycle program on a team with 6 friends who were randomly selected. We have assembled different opinions from our team members and users, and we have fully grasped the requirements of our customers through actual usage analysis and surveys. The ability to communicate smoothly is essential for the technical support work of the company. In 2016, I was interested in environmental issues, and I have created a game that teaches children how to dispose of recycled garbage. In the process of creating a game with team members, there was a dispute over how to play the game in terms of giving experience in case of failure. Based on the results of actual surveys of the users and the needs and desires of the customers, we were able to discuss with our team members and make the best conclusions. As we worked on a team project for a common goal, we naturally felt the importance of teamwork and learned how to make it more fun with our team members. At C company, my job was solving problems with our customers' devices and teaching them how to use new devices. I taught students how to use simple training materials for new students who are not familiar with using the projectors, scanners and smart classroom equipment at school, and helped solve problems when there was a problem with the device. And also I worked for Networks for 6 months to verifying and correcting mobile games for children and translated English, Japanese and many languages. We processed the error correction smoothly and swiftly with unique meticulousness and engineering knowledge, and made appropriate translation based on communication ability. E company is a leader in the cyclical economy for sustainable management. In particular, we introduced paper recycling system called paper wrap, which recycles paper without using water, and ink jet multifunction printer, which consumes less energy and can reduce waste. I am interested in environmental issues, and if I work for e company, we will realize the ultimate goals of life together. |
A circumstance that challenged me was social anxiety. And not your garden variety social anxiety, mind you, but rather intense crippling anxiety. Anxiety where I could barely talk to people and I avoided attention at all cost. As a result of this, my social and academic life suffered. I avoided talking with teachers and classmates, extracurricular activities, and at times even avoided school itself. These problems only grew and came to a head in grade 11 when my anxiety reached new peaks. My attendance and grades suffered like never before and I knew it was time to get help. Over the next two years, I received therapy and worked hard to end my anxiety. Slowly, social skills that I would have never thought possible became easy. I began to make eye contact, speak clearly and confidently, and even mastered my fear of public speaking. Nowadays, my social anxiety is gone and while I still do occasionally feel anxious, it no longer hinders me like it once did. I now love to meet people and have even been asked how I stay so calm, words I never thought I'd hear. All of these newfound skills are part of the person and student that I aspire to be. Someone who is never afraid to spark up a conversation, try new things, and will never again let their fear get in the way of what they want. I feel like I am on track to become this person and in a way, my social anxiety may have helped me get there. Feeling cheated out of previous experiences due to anxiety makes me want to make the most of future ones. Perhaps more than the average person, I understand the value of seizing an opportunity and the pain of missing out on one. | A circumstance that challenged me was social anxiety. And not your garden variety social anxiety, mind you, but rather intense crippling anxiety. Anxiety where I could barely talk to people and I avoided attention at all cost. As a result of this, my social and academic life suffered. I avoided talking with teachers and classmates, extracurricular activities, and at times even avoided school itself. These problems only grew and came to a head in grade 11 when my anxiety reached new peaks. My attendance and grades suffered like never before, and I knew it was time to get help. Over the next two years, I received therapy and worked hard to end my anxiety. Slowly, social skills that I would have never thought possible became easy. I began to make eye contact, speak clearly and confidently, and even mastered my fear of public speaking. Nowadays, my social anxiety is gone and while I still do occasionally feel anxious, it no longer hinders me like it once did. I now love to meet people and have even been asked how I stay so calm, words I never thought I'd hear. All of these newfound skills are part of the person and student that I aspire to be. Someone who is never afraid to spark up a conversation, try new things, and will never again let their fear get in the way of what they want. I feel like I am on track to become this person and in a way, my social anxiety may have helped me get there. Feeling cheated out of previous experiences due to anxiety makes me want to make the most of future ones. Perhaps more than the average person, I understand the value of seizing an opportunity and the pain of missing out on one. |
As someone that comes from a family who travels often, I have always been one for an adventure. I have an undying passion for traveling and learning about different places around the world. I have traveled around North America, and parts of Europe, but I would like to broaden my perspective of the world and travel and learn about more countries. One of my favorite things about traveling is that there is always something you can learn about a new place. Semester at Sea would be one of the best opportunities to do so. Living and learning around the world would give me a better understanding about it and what it holds, rather than in the typical college classroom learning through books and a screen. This voyage with Semester at Sea will enhance my global perspective by giving me the hands-on experience in other various countries that I would carry with me for the rest of my life. During my time in this world, I want to experience as much of it as possible. By embarking on Semester at Sea, it will help push my world traveling journey. One country in particular that i am really interesting in traveling to is Japan. For years I have been watching videos of people who travel around the world and experience these different countries, people, and cultures. The one country I have seen them go to that striked my interest the most is Japan. The Japanese people, language, art, and food is something I have never really gotten to experience here. For me, traveling doubles as a creative outlet as well as just a hobby. It brings out a whole new perspective to things, like how much other countries can differ from mine. Photojournalism and communication arts is something that I am interesting in getting into and with this study abroad program I believe I will get a start in moving forward with that. I like to document my travels using photos and videos so I can look back at them any time, and use them as encouragement to travel more. But getting the opportunity to travel to all of these countries would help expand my knowledge on different cultures that i do not get to experience at home. | As someone that comes from a family who often travels, I have always been one for an adventure. I have an undying passion for traveling and learning about different places around the world. I have traveled around North America, and parts of Europe, but I would like to broaden my perspective of the world and travel and learn about more countries. One of my favorite things about traveling is that there is always something you can learn about a new place. Semester at Sea would be one of the best opportunities to do so. Living and learning around the world would give me a better understanding about it and what it holds, rather than in the typical college classroom learning through books and a screen. This voyage with Semester at Sea will enhance my global perspective by giving me the hands-on experience in other various countries that I would carry with me for the rest of my life. During my time in this world, I want to experience as much of it as possible. By embarking on Semester at Sea, it will help push my world traveling journey. One country in particular that I am really interested in traveling to is Japan. For years, I have been watching videos of people who travel around the world and experience these different countries, people, and cultures. The one country I have seen them go to that struck my interest the most is Japan. The Japanese people, language, art, and food is something I have never really gotten to experience here. For me, traveling doubles as a creative outlet as well as just a hobby. It brings out a whole new perspective to things, like how many other countries can differ from mine. Photojournalism and communication arts is something that I am interested in getting into and with this study abroad program I believe I will get a start in moving forward with that. I like to document my travels using photos and videos, so I can look back at them any time, and use them as encouragement to travel more. But getting the opportunity to travel to all of these countries would help expand my knowledge on different cultures that I do not get to experience at home. |
Academic History-What are the specific reasons you wish to leave your most recent collegeuniversity andor program of study?Your Major andor Career Goals-How will the UW help you attain your academic, career, andor personal goals?Cultural Understanding I did fairly great during my time in Whatcom Community College. I had a steady grade of As and Bs from Fall 2017 to Summer 2018. On Fall 2018, my grade had noticeably dropped compared to my other grades. Around this time, I was taking a big step towards adulthood; I had to move to an apartment that is closer to the school, and I had to live independently. The process was very hard for me; I had to figure out how to balance studying and being able to provide and manage for myself. I was able to overcome this struggle by the end, but it cost me my grade during that quarter. The reason why I'm leaving my current college is because I am on the process of completing my Associate's in Arts & Science. Additionally, I am also leaving to work towards my dreams of studying psychology in the University of Washington. Therefore by getting accepted there, the university would already be helping me attain both my personal and academic goals. In addition to aspiring to get accepted into the University of Washington, this university also has the best psychology program in the Washington state. By enrolling there, I would get a bachelor's degree in psychology, and then it would allow me to follow my career path. I knew that I wanted to pursue psychology as soon as I understood that word, which is around middle school. For the longest time, I like to observe people's behavior and how it affects other people. It was to the point that even the smallest gesture or expression would prompt me to determine what the person's feelings were like in actuality, or sometimes why the person acts that way. When I discovered a subject for it, I immediately set my heart on it. I started reading books and watching videos about it. My family fully supported me when they saw my keen interest, and told me to take on that major when I go to college in the US. In the college I am attending in, psychology is my strongest subject, and they hold my strongest grades. For that reason, I am sure that I am prepared to enter this major. After getting the bachelor's degree, I intend to use my degree and work for about a year. I have yet to choose what specific job I would want to work in, but I know that I want to work in the psychology field. The plan after working is rather uncertain as of right now, but if I am still interested in it, I'll hopefully apply for medical school. I grew up with a lot of different cultures. Three years after I was born in the United States, my family moved to Switzerland because of a work opportunity that my father had received. My family spent another three to four years in Switzerland before moving to our home country; Indonesia. For the larger part of my life, I grew up in said country, so my personal culture is heavily based on it as well. I lived in a religious household in Indonesia, and have a big family who valued traditional practices. It was the little things from each of the country that I lived in that eventually stuck with me as I grew up, and therefore defined my personal culture. For example, my first language is English. I spoke that language before I even got to learn Swiss-German and Indonesian, and that is because my mother taught my first words while we lived in the United States. From living in Switzerland, I always say "guten morgen" (good morning in German) every morning to my family because of our routine back when we still lived there. Lastly, how I generally act, how I communicate, and how I perceive things in life are deeply influenced by the Indonesian culture. Being brought up alongside different cultures made me get a better understanding of the world. It made me become a more open-minded, adaptable, and empathetic person. We live in a society, a big one in fact, with each of every person coming from different backgrounds, holding different values andor style. I easily understood that my culture alone is not superior, or the "center of the universe" as one would unconsciously see it as. I always hold on to the belief that with the uniqueness every culture has, they are all equally valuable. At the same time, being brought up by many cultures has made me value my ethnic culture even more, especially after coming back to the United States. It gives me a sense of belonging and identity, even in the midst of being a part of a society as a minority. That being said, even if I had a better understanding of the world and the people around the globe, I still want to learn more. University of Washington is one of the few universities that I know values diversity, and has a wide range of students from different origins that tell different stories and experiences. I hope to be a part of this university after I finish my associate's degree in Whatcom Community College because, again, being accepted into the campus would accomplish my academic and personal goal. Not only will it make myself proud, but it would make my family back in Indonesia proud as well. | Academic History-What are the specific reasons you wish to leave your most recent college university ardor program of study? Your Major ardor Career Goals-How will the UW help you attain your academic, career, ardor personal goals? Cultural Understanding I did fairly great during my time in What com Community College. I had a steady grade of As and BS from Fall 2017 to Summer 2018. On Fall 2018, my grade had noticeably dropped compared to my other grades. Around this time, I was taking a big step towards adulthood; I had to move to an apartment that is closer to the school, and I had to live independently. The process was very hard for me; I had to figure out how to balance studying and being able to provide and manage for myself. I was able to overcome this struggle by the end, but it cost me my grade during that quarter. The reason why I'm leaving my current college is because I am on the process of completing my Associate's in Arts camp; Science. Additionally, I am also leaving to work towards my dreams of studying psychology in the University of Washington. Therefore, by getting accepted there, the university would already be helping me attain both my personal and academic goals. In addition to aspiring to get accepted into the University of Washington, this university also has the best psychology program in the Washington state. By enrolling there, I would get a bachelor's degree in psychology, and then it would allow me to follow my career path. I knew that I wanted to pursue psychology as soon as I understood that word, which is around middle school. For the longest time, I like to observe people's behavior and how it affects other people. It was to the point that even the smallest gesture or expression would prompt me to determine what the person's feelings were like in actuality, or sometimes why the person acts that way. When I discovered a subject for it, I immediately set my heart on it. I started reading books and watching videos about it. My family fully supported me when they saw my keen interest, and told me to take on that major when I go to college in the US. In the college I am attending in, psychology is my strongest subject, and they hold my strongest grades. For that reason, I am sure that I am prepared to enter this major. After getting the bachelor's degree, I intend to use my degree and work for about a year. I have yet to choose what specific job I would want to work in, but I know that I want to work in the psychology field. The plan after working is rather uncertain as of right now, but if I am still interested in it, I'll hopefully apply for medical school. I grew up with a lot of different cultures. Three years after I was born in the United States, my family moved to Switzerland because of a work opportunity that my father had received. My family spent another three to four years in Switzerland before moving to our home country; Indonesia. For the larger part of my life, I grew up in said country, so my personal culture is heavily based on it as well. I lived in a religious household in Indonesia, and have a big family who valued traditional practices. It was the little things from each of the country that I lived in that eventually stuck with me as I grew up, and therefore defined my personal culture. For example, my first language is English. I spoke that language before I even got to learn Swiss-German and Indonesian, and that is because my mother taught my first words while we lived in the United States. From living in Switzerland, I always say "gluten Morgan" (good morning in German) every morning to my family because of our routine back when we still lived there. Lastly, how I generally act, how I communicate, and how I perceive things in life are deeply influenced by the Indonesian culture. Being brought up alongside different cultures made me get a better understanding of the world. It made me become a more open-minded, adaptable, and empathetic person. We live in a society, a big one in fact, with each of every person coming from different backgrounds, holding different values ardor style. I easily understood that my culture alone is not superior, or the "center of the universe" as one would unconsciously see it as. I always hold on to the belief that with the uniqueness every culture has, they are all equally valuable. At the same time, being brought up by many cultures has made me value my ethnic culture even more, especially after coming back to the United States. It gives me a sense of belonging and identity, even in the midst of being a part of a society as a minority. That being said, even if I had a better understanding of the world and the people around the globe, I still want to learn more. University of Washington is one of the few universities that I know values diversity, and has a wide range of students from different origins that tell different stories and experiences. I hope to be a part of this university after I finish my associate's degree in What com Community College because, again, being accepted into the campus would accomplish my academic and personal goal. Not only will it make myself proud, but it would make my family back in Indonesia proud as well. |
When I was fifteen, I was employed part-time as a grocery clerk at No Frills. I was warned about how challenging it would be considering my adolescent age and inexperience with the workplace, especially one that was physically demanding. I was aware I was at a disadvantage compared to my coworkers, however I continued to pursue my goal and decided to work hard to compensate for my shortcomings. In spite of my efforts, the position immediately proved challenging. I worked in the frozen foods and meatdeli departments at No Frills, most of my shifts did not align with my department manager's shifts and for the majority of my employment I was the only grocery clerk in my department. As a result I had to bear the responsibility of the whole department, I was put into situations where I was required to unpack and organize the stock in the backroom and the floor whilst assisting customers. This position tremendous stress on me because I had to meet deadlines that came with real consequences. These responsibilities challenged me in ways, prior to this position, I have never experienced before. However, perseverance was key, as I constantly worked at my weaknesses and built them up into strengths. Ultimately, I came out of my job with endless transferable skills in hand. In grade twelve I am now able to prioritize my academics because I have saved a sufficient amount of money ahead of time. Despite the stress and difficulty of having a job, it was very important because it taught me how to balance and prioritize responsibilities and deal with stressful situations. As a result of my employment, I learned critical skills that can be used in an academic space along with the workplace very early in life that I can now use effectively for the rest of my life. | When I was fifteen, I was employed part-time as a grocery clerk at No Frills. I was warned about how challenging it would be considering my adolescent age and inexperience with the workplace, especially one that was physically demanding. I was aware I was at a disadvantage compared to my coworkers, however I continued to pursue my goal and decided to work hard to compensate for my shortcomings. In spite of my efforts, the position immediately proved challenging. I worked in the frozen foods and meat deli departments at No Frills, most of my shifts did not align with my department manager's shifts and for the majority of my employment I was the only grocery clerk in my department. As a result I had to bear the responsibility of the whole department, I was put into situations where I was required to unpack and organize the stock in the backroom and the floor whilst assisting customers. This position tremendous stress on me because I had to meet deadlines that came with real consequences. These responsibilities challenged me in ways, prior to this position, I have never experienced before. However, perseverance was key, as I constantly worked at my weaknesses and built them up into strengths. Ultimately, I came out of my job with endless transferable skills in hand. In grade twelve I am now able to prioritize my academics because I have saved a sufficient amount of money ahead of time. Despite the stress and difficulty of having a job, it was very important because it taught me how to balance and prioritize responsibilities and deal with stressful situations. As a result of my employment, I learned critical skills that can be used in an academic space along with the workplace very early in life that I can now use effectively for the rest of my life. |
Washington's resolve, Marx's shunned critique, the vision of Dr. King, it all lies in the past, waiting to be re-lived. Yet the notion of the future-of the promise of foresight, wealth, and knowledge-yearns to be exploited. So then why do I once again find myself in 2017? I abstain from the temptations of a rich human history in favor a near past, but not in an effort to change it, but to live it once more. I travel to 2017 to see and feel the love, pain, and loss of it all, just one more time. I park my car fixed between two warehouses scarred with rust and decay. I know this farm well, it's where I spent almost every morning of the summer of 2017, working for a man I have come to know well, but at this moment in time, have yet to meet. Vernon May sits atop a damp stump, a mountain of logs and wood to his back. I make my way into his kingdom of lumber, as he greets me with a warm smile hidden behind a thick grey beard. Introducing myself to him for the first, and what is now the second time, I refrain from embracing him, instead sticking my hand out to be shook as a stranger, and not a friend. Mr. May, or Vernon as he will insist I call him in the months to come, walks me over to a wood splitter caked in sawdust and grease. Pretending not to know how it works, I let Vernon explain how it splits the unprocessed wood before us, before turning and leaving me to work. In the past, I feared doing something wrong, breaking something so expensive, but as a tourist of my own past, I know Vernon put his trust in me, believed in me, from the moment we met. I shouldn't know how he deeply he cares for everyone in his life, that he wants nothing more than to see me succeed, but standing there alone on his farm, I'm grateful I do. Five weeks later, a light rain beats down on my exposed skin. I could've dressed for the weather, like everything else, I knew it would rain today. But in my reliving of 2017, I need everything to be the same-to feel the same. Two weeks ago, Vernon and I used his truck to move the splitter to his backyard, as he sung along to Disturbed's cover of The Sound of Silence, teasing his time as a rock singer. I hesitantly lock the lever of the splitter upward, knowing it will cause the hydraulic line to burst and spew boiling fluid, just as it had done before. Vernon drops his attention from the pavilion he is constructing, racing up to me in an instant. As I knew he would, he ignores the damage to the splitter, ensuring I wasn't burned. He does not scorn me, he does not fire me, he simply puts his arm around me, thanking God for keeping me safe. It is this moment and so many like it that have brought me back to 2017, eager to feel the compassion, love, and friendship of such a great man. However, it is also these moments that tear me apart as I pull out of Vernon's driveway three weeks later having collected my final paycheck. I want to burst through the screen door of Vernon's secluded cabin, pleading him to stay home on May 7th, 2018, but I know that I can't. Vernon will go to work in his blue sunglasses and faded hat, and he will tragically and suddenly pass away in an accident on his way home. I can't change this, I can't fight this, so I drive away, finding solace in the fact that I got to hear him sing, meet his wife and children, and laugh with him, just one last time. | Washington's resolve, Marx's shunned critique, the vision of Dr. King, it all lies in the past, waiting to be re-lived. Yet the notion of the future-of the promise of foresight, wealth, and knowledge-yearns to be exploited. So then why do I once again find myself in 2017? I abstain from the temptations of a rich human history in favor a near past, but not in an effort to change it, but to live it once more. I travel to 2017 to see and feel the love, pain, and loss of it all, just one more time. Furthermore, I park my car fixed between two warehouses scarred with rust and decay. Furthermore, I know this farm well, it's where I spent almost every morning of the summer of 2017, working for a man I have come to know well, but at this moment in time, have yet to meet. Vernon May sits atop a damp stump, a mountain of logs and wood to his back. I make my way into his kingdom of lumber, as he greets me with a warm smile hidden behind a thick gray beard. Introducing myself to him for the first, and what is now the second time, I refrain from embracing him, instead sticking my hand out to be shaken as a stranger, and not a friend. Mr. May, or Vernon as he will insist I call him in the months to come, walks me over to a wood splitter caked in sawdust and grease. Pretending not to know how it works, I let Vernon explain how it splits the unprocessed wood before us, before turning and leaving me to work. In the past, I feared doing something wrong, breaking something so expensive, but as a tourist of my own past, I know Vernon put his trust in me, believed in me, from the moment we met. I shouldn't know how he deeply he cares for everyone in his life, that he wants nothing more than to see me succeed, but standing there alone on his farm, I'm grateful I do. Five weeks later, a light rain beats down on my exposed skin. I could've dressed for the weather, like everything else, I knew it would rain today. But in my reliving of 2017, I need everything to be the same-to feel the same. Two weeks ago, Vernon and I used his truck to move the splitter to his backyard, as he has sung along to Disturbed's cover of The Sound of Silence, teasing his time as a rock singer. I hesitantly lock the lever of the splitter upward, knowing it will cause the hydraulic line to burst and spew boiling fluid, just as it had done before. Vernon drops his attention from the pavilion he is constructing, racing up to me in an instant. As I knew he would, he ignores the damage to the splitter, ensuring I wasn't burned. He does not scorn me, he does not fire me, he simply puts his arm around me, thanking God for keeping me safe. It is this moment and so many like it that have brought me back to 2017, eager to feel the compassion, love, and friendship of such a great man. However, it is also these moments that tear me apart as I pull out of Vernon's driveway three weeks later having collected my final paycheck. I want to burst through the screen door of Vernon's secluded cabin, pleading him to stay home on May 7th, 2018, but I know that I can't. Vernon will go to work in his blue sunglasses and faded hat, and he will tragically and suddenly pass away in an accident on his way home. I can't change this, I can't fight this, so I drive away, finding solace in the fact that I got to hear him sing, meet his wife and children, and laugh with him, just one last time. |
Essay:Throughout high school I planned to major in computer science. Yet when the time came to choose a college, I began to second guess myself. I was unsure if computer science was still what I wanted to study, or rather what I had been pressured to study by my friends and family. My saving grace came in the form of an apprenticeship with Samsung Austin Semiconductor. I accepted the apprenticeship with hopes of working professionally in the field of computer science to see if I was truly passionate about it. It came as a surprise to me, however, when my job title came across as an equipment technician. I was to perform maintenance on one of their many fleets of multi-million dollar machines. For a while this upset me, as it was not at all what I expected. Yet as time went on, I started to enjoy my work. I was learning how these impressive machines worked, as well as how they made even more impressive semiconductors. Through this experience I realized that's always what interested me. My time in robotics was spent wiring the electronics for our robot. I was interested in how each part worked and what it did, as well as how our software team would utilize it. This realization is what led me to discovering the field of computer engineering. While working at Samsung I was still taking classes at Austin Community College full-time. However, after a while it became clear that the apprenticeship wasn't headed in a direction that supported my academic interests. So, I decided to leave the apprenticeship and start taking prerequisite classes for my degree. I had a lot of ground to cover, so the next semester I delved myself into several advanced math and science classes. While ACC is a wonderful school district with great professors, it simply doesn't have the courses necessary to provide me with the credits for my major. This is what led me to Texas A&M. A university with an overwhelming community of faculty and students alike. An amazing and accredited computer engineering program. It also lays the pathway for me to challenge myself, with its numerous research programs and community engineering projects. These resources TAMU provides makes me certain that I have all I need to become a successful computer engineer. My transcript has a few inconsistencies for which I have no excuse. However, it was an experience that allowed me to find out what I am passionate about and guide my future in a different direction. I am confident that I would grow academically at Texas A&M. The to be surrounded by like-minded people in something I am passionate about makes me certain of this. Im just hoping for a bit of feedback on what Ive said and if I need to addremove anything. I feel good about my first few paragraphs, but not so much the last two and I am unsure what to add. | Essay:Throughout high school I planned to major in computer science. Yet when the time came to choose a college, I began to second guess myself. I was unsure if computer science was still what I wanted to study, or rather what I had been pressured to study by my friends and family. My saving grace came in the form of an apprenticeship with Samsung Austin Semiconductor. I accepted the apprenticeship with hopes of working professionally in the field of computer science to see if I was truly passionate about it. It came as a surprise to me, however, when my job title came across as an equipment technician. I was to perform maintenance on one of their many fleets of multi-million dollar machines. For a while this upset me, as it was not at all what I expected. Yet as time went on, I started to enjoy my work. I was learning how these impressive machines worked, as well as how they made even more impressive semiconductors. Through this experience I realized that's always what interested me. My time in robotics was spent wiring the electronics for our robot. I was interested in how each part worked and what it did, as well as how our software team would utilize it. This realization is what led me to discovering the field of computer engineering. While working at Samsung I was still taking classes at Austin Community College full-time. However, after a while it became clear that the apprenticeship wasn't headed in a direction that supported my academic interests. So, I decided to leave the apprenticeship and start taking prerequisite classes for my degree. I had a lot of ground to cover, so the next semester I delved myself into several advanced math and science classes. While ACC is a wonderful school district with great professors, it simply doesn't have the courses necessary to provide me with the credits for my major. This is what led me to Texas Camp;M. A university with an overwhelming community of faculty and students alike. An amazing and accredited computer engineering program. It also lays the pathway for me to challenge myself, with its numerous research programs and community engineering projects. These resources TAME provides makes me certain that I have all I need to become a successful computer engineer. My transcript has a few inconsistencies for which I have no excuse. However, it was an experience that allowed me to find out what I am passionate about and guide my future in a different direction. I am confident that I would grow academically at Texas Camp;M. The to be surrounded by like-minded people in something I am passionate about makes me certain of this. I'm just hoping for a bit of feedback on what I've said and if I need to add remove anything. I feel good about my first few paragraphs, but not so much the last two, and I am unsure what to add. |
Can someone please help me verify this answer? is it good enough? I have chosen the University of Waterloo for undergraduate studies because I aspire to pursue a career in computer science in the near future. My goal is to become a successful software programmer because I love simplifying complex problems and finding out alternative ways to one single problem. I have done basic programming in high school and I really enjoy writing programs and debugging them. My reason for choosing the software engineering program and the computer science program is to acquire top quality knowledge in my field of interest from the number 1 university in Canada for computer science and the co-op program which will allow me to implement everything I learn and to gain valuable working experience alongside my education and will prepare me for the employment once I graduate. (800 characters) | Can someone please help me verify this answer? Is it good enough? I have chosen the University of Waterloo for undergraduate studies because I aspire to pursue a career in computer science in the near future. My goal is to become a successful software programmer because I love simplifying complex problems and finding out alternative ways to one single problem. I have done basic programming in high school and I really enjoy writing programs and debugging them. My reason for choosing the software engineering program and the computer science program is to acquire top quality knowledge in my field of interest from the number 1 university in Canada for computer science and the co-op program which will allow me to implement everything I learn and to gain valuable working experience alongside my education and will prepare me for the employment once I graduate. (800 characters) |
Senior year of high school I took an AP art class where each student had to pick a theme and stick to it. I struggled on finding a theme, until one day searching for supplies in the messy closet I found old bolts of fabric and a make shift dress form and the idea of sewing flashes in my head. Since I had taken sewing classes at Joann Fabrics, I thought my completing the theme would be easy. Once the theme was approved I began sewing. At that time, I had just bought the first vintage Simplicity pattern, a 1960's Jiffy mod jumper. After a week, the hunter green jumper was completed. Eager to check the grade, I was confused. The letter grade on the screen read a "B" I had expected a higher grade. The next class, I approached my teacher asked for an explanation of the grade. She told me that the hem of the dress was wrong. I proceed to ask her was wrong about it. She responded that it didn't look right. Feeling frustrated, I took a deep breath & I kept my cool and asked if I fixed the hem would she give my grade another chance. She agreed and once I fixed the hem my grade changed to an "A-" In that moment, I was glad I kept my cool instead of developing an attitude. Criticism isn't meant to hurt you, rather to help you reach your full potential. | Senior year of high school I took an AP art class where each student had to pick a theme and stick to it. I struggled on finding a theme, until one day searching for supplies in the messy closet I found old bolts of fabric and a make shift dress form and the idea of sewing flashes in my head. Since I had taken sewing classes at Joann Fabrics, I thought my completing the theme would be easy. Once the theme was approved I began sewing. At that time, I had just bought the first vintage Simplicity pattern, a 1960s Jiffy mod jumper. After a week, the hunter green jumper was completed. Eager to check the grade, I was confused. The letter grade on the screen read a "B" I had expected a higher grade. The next class, I approached my teacher asked for an explanation of the grade. She told me that the hem of the dress was wrong. I proceed to ask her was wrong about it. She responded that it didn't look right. Feeling frustrated, I took a deep breath camp; I kept my cool and asked if I fixed the hem would she give my grade another chance. She agreed and once I fixed the hem my grade changed to an "A-" At that moment, I was glad I kept my cool instead of developing an attitude. Criticism isn't meant to hurt you, rather to help you reach your full potential. |
Whenever I reflect back to my childhood memories in Venezuela, I remember looking up to my dad. My family and I traveled to the United States during the summers when I was younger, and my dad was the one in charge when we were out of the country, since he was the only one who knew how to speak English. I was amazed at how knowledgeable my dad was of the English language, and I wanted to be as intelligent as he was and learn to speak English as well as he did. I have always loved learning about communication and languages. I enjoy watching home videos of me when I was younger, and I always smile to myself. I would create the most ingenious productions, pretending to be a reporter or an interviewer. In one instance, I made my younger sister pretend to be a famous singer while I interviewed her on my talk show. To this day, I still have an innate passion for being a host on a talk show, and having the opportunity to communicate to a wide variety of people from different cultures and backgrounds. Although I had an ideal childhood full of creativity and imagination, there was a tremendous lack of educational opportunities in Venezuela and I wanted something better for my future. So, I decided to move to Texas to further my education and expand on my desire to learn the English language. Moving to another country, to another city, and navigating another language that was not my native tongue was very challenging,but I learned how to get out of my comfort zone and to overcome adversity. My family and self-determination kept me motivated; I knew what I wanted for my future, even if that meant leaving everything I loved in my country. Unfortunately, I did not do very well my first two semesters in college because I was dealing with cultural shock and a language barrier. I cried nearly every day because I did not understand my professors' lectures. However, I gave my all to every single word that I did not comprehend, even if that meant spending all my free time studying. I remained strong, despite the rejections and obstacles that I faced, however; my bravery wavered at times. When I contemplated quitting school and moving back to my country, I could hear my mother's voice crack and weeping when she did not want to hear me say that I was "not enough." She believed that if I was capable of moving to another country where I did not know anyone, I could achieve anything. Being in an unfamiliar country where I had to experience some of the most difficult challenges, made me love people even more, and learned to appreciate the art of communication. Even though I was not an "A" student, I am still proud of my accomplishments. Today, when I watch television, I imagine and see myself there in the future. As a Communication major, I want to help people communicate more effectively as the resource to teach lessons to anyone who looked at me and rejected me, because the best tool that we have is our freedom to express our feelings. After living in Texas for two years, I discovered how much my English had improved when I heard my dad speaking English over the winter break. I realized then that my dad did not speak English perfectly after all, and I smiled to myself. For my entire life, I desired to be as accomplished as my dad, but on that day, I realized that I had done exactly that and even more. | Whenever I reflect back to my childhood memories in Venezuela, I remember looking up to my dad. My family and I traveled to the United States during the summers when I was younger, and my dad was the one in charge when we were out of the country, since he was the only one who knew how to speak English. I was amazed at how knowledgeable my dad was of the English language, and I wanted to be as intelligent as he was and learn to speak English as well as he did. I have always loved learning about communication and languages. Furthermore, I enjoy watching home videos of me when I was younger, and I always smile to myself. Furthermore, I would create the most ingenious productions, pretending to be a reporter or an interviewer. In one instance, I made my younger sister pretend to be a famous singer while I interviewed her on my talk show. To this day, I still have an innate passion for being a host on a talk show, and having the opportunity to communicate to a wide variety of people from different cultures and backgrounds. Although I had an ideal childhood full of creativity and imagination, there was a tremendous lack of educational opportunities in Venezuela and I wanted something better for my future. So, I decided to move to Texas to further my education and expand on my desire to learn the English language. Moving to another country, to another city, and navigating another language that was not my native tongue was very challenging, but I learned how to get out of my comfort zone and to overcome adversity. My family and self-determination kept me motivated; I knew what I wanted for my future, even if that meant leaving everything I loved in my country. Unfortunately, I did not do very well my first two semesters in college because I was dealing with cultural shock and a language barrier. I cried nearly every day because I did not understand my professors' lectures. However, I gave my all to every single word that I did not comprehend, even if that meant spending all my free time studying. I remained strong, despite the rejections and obstacles that I faced, however; my bravery wavered at times. When I contemplated quitting school and moving back to my country, I could hear my mother's voice crack and weeping when she did not want to hear me say that I was "not enough." She believed that if I was capable of moving to another country where I did not know anyone, I could achieve anything. Being in an unfamiliar country where I had to experience some of the most difficult challenges, made me love people even more, and learned to appreciate the art of communication. Even though I was not an "A" student, I am still proud of my accomplishments. Today, when I watch television, I imagine and see myself there in the future. As a Communication major, I want to help people communicate more effectively as the resource to teach lessons to anyone who looked at me and rejected me, because the best tool that we have is our freedom to express our feelings. After living in Texas for two years, I discovered how much my English had improved when I heard my dad speaking English over the winter break. I realized then that my dad did not speak English perfectly after all, and I smiled to myself. For my entire life, I desired to be as accomplished as my dad, but on that day, I realized that I had done exactly that and even more. |
Note: this is a transfer essay A:I didn't play around with computers since I was four, nor did I read the first five chapters of "Algorithms" at the age of eight. I took interest in CS after my freshman year of college. Over the course of summer, I attended an AI bootcamp and took online introductory programming courses. Programming really resonated with me, and I thoroughly embraced the logical and practical nature of it. My current academic goal is to study a curriculum that offers an excellent CS education and cultivates my passion for AI, and I believe UM's Computer Science Engineering program supports my interest. UM's CSE department is one of the best in the country and I am excited to explore the courses it offers. I love working with large amounts of data and very much look forward to taking Dr. Barzan Mozafari's Database class to learn about query optimization and the management of large databases. Learning about the nature of data is useful in building accurate AI's, and I wish to expand my knowledge of the latter by delving into Machine Learning (ML) theory taught by the introductory course, "Introduction to AI." From reading the course description, I can see that this is a perfect entry into AI for me as it involves all the necessary topics to get started, namely ML and Searching. To finish my degree, I intend on taking "Autonomous Robotics," an MDE course that perfectly integrates my interests in CS and AI. Undertaking research projects with my AI team has made me a better computer scientist, and I plan to pursue research opportunities over the summer at UM. I have been following Dr. Chad Jenkins' robotics experiments on National Geographic, and I believe he is one of the best roboticists in the word, and certainly at UM. I would love the opportunity to work with his robotics research team over the summer. My time at my current University has been an eye-opening experience. It has given me time to discover my interests, values, and what I want out of college. I am ready to find a place where I can feel at home, and I believe UM is a place where I can picture myself staying up late at night in the APRIL Lab, building tiny robots wielding twinkies. I hope to contribute my interests and values to the U-M tradition, as I am confident it will be reciprocated, and I'm ready to become a Wolverine. Thanks for any help! I feel like the tone is quite dull and too straight to the point -- don't know if that's a bad thing, a lot people choose to tell vivid stories, maybe different is good? :\ (Also word count is over but I'll fix that later)Any feedback is most welcome :)) | Note: this is a transfer essay A:I didn't play around with computers since I was four, nor did I read the first five chapters of "Algorithms" at the age of eight. I took interest in CS after my freshman year of college. Over the course of summer, I attended an AI boot camp and took online introductory programming courses. Programming really resonated with me, and I thoroughly embraced the logical and practical nature of it. My current academic goal is to study a curriculum that offers an excellent CS education and cultivates my passion for AI, and I believe UM's Computer Science Engineering program supports my interest. UM's CSE department is one of the best in the country, and I am excited to explore the courses it offers. I love working with large amounts of data and very much look forward to taking Dr. Tarzan Mozart's Database class to learn about query optimization and the management of large databases. Learning about the nature of data is useful in building accurate AI's, and I wish to expand my knowledge of the latter by delving into Machine Learning (ML) theory taught by the introductory course, "Introduction to AI." From reading the course description, I can see that this is a perfect entry into AI for me as it involves all the necessary topics to get started, namely ML and Searching. To finish my degree, I intend on taking "Autonomous Robotics," an MDE course that perfectly integrates my interests in CS and AI. Undertaking research projects with my AI team has made me a better computer scientist, and I plan to pursue research opportunities over the summer at UM. I have been following Dr. Chad Jenkins' robotics experiments on National Geographic, and I believe he is one of the best roboticists in the world, and certainly at UM. I would love the opportunity to work with his robotics research team over the summer. My time at my current University has been an eye-opening experience. It has given me time to discover my interests, values, and what I want out of college. I am ready to find a place where I can feel at home, and I believe UM is a place where I can picture myself staying up late at night in the APRIL Lab, building tiny robots wielding Twinkies. I hope to contribute my interests and values to the U-M tradition, as I am confident it will be reciprocated, and I'm ready to become a Wolverine. Thanks for any help! I feel like the tone is quite dull and too straight to the point -- don't know if that's a bad thing, a lot of people choose to tell vivid stories, maybe different is good? :\ (Also word count is over, but I'll fix that later)Any feedback is most welcome :)) |
Now, my academic stats + extracurriculars were pretty average, so I'm pretty sure my acceptance genuinely has ALOT to do with the essay I wrote. So can someone please list down what the strengths and weaknesses of my UPenn essay are? Here's the prompt:How will you explore your intellectual and academic interests at the University of Pennsylvania?Please answer this question given the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying. (400-650 words) My response: One long, demeaning stare was all it took for the most confident man I knew to be reduced to nothing. My grandfather was fluent in several of our native Pakistani languages, yet not knowing the English language in post-colonial Pakistan could leave anyone and everyone grappling, within themselves, for a speck of esteem. Developing an understanding of communicational conundrums with regard to post-catastrophe socio-economic conditions has piqued my interest since the tender age of nine. Although the scope of my intentions to pursue this interest was initially personal, my involvement with the National Institute of Historical and Cultural Research has given rise to a want for exploring this societal dilemma across multinational horizons. It is at the College of Arts and Sciences that I aim to quench my thirst for knowledge of ethnic complexities through the Communications programme. In particular, I am deeply intrigued by the multifaceted approach of the programme wherein it intersects with psychology, history, sociology, and political science. To this end, UPenn's academic philosophy greatly resonates with my desire to dip my toes into all areas of study that push past the confines of my mind's capacity. For instance, while studying Media and South Asia (COMM 214) with Professor Murali Balaji, I will be able to grasp his vast knowledge of South Asian cultural norms which I can then use to engage in intellectual debate during Professor Romano's Philosophical Problems of Journalism (COMM 377) lecture. I am, however, aware that academic exploration at The College of Arts and Sciences isn't limited to the classroom and of this, I hope to take the utmost advantage by contributing to research at The Center for Advanced Research in Global Communication, aided by the guidance of seasoned mentors like Marwan M. Kraidy whose extensive research on global media systems, in particular, will inevitably prove to be a crucial tool in refining my journalistic capabilities. Furthermore, I am grossly drawn to the "learning by doing" approach of the Insititute for Public Service, through which I hope to develop a more holistic understanding of how media, in all of its forms, affects the life of the common man. My fervor for Communication finds its roots in my longing to improve the current state of Pakistani media. Whilst interning for The Tempest, a DC-based online multimedia company, I had the opportunity to take under my wing the stories exploring Pakistanis from all walks of life; it was eye-opening how much the sufferings of people, from highschoolers to sex workers in Heera Mandi had in common, all due to the governmental and cultural restraints on the media's ability to portray their day-to-day struggles. Itching to discover more, I decided to conduct my own research by surveying people from opposite ends of the socio-economic spectrum in my hometown of Lahore. This experience gave way to a newfound understanding within me of how badly society, at large, had to suffer at the hands of a media having no actual liberty, but just a "free" facade, an insight that continues to encourage me to seek answers beyond every ordinary curriculum in the world. In this pursuit of mine, I believe a Penn experience will prove to be a life-long confidante, arming me with all that I need to probe into the crossroads of media accessibility, post-catastrophe communication norms, and the relationship these factors share with social class and income. Please let me know. thanks in advance! :)) also, the more the feedback, the merrier. | Now, my academic stats + extracurriculars were pretty average, so I'm pretty sure my acceptance genuinely has LOT to do with the essay I wrote. So can someone please list down what the strengths and weaknesses of my Penn essay are? Here's the prompt:How will you explore your intellectual and academic interests at the University of Pennsylvania? Please answer this question given the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying. (400-650 words) My response: One long, demeaning stare was all it took for the most confident man I knew to be reduced to nothing. My grandfather was fluent in several of our native Pakistani languages, yet not knowing the English language in post-colonial Pakistan could leave anyone and everyone grapples, within themselves, for a speck of esteem. Developing an understanding of communication conundrums with regard to post-catastrophe socio-economic conditions has piqued my interest since the tender age of nine. Although the scope of my intentions to pursue this interest was initially personal, my involvement with the National Institute of Historical and Cultural Research has given rise to a want for exploring this societal dilemma across multinational horizons. It is at the College of Arts and Sciences that I aim to quench my thirst for knowledge of ethnic complexities through the Communications program. In particular, I am deeply intrigued by the multifaceted approach of the program wherein it intersects with psychology, history, sociology, and political science. To this end, Penn's academic philosophy greatly resonates with my desire to dip my toes into all areas of study that push past the confines of my mind's capacity. For instance, while studying Media and South Asia (COMM 214) with Professor Mural Balaji, I will be able to grasp his vast knowledge of South Asian cultural norms which I can then use to engage in intellectual debate during Professor Romano's Philosophical Problems of Journalism (COMM 377) lecture. I am, however, aware that academic exploration at The College of Arts and Sciences isn't limited to the classroom and of this, I hope to take the utmost advantage by contributing to research at The Center for Advanced Research in Global Communication, aided by the guidance of seasoned mentors like Marian M. Tried whose extensive research on global media systems, in particular, will inevitably prove to be a crucial tool in refining my journalistic capabilities. Furthermore, I am grossly drawn to the "learning by doing" approach of the Institute for Public Service, through which I hope to develop a more holistic understanding of how media, in all of its forms, affects the life of the common man. My fervor for Communication finds its roots in my longing to improve the current state of Pakistani media. Whilst interning for The Tempest, a DC-based online multimedia company, I had the opportunity to take under my wing the stories exploring Pakistanis from all walks of life; it was eye-opening how much the sufferings of people, from homeschoolers to sex workers in Hera Mandy had in common, all due to the governmental and cultural restraints on the media's ability to portray their day-to-day struggles. Itching to discover more, I decided to conduct my own research by surveying people from opposite ends of the socio-economic spectrum in my hometown of Lahore. This experience gave way to a newfound understanding within me of how badly society, at large, had to suffer at the hands of a media having no actual liberty, but just a "free" facade, an insight that continues to encourage me to seek answers beyond every ordinary curriculum in the world. In this pursuit of mine, I believe a Penn experience will prove to be a life-long confidante, arming me with all that I need to probe into the crossroads of media accessibility, post-catastrophe communication norms, and the relationship these factors share with social class and income. Please let me know. Thanks in advance! :)) also, the more the feedback, the merrier. |
1) Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied to more than one program please discuss your interest in each program. (900 character limit) My current educational goal is to successfully and efficiently study in the engineering field; computer engineering being my primary goal. My ambition is motivated by my strong interest in computer systems, working with various types of hardware, and operating several programming languages when designing and constructing various projects. Apart from the fact that the University of Waterloo has the largest faculty of engineering in Canada, the reason I would like to attend the University of Waterloo is due to the outstanding and successful co-op programs which the University of Waterloo offers. By studying at the University of Waterloo, I will be able to gain much more experience in my desired field from various co-op terms. I am fond of the idea of gaining work experience while I study, as I believe this is the optimal way to be educated in any field of engineering. Thank you for the response and feedback | 1) Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied to more than one program please discuss your interest in each program. (900-character limit) My current educational goal is to successfully and efficiently study in the engineering field; computer engineering being my primary goal. My ambition is motivated by my strong interest in computer systems, working with various types of hardware, and operating several programming languages when designing and constructing various projects. Apart from the fact that the University of Waterloo has the largest faculty of engineering in Canada, the reason I would like to attend the University of Waterloo is due to the outstanding and successful co-op programs which the University of Waterloo offers. By studying at the University of Waterloo, I will be able to gain much more experience in my desired field from various co-op terms. I am fond of the idea of gaining work experience while I study, as I believe this is the optimal way to be educated in any field of engineering. Thank you for the response and feedback |
Every Singaporean male is required to serve two years in service to the country essentially delaying our education and subsequent entrance into the workforce. Most people see this as a nuisance, but for me, I saw this as an opportunity to better myself as a brother and leader. I have gone through thick and thin with my bunkmates, which has helped mature our relationship into a brotherhood. I see myself as the jokester of the group. The one who would smuggle biscuits to share during jungle exercises, smile and say the training was "too easy" even though my whole body was aching, and crack a joke to boost morale. I've learned to truly be a part of a team and would do whatever it takes to watch them succeed. Being a commander, I realized that a great leader is willing to listen and lead by example. Being a commander has helped me become more empathetic to my men and understand matters from their perspective, and only when I connected with my men did I realize the significance of my role in their lives. Some of my men come from harsh backgrounds- almost to the point where I was the closest parental figure in their lives. For an eighteen-year-old, it was a daunting task. But it is because of them that I strive to be a better role model. So I acknowledge the responsibilities of my rank: to place other's safety above my own, to let no one feel left behind, and to treat their every small problem like my life depended on it. Finding your place in a large organization is never easy. But if there's anything that I've learned from my army days, it's that this journey will help you recognize your significance and guide you towards who you want to become. | Every Singaporean male is required to serve two years in service to the country essentially delaying our education and subsequent entrance into the workforce. Most people see this as a nuisance, but for me, I saw this as an opportunity to better myself as a brother and leader. I have gone through thick and thin with my bunk mates, which has helped mature our relationship into a brotherhood. I see myself as the Forester of the group. The one who would smuggle biscuits to share during jungle exercises, smile and say the training was "too easy" even though my whole body was aching, and crack a joke to boost morale. I've learned to truly be a part of a team and would do whatever it takes to watch them succeed. Being a commander, I realized that a great leader is willing to listen and lead by example. Being a commander has helped me become more empathetic to my men and understand matters from their perspective, and only when I connected with my men did I realize the significance of my role in their lives. Some of my men come from harsh backgrounds- almost to the point where I was the closest parental figure in their lives. For an eighteen-year-old, it was a daunting task. But it is because of them that I strive to be a better role model. So I acknowledge the responsibilities of my rank: to place other's safety above my own, to let no one feel left behind, and to treat their every small problem like my life depended on it. Finding your place in a large organization is never easy. But if there's anything that I've learned from my army days, it's that this journey will help you recognize your significance and guide you towards whom you want to become. |
Thanks. In the summer of 2017, my family and I visited Lebanon, to meet my extended family. I was appalled to see the conditions of many underprivileged children. I wanted to do something for them. I thought of helping them with their academics. These were the children who could not afford to go for expensive tutoring. I tried to spread a word amongst my friends group to help these children. Initially, it took some time to convince my cousins and friends to come together for this cause as all were in vacation mood. But as they started noticing how determined I was even they started showing interest. Initially, I convinced my elder cousin brother to join me. Slowly from a team of two, my team size increased to 10. From our pocket money, we purchased essential guides that could be distributed to these children. Posters were made and books and pens were ready. The whole event took over in 3 weeks, but we were able to help these children understand and do basic math alongside write and read Arabic. I understood the value of good communication skills and the art of sharing and giving back to society. | Thanks. In the summer of 2017, my family and I visited Lebanon, to meet my extended family. I was appalled to see the conditions of many underprivileged children. I wanted to do something for them. Furthermore, I thought of helping them with their academics. These were the children who could not afford to go for expensive tutoring. I tried to spread a word amongst my friends group to help these children. Initially, it took some time to convince my cousins and friends to come together for this cause as all were on vacation mood. But as they started noticing how determined I was even they started showing interest. Initially, I convinced my elder cousin brother to join me. Slowly from a team of two, my team size increased to 10. From our pocket money, we purchased essential guides that could be distributed to these children. Posters were made and books and pens were ready. The whole event took over in 3 weeks, but we were able to help these children understand and do basic math alongside write and read Arabic. I understood the value of good communication skills and the art of sharing and giving back to society. |
The five-year-old thoughts never fade; imagine my horror when the chubby man with his oiled moustache and round spectacles was nowhere to be found around the house! Instead, on his bed now lay a strange figure; protruding cheekbones, drooping eyes and feeble limbs. Subsequently, you could find an emotional seventh-grader digging every corner of the net to find a cure for the grandfather that built his childhood. A majestic and complex machine such as the human body had lost to itself. Dozens of trips around the country, medical tests, operations, and medications later, he succumbed in that same bed to pancreatic cancer. This episode taught me helplessness and the limitations of medicine, but also pointed to discoveries waiting to be made. Last year, I found myself spending the summer amidst the evergreen Chittagong hill tracts. The chirping of the indigenous Houbaropsis bengalensis and the constant clash of the monsoon showers against our ancestral mud house's tin roof every morning never failed to supercharge me for the day to come. I would accompany my aunt, a GP by profession, as she volunteered at the lesser funded orphanages, nursing and old age homes in the district. I was to perform and later document the results of the regular checkups: from blood pressure and sugar to body temperatures. Yet the real experience is what followed- I carefully watched her as she patiently listened to the patient's woes, calmly asked a few questions, looked out for recent abnormalities, suggested tests when required and ultimately traced symptoms back to their diseases. These episodes were elegant works of art I could watch on repeat! From her I learnt the values of compassion, selflessness and sympathy that a doctor embodies. The journey from being a shy introvert to lifting the National Debate Trophy has been full of humility and indispensible experiences. From brilliant coaches to university graduates and professors from diverse socio-economic, cultural and geographical backgrounds, each conversation and argument moulded my perspective, honed my communication skills and enabled me to better understand the complex issues that plague today's status quo. Innumerable tournaments have given me the confidence to take lead when need be and think critically in demanding situations. But above all, debate has taught me to listen and empathize- each person, whether a fellow debater or a patient in need, has their own unique story and perspective. Yet, it was only when I came down bedridden with chicken pox that my fascination diseases and pathogens followed. The doctor told me that my body would make sure I'd never have the disease again. Intrigued by the beautiful mechanism of immunisation, biology classes were never dull. "Because rhinoviruses can easily mutate and fool our body." "So even common cold can be fatal for an AIDS patient?" The discussions went further than the classroom. It was perhaps this fascination for disease mechanisms that inspired my senior year paper on sepsis, a sort of blood infection claiming over 200,000 annual clinical deaths, yet to have its own permanent cure. With potentially millions of microbes still unknown to humanity, the future of medicine may experience new diseases and epidemics- and this is the future I wish to serve. The noble field of medicine is the perfect blend of sciences and humanities. I want to utilize the social skills I've nurtured and channel my aptitude towards applied sciences into a career alleviating the pain of patients. The feeling of relief, reassurance and remedy upon successful diagnosis and treatment is what I believe the best part about being a doctor; and I wish to experience it firsthand. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx This statement might seem very disjointed, I want to be able to relate paragraphs to each other. It's alot over the word limit and I want to be able to improve on that too. Thanks in advance for any input! Side Note: This is for admission to a medical college that accepts students directly from high school for a six-year course. | The five-year-old thoughts never fade; imagine my horror when the chubby man with his oiled mustache and round spectacles was nowhere to be found around the house! Instead, on his bed now lay a strange figure; protruding cheekbones, drooping eyes and feeble limbs. Subsequently, you could find an emotional seventh-grader digging every corner of the net to find a cure for the grandfather that built his childhood. A majestic and complex machine such as the human body had lost to itself. Dozens of trips around the country, medical tests, operations, and medications later, he succumbed in that same bed to pancreatic cancer. This episode taught me helplessness and the limitations of medicine, but also pointed to discoveries waiting to be made. Last year, I found myself spending the summer amidst the evergreen Chittagong hill tracts. The chirping of the indigenous Houbaropsis bengalensis and the constant clash of the monsoon showers against our ancestral mud house's tin roof every morning never failed to supercharge me for the day to come. I would accompany my aunt, a GP by profession, as she volunteered at the lesser funded orphanages, nursing and old age homes in the district. I was to perform and later document the results of the regular checkups: from blood pressure and sugar to body temperatures. Yet the real experience is what followed- I carefully watched her as she patiently listened to the patient's woes, calmly asked a few questions, looked out for recent abnormalities, suggested tests when required and ultimately traced symptoms back to their diseases. These episodes were elegant works of art I could watch on repeat! From her, I learned the values of compassion, selflessness and sympathy that a doctor embodies. The journey from being a shy introvert to lifting the National Debate Trophy has been full of humility and indispensable experiences. From brilliant coaches to university graduates and professors from diverse socio-economic, cultural and geographical backgrounds, each conversation and argument molded my perspective, honed my communication skills and enabled me to better understand the complex issues that plague today's status quo. Innumerable tournaments have given me the confidence to take lead when need be and think critically in demanding situations. But above all, debate has taught me to listen and empathize-each person, whether a fellow debater or a patient in need, has their own unique story and perspective. Yet, it was only when I came down bedridden with chicken pox that my fascination diseases and pathogens followed. The doctor told me that my body would make sure I'd never have the disease again. Intrigued by the beautiful mechanism of immunization, biology classes were never dull. "Because rhinoviruses can easily mutate and fool our body." "So even common cold can be fatal for an AIDS patient?" The discussions went further than the classroom. It was perhaps this fascination for disease mechanisms that inspired my senior year paper on sepsis, a sort of blood infection claiming over 200,000 annual clinical deaths, yet to have its own permanent cure. With potentially millions of microbes still unknown to humanity, the future of medicine may experience new diseases and epidemics- and this is the future I wish to serve. The noble field of medicine is the perfect blend of sciences and humanities. I want to utilize the social skills I've nurtured and channel my aptitude towards applied sciences into a career alleviating the pain of patients. The feeling of relief, reassurance and remedy upon successful diagnosis and treatment is what I believe the best part about being a doctor; and I wish to experience it firsthand. Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx This statement might seem very disjointed, I want to be able to relate paragraphs to each other. It's a lot over the word limit and I want to be able to improve on that too. Thanks in advance for any input! Side Note: This is for admission to a medical college that accepts students directly from high school for a six-year course. |